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Beaten, Working Toward Recovery Chapter 5
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When Dana walked into her kitchen, she noticed the coffee dripping from the wall, with one of her coffee cups broken on the floor below it, then noticed Alice by the table, huddled in a ball crying. She knew.
Alice’s world had just come crashing down.
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Dana sat down beside Alice, taking her into her arms, and talking softly to her. She did not understand what had brought this on, a few minutes ago, they had decided how they were going to approach the day, and now for some reason Alice was hysterical. This was more then crying. This was and anger along with crying. “Al, tell me what’s wrong, let me try to help you.” Alice still could not speak so she reached and held on to her friend as if her life depended on it. “Please Al, talk to me.”
Alice finely looked up at Dana. “They did it again, they did it again and this time they killed her. Just like, they would have killed me, given a little more time. Why would they want to kill us, kill me. What did I do to deserve having the ***** beat out of me? We were just walking on the sidewalk. Did it make him feel like a man to continue to kick me after I was on the ground? Dana did it make him feel like a man to listen to you beg. Dana I remember hearing you beg, before he knocked me out, and sometimes when I am sleeping I still hear your voice, begging and I wish I could make it so I would never have to hear you begging again. I cannot believe I ever caused you to have to beg. I don’t ever want you to have to beg again.”
Dana pulled Alice more into her lap, running her finger through her hair, hoping somehow this might help her to relax. “Al, I wish I could have done more then beg, but if begging would have made him stop, I would have begged for the rest of my life. Alice I do not understand why these men did this, to the others, or us but I doubt it has anything to do with feeling like a man. I would bet it has to do more with a sick bigotry, these men for what ever reason have a deep hatred for what we are, not who are, or even for what we did.”
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I really love the relationship between Dana and Alice. I hope you will continue this story beyond their healing.
Deb!! I love ur writin! its fantastic! I love this story line its so serious yet with alices sense of humour in with it a bit it makes it fantastic! I love the relationship u have goin on between alice and dana its amazin!
i love it when i see a new chapter of this posted, and i wasnt disappointed, great job :D
Love it. Keep it coming. I espically enjoy how they care about it each other.
i really like where this story is going so far and can’t wait for you to post again. keep em comin.
I think I told you this before but let me do this here. The things I enjoyed most about this chapter:
– The touches of fluff and humor were great, it evens out the pain of the subject and true to life
– I’ve always thought you did a great job capturing not only Alice’s fear but the impact it has on Dana as well. The protective nature of Dana was perfectly expressed.
– The moment that Alice felt her fears set in at the beach was spot on and real.
– Last but not least, Dana thoughts about the treadmill was so true cause that’s exactly how I felt when I have to run indoors lol.
This post is killer..Post s0ON..
It was a wonderful chapter and I cannot wait until the next post you write wonderfuly
this story is amazing. i applaud you. keep up the great work
wow Debs. i’m starting to dread the ‘comment box’ cause i feel like i keep writing the same thing to you but really- this story is wonderfully concieved and delivered. I am hanging on every word- can’t wait to see where you take them. and HOW do you make such a painful experience so romantic?
i love all of your fics, theyre all great and this one rocks :o) cant wait for the next update. xx
I love this and this is going to be a long hard road for alice and dana but will they find there true feeling for each other please post soon
I love this chapter. All seem so real, the therapist,the fears, the relationship, its fantastic.
Oh and the fara fawcett glasses are great.