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Broken, Ch. 1
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It was a surprisingly chilly night, so shed dug through her closet and pulled out her old leather jacket. The familiar smell of leather and mothballs filled the car as she drove toward a friends house for a night out.
The radio was on, playing a lineup of promised todays hits and yesterdays favorites, to which she paid little attention. As she crested over the top of a hill, and 3 Doors Downs When Im Gone began coming through the speakers, she noticed what looked like headlights coming in her direction on the wrong side of the road.
Thinking it was someone swerving to avoid an animal or something, she did nothing at first. But when the vehicle didnt move, she realized it wasnt going to and it might be a good idea for her to get out of the way. Still, she waited until the last possible moment, hoping to avoid crashing into the other vehicle should it suddenly travel back into its own lane.
As the headlights rushed toward her, blinding her, she slammed on the brakes and pulled the wheel to the left, aiming her car for the empty side of the road to avoid the oncoming vehicle. Wildly, she though, Im going to make it. As soon as the thought entered her mind did she realize her effort was too little, too late.
Letting go of the steering wheel, she had no time for any more thoughts as the impact happened. She felt and heard nothing, not even sure if shed managed to avoid the car as she fell into unconsciousness as soon as the air bag exploded in her face and her seat belt strained against her body. She never saw or felt the crash, never felt the car spin, never heard the tires go. Nothing.
She awoke sometime later, groggy and confused, not knowing where she was or how long shed been out of it. It could have been a minute, ten minutes, or an hour: she had no idea. Thinking she must be at home in bed dreaming, she glanced around in surprise as she saw the shattered windshield and deflated air bag in front of her. The glass glittering on her clothing in the dim streetlight was a shocking reminder that she hadnt been dreaming what happened.
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I’m going to go with Alice or Dana, I think that each would be an interesting choice. A serious incident would be interesting to explore with the two of them. How they handle it together, how they cope. I think they would be the most interesting.
I am sorry this happened to you..nicely written I think it’s TINA post soon
Not going to guess,I’m always wrong. Good beginning tho. thanks
Sorry to hear about the accident…in a way I do understand what you have going through. I was in an accident some years ago – but in no way the similar injure. I just broke all my ribs in the my back and one of my legs have been put back together with metal. And a few minor cuts here and there. But as you know – I am glad that I am still alive.
Now back to your story. Great update by the way. Looking forward to see who our mystery girl is. Post soon
I can’t imagine such an accident. My heart goes out to you and I hope that the telling will not be as painful. Love your start thanks for bringing it to us
Very intense. I think it’s Bette. Whoever it is, it had to be hard to share; thanks for that.
I am so sorry you had to live this nightmare in real life.I hope you are alright. Foxfire you have me hooked. I have not idea who it is and I love surprises. Don’t make us wait too long though.
Hey foxfire, great start, I really dont want to entertain a guess because I have no clue and I really think it could be anyone. I’m really interested in this story and I know how hard it is to write something that’s semi-autobiographical cause it’s something that i did with my last story. So, best luck with getting through something so emotional and painstaking. It’s a really great beginning!
Thank you for giving us another seemingly fantastic story to read. I too was involved in a really bad and tragic accident. It’s been well over a decade ago; however when there is death involved you tend to be awhile longer than usual getting over it,but with the love of “family and friends”,you will by all means get over it and move on with your life(as it is evident that you and I and regretfully many others have done. This a wonderful story. I believe that I have figured out who the victim is,but because I don’t like second guessing myself and the possibility that I too can be wrong,I will not publish my guess..I am expecting a “Shout Out” soon…
OMG…..This was um……..overwhelming……the thought of this happening is harrowing……wew…..obviously, you are okay…..and I am glad for that……there was someone looking over you…..thanx for this chapter……
WOW..geat first post…love it!! can’t wait to see who it is…post soon..
I’ll give everyone this much of a hint: the leather jacket may not be that much of a hint as you might think. Remember, it was old, so it seemingly could belong to anybody, as they could have owned it when they were younger.
So, while I’m not going to say if anyone is right or wrong yet, I’m just going to say you shouldn’t dismiss any of the characters because of the coat alone.
Thanks!
Really good. I hope you’re all right now.
I think it’s Bette.
it’s really well writin’. i’m sorry though you had to go through all of that,or at least some parts of it.
my guess it’s Alice
Very good. Intense, but well-written.
I think it’s Kit because of the “She’s been hit by a drunk. She couldn’t believe it” lines.
i dont have a clue who it can be ,not a clue ,but im glad youre ok to tell your story,
looks like it could be kit
bette is the clothes freak and that gives her one point,however, the jacket and the drunk driver statement…..
Intense, I hope you
are okay now, i was thinking it might be Kit.
Looking forward to next chapter.
I’d like to hear about what happened to you sometime. Did you suffer any long term injuries? Hope not. Anyway, about this girl…Hmmm, I wonder if it’s Tina.
I am sorry you had to go through this. I think it might be Bette or Tina or Alice. Who knows.
Sorry you had a bad time. some folk say writing about things makes you feel better – lets hope.
I’m going with novembererotica but which? I dunno. I do know I’ll be waiting for the next chapters!
Good start and I think this is Tina and let see what happen next. Post soon, thank you!