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Twisted Triangles ch. 41
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Previously:
“Fine.” He finally said while he got up from the table. There goes the pleasant welcome home dinner we were supposed to have. “If you guys want this to be a meal without the guy that’s fine. Tina.” He ended his rant holding his hand out to Tina. She sat unmoving, but kept her eyes on him. They waited it out for a while until my very pig-headed brother took the hint and stomped out of the room.
“You shouldn’t have done that Tina.” Grace adds. All the easy going banter that was about to begin, now has no chance of starting. I knew this was a bad idea. No scratch that, Alice told me that this was going to be a very bad idea.
“Why was that bad?”
“Because you know how sensitive he is. Especially about all of this. Look you, Bette, and I may have moved on past you guys’ little thing all those months ago, but I bet that’s all he thinks about when Bette and you are in the same room. It’s just not fair to him.” I knew it was bullshit. The way Alice started to move around in her chair, requiring Shane to restrain her, also knew. I just pray that Grace is just trying to help Tina and she doesn’t believe any of this. As for Tina, her face said it all.
“So what, I’m supposed to do, run after him every time he has a problem with what Bette says to me. Or when I say something to her? Is that what you think I should do, Gracie?”
Chapter 41 Tina’s POV
“Just don’t do it Tina. Just don’t. I know what I saw.”
“Well why don’t you tell me what I was you saw exactly.”
“You and her, holding a flame or something.”
“So you saw something like what? What are saying to me?”
“You and Bette.” He said while throwing his hands roughly on his hips. “When is this going to end? You promised me that this thing between you two was long past dead. But I have to tell you Tina, it didn’t look that way to me.”
“I don’t know what you want me to say, Eric. We are just friends.”
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I would love to read the whole story. Could you please post the first 40 chapters!?!!?
OMG! Welcome back Laurelite! I was so disappointed when you stopped posting chapters of Twisted Triangles. Imagine how shocked I was to see a NEW chapter after all these years. I haven’t even read it yet and I know it’s going to be great. For readers who haven’t read the first 40 chapters, do yourself a favor and pull up this author in the search and start from the beginning. I promise you will not be disappointed. This story has one of the most memorable chapters EVER, and I still think about this story any time I hear Fiona Apples’ song Criminal. So again, welcome back Laurelite, and I hope you will be sticking around for a long while to come.
Ok.. I’ve read and skimmed the back story.. It is good but there were a lot of twists and turns, sometimes hard to follow and a lot of build up in places with no payout, but with that said you have a great storyline and most of the time when I’ve just had with this story you write an amazingly sweet B&T chapter.. I hope they find their way through and actually work it out..
But I must say I love how you write Tina with so much edge and feistiness its so awesome.. Please keep that up.. I really do want to see how this turns out and plus I would to see Tina rip Grace a new one and tell Eric where to get off!!!
I complain but as you can see I’m still here reading so you must being something right..
Ironically I say.. PPS
I agree with LishaLove. As the writer please give us dialogue tags so we know who’s speaking, many times that’s not clear so I’m lost. There are good essays on fiction writer’s sites on using dialogue tags if you’d like to learn more. It would help us follow your storytelling which I agree has great energy but is all over the place.
I’m not saying that the dialogue is all over the place per say.. I’m just saying that it’s sometimes hard to follow when you do the POV’s right behind each other.. Sometimes not all the time..
I love your dialogue between characters and your character development and I was mostly talking about in the beginning.. I don’t want to sound overly critical because that’s not my intent.. You have a great story, it has humor, angst, heart and very well developed characters.. I’m just hopping that they can get past the angst, dropped their baggage, I.e. Eric and Grace and move toward having a great relationship, which you give us awesome glimpses of and then snatch away from us!!!
Please put them together soon and have them each rip their respective partners a new one before they leave them.. And I would not be opposed to Tina kicking Grace’s a-s either.. Lol I’m just saying!!!
As promised, can read all 40 chapters, which had
an entire afternoon, however conclude all, I confess that
I loved it! is an amazing story !!
Loved the kitchen scene where Bette comes ago
Tina when she was making the sauce, the scene
they were dancing to the music Fiona.
In short, I loved!
please do not take nine years
to leave the next rsrsrsrsrs chapters.
10 Stars.
Note: sorry my both in English as it is not my official language
I’m from Brazil.