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    Bitter Reckoning, Chapter 6

    “Shit that hurts,” Martin said whimpering.

    Bette felt behind him. His head was damp, and she pulled her hand away and found blood. She pointed to Katie and LoriAnn. “Make them stop, Rita. They can’t get inside.”

    Tina had produced a bandana from her coat and held it to the back of Martin’s head. The wind was blowing her hair into her eyes and she spit it from her mouth. “We need to get the bleeding to stop,” Tina said. “Help me get him inside,” she said to Kit.

    She and Kit got Martin up and held him between them and moved with him down the path. Bette got to LoriAnn who was a weeping mess on the ground.

    “He went inside, he’s inside, God, Bette, he’s inside,” she cried.

    Katie was crying, too, and she hugged LoriAnn to her.

    Rita cussed and spit and brought her walkie-talkie up. “Harlan, Doyle, you guys read me?” She depressed the button and nothing but static came through. She looked at Bette. “I gave them the other one when they insisted on going after that drone. It told them not to go, I tried to stop them. I swear, Bette, I tried to stop them.”

    Bette yanked the walkie-talkie from Rita’s hand and spoke into it. “Doyle? You read me? Harlan, answer me.”

    Nothing.

    “What happened?” She glared at Rita, who stuttered and shook her head. “Goddamn it, Rita, why did they go inside? How did they even get in there?”

    Rita’s black hair blew about her like some wild banshee and her face contorted with grief and fear. The laptop she’d been holding to monitor the images from the drone camera lay yards away in the dirt. She pointed toward the ruins, to an area toward the far north side.

    “Doyle was flying over that corner, trying to dip it inside. Harlan was watching over my shoulder and giving him directions. He was determined to get that inside shot you wanted with the beds and…” She huffed for breath. “I don’t know what Doyle did, but the quad suddenly fell out of the sky, dropped right down into the second story area.”

    Bette looked over to where she’d pointed. There was no more corner, just a concave of adobe walls and dust rising up into the wind. “I don’t understand,” Bette said. “Why are they inside?”

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    1. It’s a common trope in horror films for there to be suspicion surrounding all the characters, keeps you wondering!

      I offer this a day early and a little longer. I might have to skip a week or offer a very short chapter next week, so I’m buttering you up.

      Like I indicated in the last chapter’s comment, I think most of you have figured out part of the who/what is causing mischief, but not the why exactly. Hope the mystery keeps you coming back for more.

      Thanks for your comments!
      xo

      • I seem to have those brief “ah ha” moments of clarity, then as quickly as they arrive, they are gone.so, as the crumbs are continuing to be collected along the pathways to this story,

        let us see. harlan “recommends” tina to bette to work with bette, which brings me to the question.since it is established that tina is the focus and target of whomever or whatever is coming after her, what IS IT in tina’s generational past that has the spirits and beings gravitating towards her? was it another of tina’s ancestral past that has the spirits trying to communicate to her by showing and telling her ONE of their group is willing to kill to keep those who believe silent? is tina able to communicate with those restless spirits and if so can she convey their message of injustice and forgotten neglect to the world?

        is this the tale of generations paying for the sins of their fore/fathers? skinwalkers generally take the shape and form of animals but the spirits here are vengeful OR are they sending a message to tina by attempting to get her attention and call truth to the one who truly is the evil one amongst them all?

        and the putrid smell noted and described…can that be some form of decay that is not quite ‘dead” and continues to walk amongst them to keep guard over their restless spirits of the undead? so many possibilities and ways to interpret your vision and tale.

        again, another breathtaking adventure through your eyes by being able to visit a part of history. thank you for taking the time to share with us. Now, its OSCARS time….

      • Oh, how I have missed me some BenMac! Not sure how so much time has passed since I last read any FanFic. Hell, I’m not sure how long it’s been since I’ve read anything other than food labels and 5th grade homework, But something beckoned me back to the site, and I’m thrilled to see my favorite author still active and kicking ass!

        As per my usual, I’ve devoured these 6 chapters, and await the next installment with bated breath. In the mean time, I’ll be catching up on the other your other stories I have missed.

        Always xxx
        Amber

    2. Nice surprise to find out next chapter earlier than Sunday.
      Ok, BenMac i must admit about little trick – you always be one of two authors in this site, which story i give score five from five even before i read them.
      1) I don’t like Rita – can she be next victim?:)
      2) I don’t understand also why all telling the story about Bette and her father after fire like kidnaping. He has full right (after her mother died) and full sole guardianship about his daughter.
      3) Bette still doesn’t complete believe Tina about Harlan
      4) Alice and Doyle – Harlan? Who’s next?
      5) “Long fingers” – i like that.
      6) “You are my family, and I promise on that sacred bond, that this body”—he motioned down his front—“would never harm you or your friends.” – this body, bot if you’re werewolf (think yourself)

    3. Hi BM

      This chapter is more than wonderful.

      So, Harlan was the one obsessed with the assassination of the girls, even before Bette; what is weird for me is that Harlan has been hurt three times and always mysteriously or miraculously heals very quickly (has him a pact with some evil? or has him some power to heal himself?). ????

      Harlan forcing Doyle to get the falling drone from the second floor, that was stupid (or on purpose) it was already known that Doyle could get caught and died, as Tina mentioned in the former chapter, the walls were about to crumble.????

      Harlan is an angry and bitter man, he may have cut the wires of the radio, apparently, he wants them to stay there in the school for a while, and after the accident of Doyle, they may need to remain there until finding him or his body.????

      Is Tina really targeted? Weird again, the material was shot by Doyle and Tina was loading it to the computer and she saw the face of the ghost girl, someone is messing with her head, skinwalkers could do that.????

      Poor Bette, having a pedophile as a father (who even told her that her mom was a prostitute) maybe he started the fire, and she didn’t even know her mother, that is very sad.

      In the middle of the horror, love is blossoming, which is really nice????

      Thank you so much for the excellent chapter, I hope you will be able to post something next week, but no pressures, (who am I kidding?).

      Waiting anxiously for the update.

      P

    4. What a fantastic update!

      There are stranges things happening and the only one i suspect have somthing to about it is Harlan. Interesting he was the one that was obsessed with what happened to those girls.

      Further more why is Harlan so stinky and seems to recover from his injures so fast? I don’t trust him.

      I hope that they will find Doyle, maybe he isn’t that injured but it doesn’t look good.

      So Tina & Bette admitted they like each other and will go on a date.

      BenMac, i hope you will be able to post a short chapter this week.

      Thank you for the update!

    5. Might be reading too much into it but I’m starting to wonder if that was even Tina who had that encounter with Bette. Apparently some entity can shape shift and that encounter was just a bit odd…specially what Tina said about liking being a bit scared of Bette….out of place after all that has happened. Poo Bette if that wasn’t real Tina or if something had happened to Tina for her to change her behavior. Could it be Ghost sickness, is that why Kit wants her cleansed?

      Also mayb that stank is because it’s the dead spirit (chindi) and not Harlan we’re witnessing in the stinky parts of the story. The description of the smell reminds me of corpses and decay.

      Lovely story BenMac! Thank you for spending time writing!

    6. Wow! What an update! The plot thickens right when the storm is about to hit them.
      Great writing, BenMac.
      At the moment I’m suspicious of everyone, just like they all were with the destroyed radio ;)
      I’m happy to wait longer than a week for an update. Your story is so worth it.

    7. Okay, so my first mistake was trying to catch up on your story in bed, in the dark, late last night. My second mistake was reading it on a windy night after everyone else in the house was asleep. Every creak and banging noise had me thinking I could smell something decaying. I actually whispered WTF? It freaked me out enough, I had to investigate and discovered it was my gassy dog sleeping several feet away,

      You’re hitting just the right tone, BenMac. I found myself reading faster and faster at the scary points. By the way, your hint dropping is very subtle. Well done! Can’t wait to see how this unfolds.

    8. This is really strange stuff. How the heck does Harlan seem to escape serious harm when others don’t. I am making the assumption that he is causing all the problems they are having. Didn’t trust him from the very beginning, still don’t. I think Kit also suspects him of duplicity. Just wish Bette would pay attention to her thoughts, Kit seems to be on to something. At least she has changed her attitude regarding Tina. Scary stuff. Thanks for posting. Take care.

    9. Wow just got caught up..something or someone doesn’t want them to leave…maybe a little of both….love this story…and love that Bette let her guard down just a little to let Tina in…put they have to survive this place in order for Tina to get those fingers where she wants them..lol..I ‘ll be waiting..

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