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Echoes in Darkness, Chapter 3: Before the second show
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discarded cigarette shed its embers on the way down before looking out
on the lights of the city that stretched out into the distance. Off to
the east, fireworks arced and exploded into bright blossoms of red,
white, blue, green, gold, turning night to day for moments at a time.
She reached into her pocket, pulled out a rumpled pack of cigarettes,
ran a wrinkled slightly bent cigarette between two long thin fingers,
lit it, inhaled deeply before exhaling a blue haze of smoke.
Music drifted out through the French doors and onto the terrace. A
melancholy, almost dark version of “Superstar” by Sonic Youth. A love
song haunted by loss and longing. It cast a pall over the celebratory
mood of the fireworks, the sound of parties drifting across the expanse
of the city. And it resonated in the dark uncertainty she was feeling
tonight, for no particular reason, she thought, it was just that.
Long ago, and, oh, so far away
I fell in love with you before the second show.
Your guitar, it sounds so sweet and clear, but you’re not really here.
It’s just the radio.
For a moment, she thought about walking back inside now, taking Carmen
a beer, wrapping her arms around her and leaning into her warmth, her
softness, her scent. Daring to trust. Daring to want.
Behind her, she heard Helena’s footfalls, recognized her by the scent
of her perfume. Shane hadn’t yet decided quite how she felt about
Helena. But she was haunted by her beautyalmost patrician in a 21st
century kind of way. She watched her now in profile as she leaned
wordlessly forward on the terrace wall with her forearms, heedless of
whatever dust or dirt might transfer to the jacket of her black
designer tuxedo. She took note of the square jaw that on anyone else
would seem too strong a feature, the way she’d swept her long curls off
her neck, with its ballet dancer’s length and elegance. In the
moonlight and episodic glare of the fireworks, her cream complexion
took on a shimmer that hinted of an otherworldly quality.
Most of all, Shane was taken by her eyesriveting, like some clear blue
crystal, with faint indigo rims that reminded her of someone else,
someone quite different and yet equally powerful in her ability to
summon and dominate with a look or a gesture. But Helena had something
Susan Birch did nota vulnerability that sometimes bordered on
innocence and sometimes barely masked a wounded soulShane felt kindred
to her in a way the others didn’t.
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Great story. I’m glad Helena talked to Shane. Hopefuly we will see a Sharmen scene soon:)
hey windrider i just read all 3 chapters, i think you have a pretty good stroy here but i hope shane can work out her issues with carmen along with everyone else cant wait to see where you go with this…plz update soon!
Great chapter. As much as I don’t like Helena most of the time, there is something about the beautiful b–ch that makes you want to care about her. Something very sad,and lonely that you could almost miss if you did not look very carefully at her. But i want her to leave Bette and Tina alone. Thanks for the post.
Not that I’ve read every single fanfic on this site, but I’ve read my share & you’re one of the few people who has humanized Helena. I enjoyed Shane & Helena’s heart to heart. We all know Helena can be a tad overbearing & obnoxious but I refuse to see her as this one-dimensional character that we often see in fics or T.V. I don’t know where you plan on taking the story but I am intrigued. Although most of the time I stick to Shane or Carmen stories. I really enjoyed your take on Helena’s character. Great stuff. I also enjoyed the tension between Bette & Tina should be interesting to see them in different situations.
Good beginning. For all the stories I’ve read on this site, you really seem to have nailed Bette. Don’t get me wrong, I love Bette, but you nailed that hard, selfish edge that she can get. Please continue.
helena nice to sombody without motives OMG!!!!!!!!!!!
I agree with all the comments before mine about how wonderfully you’ve fleshed out the Helena character. That’s something IC didn’t do very well and yet we had to believe she had some redeeming qualities since Tina was taken with her. I’m really loving this fic, its very dark but beautifully drawn. Your descriptions are poetic. I love how you incorporate a song into each piece.