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    Bitter Reckoning, Chapter 7

    “Oh my God,” Tina said.

    Katie put her arm around LoriAnn. “I’ll fix the radio,” she said. “I’m good with electronic things. Martin can tell me how to make a soldering tool.”

    He winced, kept his eyes shut. “Get the lighter in my jacket. We’ll need someone’s phone charger, and four batteries. Get the electrical tape out of the toolbox and a sharp knife.”

    Katie started rummaging through the toolbox.

    “My phone charger’s in the RV,” Tina said. She put Martin’s hand in place to hold the ice pack and got up to leave just as Bette and Rita came in with Harlan between them. Kit was right on their tail and helped lay Harlan on one of the cots.

    “Where’s Ryan?” LoriAnn cried.

    Bette took her by the shoulders. “We didn’t see him, but that doesn’t mean—”

    “You left him?”

    “We didn’t see—” Bette began again.

    But right then another clap of thunder shook the roof, causing dust to float down on all of them.

    Harlan coughed and sat up. His head was bleeding. “Bette, it’s going to start raining any moment. It won’t take long for the road to wash out.” He threw his legs over the side of the cot. Blood pooled under his nose; he wiped it away. “Let me unhook my trailer and go in my truck. I got four-wheel drive. I can make it to the highway, maybe all the way to the ranger station before—”

    “You’re in no condition to drive,” Bette said, cutting him off.

    “But he can get the ranger,” LoriAnn interjected.

    Harlan nodded. “You got to let me try.”

    “I can fix the radio,” Katie said. She pointed to Martin. “He can talk me through it.”

    Another loud crack of thunder vibrated around them, this one even closer.

    “There’s no time for that,” Harlan said. He leaned forward and pulled himself up to his feet. “Let me go now before it’s too late.”

    Tina had been watching this exchange, puzzled by the way Harlan’s face seemed to be shifting as if the bones under his skin were disjointed, snapping in and out of place. She was also feeling sorry for LoriAnn. As much as she disliked her, she could see the true terror in her face, hear it in her voice. And Doyle…Tina hung her head a moment and said a silent prayer. She couldn’t even bear to think of him being buried under all that rubble, wondered if he were conscious or in pain.

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    1. It’s the luck of the Irish this weekend! Looky here…ya’ll got a new story form CellaNox and an update from me! It’s a CellMac weekend, or maybe a BenNox one…I dunno! :)~

      Here’s the second to last chapter…a long one since I pulled a bit off the front of chapter 8 (the final next week) to make up for not posting last week.

      I figure most of you got this all worked out, but I can guarantee you that you’ll be surprised by one twist to be revealed next chapter.

      Getting so excited to see the climax!!

      Yeah!
      xoxo
      BenMac

    2. Well, that is going to be some last chapter, isn’t it? Wow. That is really hell breaking loose! That last image of Ryan will stay with me for awhile. It’s nearly midnight over here, there is no way I can go to sleep now – I better go looking for something light to read to get distracted.
      Reading the despription of Harlan’s face changing or morphing I had to think of the Polyjuce Potion from Harry Potter ;)
      Thanks for posting, BenMac, can’t wait for your finale furioso! I just hope that Tina will live.

    3. Well, that is going to be some last chapter, isn’t it? Wow. That is really hell breaking loose! That last image of Ryan will stay with me for awhile. It’s nearly midnight over here, there is no way I can go to sleep now – I better go looking for something light to read to get distracted.
      Reading the despription of Harlan’s face changing or morphing I had to think of the Polyjuce Potion from Harry Potter ;)
      Thanks for posting, BenMac, can’t wait for your finale furioso! I just hope that Tina will live.

    4. I posted this reply already, but after editing some typos my reply was gone – sorry if you see this twice:

      Well, that is going to be some last chapter, isn’t it? Wow. That is really hell breaking loose! That last image of Ryan will stay with me for awhile. It’s nearly midnight over here, there is no way I can go to sleep now – I better go looking for something light to read to get distracted.
      Reading the despription of Harlan’s face changing or morphing I had to think of the Polyjuce Potion from Harry Potter ;)
      Thanks for posting, BenMac, can’t wait for your finale furioso! I just hope that Tina will live.

    5. So, he’s coming for Tina and i hope Bette could save her.

      But i don’t understand one thing – if he it’s Harlan and he wants only some sort of revenge – why he not tried to kill Tina while he was driving with her to the the shooting? They were alone in his car and it was not hard for him.

    6. Hi BM:

      OMG, that was strong, very intense. ????

      Poor Alice, poor Doyle and now poor Tina, I hope she will escape.
      I suspected it was some kind of generational curse; it goes in many ancient cultures “the consequences of sins that we inherited from the parents”. ????

      Now I’m worried about Tina. So, Harlan was fleeing because he was “changing” maybe into something no human. ????

      Maybe Doyle wasn’t really trapped but abducted and killed in another place. As Harlan said in the former chapter “They have him now.” ????

      But Harlan is not innocent, he brought them there to die, and now “they” are playing with Tina.????

      I just could hope Tina will survive and I join BnTinmyhead’s wishes and comment from the last chapter “they have to survive this place in order for Tina to get those fingers where she wants them”????

      Thanks, BM, very nice chapter. I’ll wait anxiously the conclusion ????

      P

    7. Hey BM (a.k.a., fellow pea in a pod). I was much smarter this time and read with all the lights on and music playing in the background. I’m sure glad I did because you were right, this %@#$ just got real.

      So many moving pieces, rolling at a fast clip, yet I had a clear picture of everything going on. Great job pulling that off.

      p.s., I kinda like CellaMac weekend, though you do deserve top billing. (Picture me bowing…I’m not worthy)

    8. My reply from last night got lost somehow, so here’ another try:

      BenMac, that is going to be some last chapter, isn’t it? Wow. That really is all hell breaking loose!
      Your last picture of a dead Ryan stayed in my mind for some time before I fell asleep last night. Well, it wasn’t the brightest idea to read the chapter just before going to bed around midnight.
      I tried to distract myself by thinking of Harlan’s face changing or morphing – that made me think of the Polyjuice Potion from Harry Potter ;-)

      Thanks for posting, BenMac, can’t wait for your finale furioso! I jsut hope that Tina and Bette will live.

    9. Glad I finished this during the day! The strategically placed walkie-talkie was a nice touch.

      Zhenya brings up an interesting point in that Harlan had an opportunity to sacrifice Tina when she first arrived; especially in light of the fact that no one was expecting her.

      I assume the goal of this vengeance is to rid the earth of the bloodline that caused the school tragedy. Can’t wait to find out the additional twist though!

      Excellent as always, my friend.

      Xoxo

    10. Hi BenMac,

      Fantastic update!

      I told you i usually don’t read scary stories or movies, but so far i don’t get nightmares ???? , but you do a fantastic job to scare the shit out of me.

      Sad to read that it only have one more chapter .

      Looking forward to the last chapter!

    11. Hi BenMac,

      What a Fest of Great reading you have lead. Have loved reading BenNox and eagerly await your next posting. Additionally I have my favourite Pie back to accompany my favourite Cuppas.
      A new story promised too so that’s something to look forward too.
      Thank you as usual look forward to more.
      SG

    12. Harlan is going to “hell” with a very loud bang when he does leave this world, he has a lot to answer for, killing innocent people for revenge that had nothing whatsoever to do with the past, just an accident of birth. Sure hope you let Tina escape his wrath. Does Kit still have the rifle, they are sure going to need it to take him out with because he is still there, he never left. He is toying with Tina, hope everyone stays together and not leave her alone because he is very close by just waiting for an opportunity to kill her. I felt like he spiked that tea he gave her on the drive in with something to have her hallucinating, etc. Gosh, he is as crazy as a betsy bug to have planned all this. Didn’t he think all these killings would drive Bette crazy as hell with guilt over their deaths and worry Kit as well. I hope you will explain as much as you can about the shape shifting etc. That was him, at least his hand that Tina saw in that dark corner when she picked up the basketball and heard voices. OMG., oh please don’t let him kill her. GoodLord BenMac, how in the name of all thats holy do you sleep after writing all this stuff and having it in your head? I just heard some kind of noise outside and it scared the sh out of me. Merciful heavens!!!!! Thanks for the update, I think. One chapter left, I bet it will be a doozy!!!.

    13. Ok finally found time to finish reading this great chapter..sad to see it’s all most over…. lots of twists and turns already..cant wait to see what else could hapoen.. but also need to read more about those fingers..lol and it seems I’m not the only one..lol

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