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Bitter Reckoning, Chapter 6
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Rita pointed to the laptop. “Harlan used the second drone, found the first, said he saw a spot he and Doyle could slip in between the walls and climb up and get it back before you realized what had happened.” She began to cry. “He told Doyle you’d be pissed off because the quad cost so much and he had to get it back or he’d never work again in this business.”
“Fuck the cost of the drone.” Bette was near tears herself.
“So they climbed in. Took a walkie and…” Rita swallowed, lifted her hands. “Did you feel that tremor? It hit then. All of a sudden and that whole wall collapsed on top of them, and…” She swallowed again. “Shit, Bette, what are we going to do?”
Bette stared down at the walkie-talkie in her hand, looked over at LoriAnn who continued to wail and call for Doyle. She lifted the unit to her mouth, pressed the button.
“Harlan, Ryan, you guys read me?” She depressed it, waited, pressed it again. “Come on guys, pick up. You there?”
Katie shot up and pointed. “Look!”
Bette followed her hand. At one of the far windows on the ground floor, a bloody hand waved. She dropped the walkie-talkie and ran toward it, clasped it as soon as she reached it.
“Harlan?” She couldn’t see his face, but recognized the print of his jacket along his outstretched arm.
“I can’t move my legs,” Harlan said panting.
LoriAnn craned her neck. “Where’ Ryan? Where is he?”
Harlan’s hand drooped. “Couldn’t reach him…buried.”
This brought LoriAnn into a new state of hysteria and she started scrambling and trying to crawl through the space Harlan’s hand jutted from.
“Stop,” Bette grabbed her wrists and held them. “You need to go back inside, check on Martin, see if he’s well enough to fix the radio.”
LoriAnn pulled against Bette’s grip and shrieked.
Bette shook her. “We need help, LoriAnn. Help him fix the radio. Call the rangers. Get help now.”
“But Ryan’s inside,” LoriAnn cried.
“And we’ll get him out,” Bette answered. She looked at Katie. “Go with her Katie. Rita and I will get them out.” She gripped Harlan’s hand again. It was sticky with blood, cold, and growing stiff. “Hang on, we’ll get the jacks from the vehicles and lift some of this debris off you.”
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It’s a common trope in horror films for there to be suspicion surrounding all the characters, keeps you wondering!
I offer this a day early and a little longer. I might have to skip a week or offer a very short chapter next week, so I’m buttering you up.
Like I indicated in the last chapter’s comment, I think most of you have figured out part of the who/what is causing mischief, but not the why exactly. Hope the mystery keeps you coming back for more.
Thanks for your comments!
xo
I seem to have those brief “ah ha” moments of clarity, then as quickly as they arrive, they are gone.so, as the crumbs are continuing to be collected along the pathways to this story,
let us see. harlan “recommends” tina to bette to work with bette, which brings me to the question.since it is established that tina is the focus and target of whomever or whatever is coming after her, what IS IT in tina’s generational past that has the spirits and beings gravitating towards her? was it another of tina’s ancestral past that has the spirits trying to communicate to her by showing and telling her ONE of their group is willing to kill to keep those who believe silent? is tina able to communicate with those restless spirits and if so can she convey their message of injustice and forgotten neglect to the world?
is this the tale of generations paying for the sins of their fore/fathers? skinwalkers generally take the shape and form of animals but the spirits here are vengeful OR are they sending a message to tina by attempting to get her attention and call truth to the one who truly is the evil one amongst them all?
and the putrid smell noted and described…can that be some form of decay that is not quite ‘dead” and continues to walk amongst them to keep guard over their restless spirits of the undead? so many possibilities and ways to interpret your vision and tale.
again, another breathtaking adventure through your eyes by being able to visit a part of history. thank you for taking the time to share with us. Now, its OSCARS time….
Oh, how I have missed me some BenMac! Not sure how so much time has passed since I last read any FanFic. Hell, I’m not sure how long it’s been since I’ve read anything other than food labels and 5th grade homework, But something beckoned me back to the site, and I’m thrilled to see my favorite author still active and kicking ass!
As per my usual, I’ve devoured these 6 chapters, and await the next installment with bated breath. In the mean time, I’ll be catching up on the other your other stories I have missed.
Always xxx
Amber
Nice surprise to find out next chapter earlier than Sunday.
Ok, BenMac i must admit about little trick – you always be one of two authors in this site, which story i give score five from five even before i read them.
1) I don’t like Rita – can she be next victim?:)
2) I don’t understand also why all telling the story about Bette and her father after fire like kidnaping. He has full right (after her mother died) and full sole guardianship about his daughter.
3) Bette still doesn’t complete believe Tina about Harlan
4) Alice and Doyle – Harlan? Who’s next?
5) “Long fingers” – i like that.
6) “You are my family, and I promise on that sacred bond, that this body”—he motioned down his front—“would never harm you or your friends.” – this body, bot if you’re werewolf (think yourself)
Surprised & thanks that you offfered this chapter early. Hope that next week you’ll offer a short chapter instead of skip. Thank You!
Hi BM
This chapter is more than wonderful.
So, Harlan was the one obsessed with the assassination of the girls, even before Bette; what is weird for me is that Harlan has been hurt three times and always mysteriously or miraculously heals very quickly (has him a pact with some evil? or has him some power to heal himself?). ????
Harlan forcing Doyle to get the falling drone from the second floor, that was stupid (or on purpose) it was already known that Doyle could get caught and died, as Tina mentioned in the former chapter, the walls were about to crumble.????
Harlan is an angry and bitter man, he may have cut the wires of the radio, apparently, he wants them to stay there in the school for a while, and after the accident of Doyle, they may need to remain there until finding him or his body.????
Is Tina really targeted? Weird again, the material was shot by Doyle and Tina was loading it to the computer and she saw the face of the ghost girl, someone is messing with her head, skinwalkers could do that.????
Poor Bette, having a pedophile as a father (who even told her that her mom was a prostitute) maybe he started the fire, and she didn’t even know her mother, that is very sad.
In the middle of the horror, love is blossoming, which is really nice????
Thank you so much for the excellent chapter, I hope you will be able to post something next week, but no pressures, (who am I kidding?).
Waiting anxiously for the update.
P
What a fantastic update!
There are stranges things happening and the only one i suspect have somthing to about it is Harlan. Interesting he was the one that was obsessed with what happened to those girls.
Further more why is Harlan so stinky and seems to recover from his injures so fast? I don’t trust him.
I hope that they will find Doyle, maybe he isn’t that injured but it doesn’t look good.
So Tina & Bette admitted they like each other and will go on a date.
BenMac, i hope you will be able to post a short chapter this week.
Thank you for the update!
Might be reading too much into it but I’m starting to wonder if that was even Tina who had that encounter with Bette. Apparently some entity can shape shift and that encounter was just a bit odd…specially what Tina said about liking being a bit scared of Bette….out of place after all that has happened. Poo Bette if that wasn’t real Tina or if something had happened to Tina for her to change her behavior. Could it be Ghost sickness, is that why Kit wants her cleansed?
Also mayb that stank is because it’s the dead spirit (chindi) and not Harlan we’re witnessing in the stinky parts of the story. The description of the smell reminds me of corpses and decay.
Lovely story BenMac! Thank you for spending time writing!
Wow! What an update! The plot thickens right when the storm is about to hit them.
Great writing, BenMac.
At the moment I’m suspicious of everyone, just like they all were with the destroyed radio ;)
I’m happy to wait longer than a week for an update. Your story is so worth it.
Okay, so my first mistake was trying to catch up on your story in bed, in the dark, late last night. My second mistake was reading it on a windy night after everyone else in the house was asleep. Every creak and banging noise had me thinking I could smell something decaying. I actually whispered WTF? It freaked me out enough, I had to investigate and discovered it was my gassy dog sleeping several feet away,
You’re hitting just the right tone, BenMac. I found myself reading faster and faster at the scary points. By the way, your hint dropping is very subtle. Well done! Can’t wait to see how this unfolds.
This is really strange stuff. How the heck does Harlan seem to escape serious harm when others don’t. I am making the assumption that he is causing all the problems they are having. Didn’t trust him from the very beginning, still don’t. I think Kit also suspects him of duplicity. Just wish Bette would pay attention to her thoughts, Kit seems to be on to something. At least she has changed her attitude regarding Tina. Scary stuff. Thanks for posting. Take care.
Wow just got caught up..something or someone doesn’t want them to leave…maybe a little of both….love this story…and love that Bette let her guard down just a little to let Tina in…put they have to survive this place in order for Tina to get those fingers where she wants them..lol..I ‘ll be waiting..