Fan Fiction
This story has been set to a rating of PG-13. Age verification is required to proceed.
No Good Deed Goes Unpunished Chapter 23
Login to add story to favorites
(73 votes, average: 3.49 out of 5)You need to be a registered member to rate this post.
Loading ...
Bette forced a smile as she watched the two women gaze back at her. The sad truth was that one of the women in the room Bette would love until the day she died; the other would die loving only Bette.
Sara: we were jut talking about you?
Bette walked into the room placing the three cups of coffee on the rolling tray.
Bette: Really? Anything good?
Tina: No, we were…
Sara cut her off.
Sara: We were sharing Bette Porter sexual experiences.
Bette: Oh god.
Tina smiled at Sara.
Tina: Oh god is right. I had no idea you even knew how to do that!
Bette: Do what?
Sara: You know…
Bette: I don’t think we should be having this conversation!
Tina stood up quickly when she noticed Bette’s face beginning to turn a bright shade of pink.
Tina: Babe, we were just kidding.
Sara: Still can’t take a joke can you Bette?
As the color washed from her face Bette took a seat between the two women.
Bette: Yes I can. I knew you were joking.
Tina turned her attention back to Sara.
Tina: No she didn’t.
Sara smiled coyly.
Sara: I know.
Bette: So really, what were you talking about?
Sara: It’s a secret.
Bette: I hate secrets.
Sara: You only hate them when you aren’t in on them!
Bette: Good point.
Sara rolled the blankets back up over her cold body.
Tina: Maybe you should rest for a little while.
Sara: I think I might just do that.
Bette gave a sympathetic smile.
Bette: We’ll just sit right here ok?
Sara stole a glimpse at Bette while Tina was sipping her coffee. Bette understood perfectly what Sara was saying. She bowed her head and mouthed, “you’re welcome”.
Sara closed her eyes and within minutes she was fast asleep.
Tina: She looks so peaceful.
Bette: Yeah, she does.
Tina stood up form her chair and made her way over to Bette. The brunette patted her lap insisting Tina sit. She wrapped her arms around Bette’s neck and lowered her body to Bette’s.
Comments
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.
flair, I have my kleenexes in hand…so bring it on!!
You just never let us down.. =)
WOW….glad to see you were able to crawl from under your work rock to give us another chapter……hurray!!! LOL
Wonderful idea to take Sara someplace beautiful.
flair that was beautiful. im sitting here with tears in my eyes. we need more people like you in the world. what a wonderful idea about the house. thanks girl. dont work to hard and post as you can. well all be right here.
What you’re doing here is really quite elegant…moving to a “beautiful house on the water”…especially since water is such a dynamic literary symbol. Jung said, “When spirit becomes heavy, it turns to water…Therefore the way of the soul…leads to the water.”
More, please…soon. I need to go find something to make me laugh now.
Blithe smile, lithe limb
She who’s winsome, she wins him
Gold hair with a gentle curl
That’s the girl he chose
And Heaven knows
I’m not that girl
Flyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
Flyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
Fly away. You let me fly so high…
I have stock in Kimberly-Clark.
Simply just love your story. I´m happy to see Bette & Tina together eventhough life just isn´t always fair and Sara, who seems to be a really nice person is going to die at such young age. I´m looking forward to reading the next chapter so please post soon.
very nice chapter, flair. I enjoy your story very much and if it is only once a week…I will wait. take care
Anytime you post is a great day.This is very poigniant and sad but beautiful all at the same time.
This is the only fanfic story I read at this site… can’t wait every morning to check if you have posted a next chapter. I just love this story.. it’s so beautiful and sad and funny at the same time … just LOVE it, thank you!
Can someone hand me a tissue please? That (and all your others) was very good. (*sniffs, but smiles at the thought of B&T having a moment together*)
Can someone hand me a tissue please? That (and all your others) was very good. (*sniffs, but smiles at the thought of B&T having a moment together*)
Oh, man. I am happy for B&T, but, Sara? Even if she’s never had Bette and Tina, and she’s got other people (a given), I’d still feel bad for her(like I do right now), and about her dying. Why can’t Helena die? She isn’t a very nice person. Sara is just TOO NICE to lose.
Well, wherever and however you take me with your fic, flair, I’d still keep on reading. I don’t have much droll and drama in my real life. Some escapes are better than most, and you’re definitely one of the better ones.
Cheers!
They all get alone so well together, Five people that loves each other. One will soon be gone but the love will live on in each ones heart. thanks
Hey you’re back. I missed this story. I can’t get enough of your story telling. great post. It’s sad, but very good.
aggh love thats it i just love you lol!!! ok well thanx for the amazing post!! please update soon thanx byeness<333897589176189
so glad you could post. with all the emotions flowing..sad. post soon!
God, how this line you wrote at the beginning of this so-called transition chapter (… now, please, why should these priceless moments of quietness-before-the-tempest not be essential ones ?) deeply, deeply touched me : “The sad truth was that one of the women in the room Bette would love until the day she died; the other would die loving only Bette.” For me, that’s one of the saddest yet beautiful lines you ever wrote. Honest. It simply gave me a huge emotion in heart… (because I unfortunately relate so well with Sara ? Certainly…)
You know, sometimes my reader’s memory likes to compare scenes in a same story. Like here, with Bette & Tina’s tender moment near to Sara’s so-called sleep.
The basic situation recalls me the one in “Can’t help falling…” when Alice was in the next room during an especially hot lovemaking.
That’s such a great example, for me, of the way you always master the mix of emotions and an amazing balance between opposite feelings : if, in this former triangular scene, the intensity of Alice’s painful jealousy measured up with the intensity of passion, here you wonderfully succeed painting the sweetness of Sara’s movingly unselfish love facing the sweetness of our reunited lovers’ shared moment. So, what could have been a pretty cruel scene became a very beautiful piece of the purest feelings possible…
… with even your author’s trademark : Alex’s sudden appearance to bring a touch of comedy, lighting the too high emotional level !
No wonder you are my biggest weakness on this site, my so talented Rachel/Flair…
By the way, could one dream about something greatest to hear but “When I’m with you, I feel like I’m home” ? Awwww… How melting ! (God, stop to be such a silly emotional girl, poor me… I must be incurable !)
********
Alex and Alice can be the relaxing humour’s duo of your fresco, but how they also can be a glorious picture of everything a true and devoted friendship can be !
Their idea to give to Sara not only a decent death but certainly the sweetest possible, surrounded by the ones who care for her and near to the nature, is a marvellous and beautiful idea… How great ! Everybody in such hopeless situation could be able to spend last moments of life out of a cold and impersonal hospital room, coming back to a familiar and warm place.
That’s exactly what my apartment building’s caretakers made for their 12 old son, many years ago : he had a terminal cancer, was already amputated of a leg, stuffed with morphine and all was absolutely hopeless. With the help of her mother’s sister, who was a doctor, he was able to come back home, surrounded by his family until the end, few weeks later… That was so relieving – and this lovely boy was so brave, I felt deeply happy for him…
********
Finally, I’m more than ever sensitive to the way you depict – and this chapter is a pretty good example of that – those essential silent talks people who really know each other are able to share… All is in the glances’ exchanges and meaningful silences are something I love a lot.
Bravo, dear Rachel, more than ever you deserve all the congratulations for your amazingly engaging story ! God, how I’m melting for it… pretty addicted, that’s me ! O la la… ^_^
Hey flair! *Waves* Remember me? :P I’m all caught up now, comments and everything! ;) You have no idea how happy I am to be reading your work again!!
It’s so wonderful how the four of them are truly making Sara’s last moments special. She definitely deserves it. We should all exemplify Sara ourselves.
I Love this story, even though it’s so heart rendering!!! The friendship aspect of it reminds me sooo much of 1 of my favorite movies “Beaches” with Bette Milder and Barbara Hershey. I hope u post soon.
you finally posted again! what a chapter, so sweet! keep it coming, I love your story!
Yay for the post! It’s such a comforting gift to have such great friends in the last hours on earth.
Wow, sorry work is keeping you so busy…and sorry for me too, because I spend the day AT WORK looking for your posts. Either way, I’m so glad to see another chapter! I am feeling though that this Bette and Tina getting together thing has to be too good to be true, right? I mean it is YOU writing this..lol. Something with Sara’s little sister is going to come about, huh? Regardless, thank you for using your “freetime” from work to write for us, I SO SO SO SO SO enjoy this story!
I am first Hurray!!!!!!!! great post
WHOA! Thanks that’s was so Wonderful they get along together I Love it Hey flair I’m still waiting for another chapter LOL! I hope soon LOL! Hey I Love it Thanks Please continue.
Aww Alice + Alex are so sweet! That’s such a great idea! Another beautiful chapter. Can’t wait for more
every time Sarah’s falling asleep I say “not yet, not yet…” honestly, sometimes I’m afraid to read what’s next. but obviously I keep reading. and can’t wait for more.
As always, a pleasure to read.
oh my.. sooo very sad but beautiful… die alone must to be the worse thing in the world and im glad Sara have those amazing peoples around her in the end..and Tina by Bettes side is a rock she completely change after Tinas arrival..great chapter as always and im preparing myself for the sadness chapter of Saras died..
That is soo sweet of them. Hospitals are depressing as hell. Is this the calm before the storm??? Excellent post.
beautiful chapter! missed ur story yday, but this made up for it. hope u post soon!
Great, need more please.
Good chapter. What a good idea for Sarah stay in a house for her last time, its just sad and emotion. Post soon, thanks!
beautiful story flair. both happy and sd at the same time. they are all lucky to have known sara. she will truely be missed. maybe B&T can find her sister. looking foward to your next chappy
Ahh Alas couldn’t be the first commenter this time.. Great emotional chapter as usual. Don’t you just hate when work and real life interrupts fiction? “:) Since the weekend is approcahing maybe we could maybe get a couple? Plzzz. Hope to see one later tonite after DJ Friday, woo hoo..
Great Job.