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A College Bette and Tina beginning chpt 14
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Yale University: Bette’s apartment…That night
Bette leaves her mark and kisses the spot below her ear…she reaches for the light and hits the switch….she turns back to the blond beneath her and began nibbling on her lobe…she leans in close to her ear and whispers…
Bette: “can I try a little?”
Tina’s face turns a bit red…she closed her eyes and inhaled deep nodding her head…she opened her eyes and stared up at the brunette…the two locks eyes…she reaches behind Bette’s neck and pulled her down gently…the two locked lips and their tongue’s interwined…Bette penetrated Tina’s mouth stroking her tongue deep tickling the back of her throat…
Tina: “mmm”
Tina moans as her she rotated her head to the left and to the right…Bette breaks the kiss and begins making a trail of wet kisses down Tina’s soft neck…the blond arches her neck back giving the brunette access to roam her territory…
Tina: “ah”
Tina moans as Bette moves lower kissing her shoulder blades and then her collarbone…her hands approach the blond’s breast and the brunette places a kiss in the middle of her chest…Tina moves her hair from her face and glances down at the brunette…she watches as Bette strokes and sucks her nipples one by one gently teasing them with the tip of her tongue…
Tina: “ah”
she moans…her nipples harden in Bette’s mouth due to sensitivity…Bette kisses and strokes them both before replacing them with her thumb and index fingers…Bette’s ***** rubs against Tina’s stomach as she trails lower to Tina’s abdomen…she sucks and tugs at her hot skin…
Tina: “ah”
she licks the inside of her navel and Tina curls her toes down below…she dips her tongue in and takes it back out…with the tip of her tongue she trails lower towards Tina’s mound…Bette continued to fondle Tina’s nipples with her thumb and index fingers…she pulled at them gently…she slowly slid her hands down Tina’s tummy to the side of her waist…she slides them down her thighs and pushed her legs wide open…
Tina grabbed the back of the pillow…her stomach rose and fell…she closed her eyes and inhaled…Bette’s wonderous tongue slid down and landed on the blond’s nub…
Tina: “ah”
Tina moaned…Bette began to stroke it with the tip of her tongue gently pentrating it…
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Vakkav, I truthfully read these fan fics, because some of the stories are really fasinating, I am straight, and I guess I never really thought about the sex scenes, I just enjoy them as wll as the way the story goes, pleasurable reading, You are one I follow, I enjoy your writing and look forward to more of it.
Keep your head up Vakkav and keep doing what you do best. Don’t let one person wreck your flow cause you got hundreds of us lovin’ it. Love it!!!!!
One more thing…you write some of the hottest girl/girl sex scenes I’ve ever read. You need to give IC your link so we can get some BT lovin’. Cause from the spoilers I’ve read IC has lost her damn mind!!! Please keep updating!!!!
WELL OH MY? **can’t really comment i’m still at a loss for any words that’ll make sense.** please post soon. PEACE.
I can’t say that was the hottest thing I’ve ever read, but really, who said an NC-17 had to be smokin’ hot? Personally, my first time was pretty damn awkward and it hurt like hell, and while physically it was pretty bad, my boyfriend was really sweet about it and attentive (that’s right I lost my virginity to a guy…shut up LOL). I don’t know if you were going for the awkward feeling, but that’s what I felt from reading this. So, maybe we can say this chapter is open to interpretation based on what your brain and heart are feeling, rather than just your crotch?
I like the chapter. I thought it had some tender moments and a few times it seemed a little awkward, when she was pushing down on Tinas head. I don’t think I’d like someone pushing down on my head. But hey different strokes for different folks. I like to comment on stories because I appreciate what ALL of you do when you write stories for us. We know it takes so much time and talent. Something I could never do. So I appreciated you and all the other authors on this site. Keep it coming–so to speak.
Good chapter. That was so hot and awesome and can’t wait to see what’s next, thanks!
Hey V…what can I say? I really love your stories and your description of Tina’s first time was realistic enough. Some of my friends first time wasn’t great it was painful and anticlactic and others reached orgasm almost right after — so no one’s first time is the same. I think you did well. Creative criticism is good for developing great writing skills…it’s also a character building. V…take it as a compliment, because I’m sure that was its intention. Thanks for the chapter…please post soon.
OK each to their own opinion…i always enjoy your writting i dont always comment but i do always read!!! all your stories have their own bunch of fans who read them because they enjoy your work as do i… i read so many stories on this site i cant even keep track and in the very best of them theres always a chapter or 2 that you dont love either with the way a story is going or the way in which it was written…BUT that never stops me from sticking with it,this site is for fun and relaxation some have made friends and some are still lurking…lol. either way i and i know lots more really appreciate all the writters efforts in giveing us endless entertainment, so dont ever stop thanks for shareing your talent…B
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slipperynipple…first things first thank you for your comment…I loved the criticism…all the way…and no I’m no guy…but I can tell you from experience and being a woman it’s very possible…I have done it before…and according to your saying I write the shittest sex scenes…lol…okay that’s your opinion and that’s what makes you different…but as far as I concerned your the only one complaining…I’m sorry that you think it’s robotic and ext…and again you are intitled to your own opinion…but I have one question for you…if you feel that way why bother reading if supposely you know what to expect?…I mean by you commenting below says alot…because I don’t see anyone in their right mind would read something that bothers them…women comes in all shapes and sizes and we all have different reactions to sex expecially for it being your first time…who doesn’t know that…and it is possible yo transform from pain to an orgasm…it’s most definetly possible boo…boo…I’m not sure of what you’ve experienced and how it was…that’s your business…but to keep your mind so closed and not wonder what if…that’s an issue that you would have to battle on your own…again I apologize for you feeling the way you do…two words…DON’T READ…it’s that simple…thank you…
OMG…Bette popped Tina’s cherry….BOUT BLODDY TIME!!!!!!!!!! LOL!!! NOW HOW BOUT MAKING PAYBACK A BITCH!!!!!!!!
What the f**k was that? Vakkav I’m sorry but you write the shittiest sex scenes I have ever read in my life!!!! They are almost robotic in nature and let me tell you there is no way in hell someone loses their virginity with manual penetration followed by an orgasm, especially since you portrayed it as one hell of a painful experience. I’m not saying it isn’t possible but to have Tina all of a sudden transform from pain to orgasm is just wrong. Since it seems that Bette was using her body as a pounding ramp. OMG are you a guy?!?!?!
wow..jsut wow..Bette was great she was gentle with Tinas first experience..lol..that was great now letes see Tina loving Bette too..lol..thanks vakkav that was fucking HOT :o)))
I did not say it isn’t possible I said you portrayed it as painful followed by Tina owing and awing her ass off. I’m sorry I can’t buy this as realistic but hey maybe you weren’t going for realistic. Some women loose their virginity easier than others and as a woman I am fully aware of this and I am also fully aware that everyone’s experience is different but I based my comments on what I read in this story not my personal or anybody else’s personal experience. Let me use your work of art as reference to my overall displeasure with the way you wrote this;’she grabed ahold to the headboard and pushed up into Tina…she placed her hand on the top of Tina’s head and slowly pushed her down while she pushed up into her…Tina: “ah…ah…ah…BBeette…aahh….”Bette entered her faster and faster and faster….Boo boo I shudder to think that you have experienced anything like this both on the receiving or giving end. As for reading your work I am reading in order to see if you will rise above your mediocre attempt at writing. But I guess this will never happen.
Love this story, great chapter. Please post soon.
hey buddys lets cool off..lol..that site is not for this kind of behavier…we are all in the same side the fanfic is just for us who wants to have a great time together and sometimes make friends i have made amazing friends here and this i think is the real deal here..for slipperynipple i agree that you have your opinion and in order of democracy you can have and say your point of view, but you have to say friendly and for you vakkav my friend criticize is good make us grow..ok people lets be cool and peace
OKAY SN…I read you comment and thanks again for commenting…I hear and understand you…again your entitled to your own opion and if that’s how you feel then so be it…I’m with you…
Well alrighty then. I see that it is a heated discussion going on here. Nice update Vakkav. Can’t wait to see where you are going to go with this.
One bad comment doesn’t spoil the bunch. Vakkav, I thought the chapter was HOT. I am not a writer and do not attempt to judge those who do. I’m simply enjoying the stories that are written on this site. The stories in fanfic are ten times better than some of the storylines on the show so far. The way I see it, that was one bad comment out of hundreds who probably read your story and don’t comment. Everyone is entitled to their opinion, but if someone is attempting to give constructive criticism, it should not be given in a mean-spirited, downgrading way. Keep writing your story the way you see it. I, for one, enjoy it and will continue allowing you to take me down the road you’re paving. Great job!!!
Great chapter. I loved it! Looking forward to the next one.
hey vakkav.. I know I owe you more comments. About this chapter, I don’t think it was your best sex scene or the most romantic one, since you had done a great before, but it’s completely realistic. Thanks.
Vakkav dont listen to slipperynipple i love this story and ur writting ability is amazizing. not the most romantic thing but no that is out of the way the more tenderness moments can happenbetween bette ans tina. thanx for posting as often as u do i totally love this story
This chapter was hot! I enjoy your writting and don’t think you should change a thing. Post soon.
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!! Post soon please, no matter what you know who said.Everyone else is enjoying it so post away I will read for sure.
Thank you all so much for your comments…I appreciate them so much…I have tears in my eyes…lol…by being honest and saying what you all said..I just wanted to let you know that it touched me alot…I’m glad that you all love the story and I’m happy most that you all understand where I’m coming from…and maybe you are right…itmight not be my best…but I agree from previous stories that Bette and Tina have had some remarkable moments so far…just knowing that someone else sees it despite the negativity that touched me completely…you are are what makes me wanna write more and surprise you with crazy NC-17’s or whatever the case maybe…and best to believe I will continue to deliver mu amazing work…thank you Pandora…Van…2 much to handle…that’s cute…elword…lovely angel…tracelovinit…yes their real…ooh I like that name….cute…Brook baby hoe could I forget you…lol…and deejay thanks so much and I hope you continue to stay with my stories…hugs and kisses to you all and stay true and most definitely I’ll stay true to you too…thanks again…
Hey :) First, I did enjoy this chapter, even if it seems to be fodder for contraversy (sp?). I actually had a question though…everyone is implying that Tina getting penetrated is her “first time” and that’s how she’s lost her virginity. But she had an orgasm in the previous sex scene. I guess my question is, what do you guys consider to be “sex” btwn two women? Among my friends, there are a variety of definitions, including reaching orgasm. I’m asking b/c I’ve slept w/three women, had orgasms w/them, but never been penetrated (for the reason that it’s too painful when various gfs have tried). I’ve not slept w/any men (what my friend calls a “gold star lesbian”). So does that make me still a virgin in you guys’ POV? I certainly don’t consider myself a virgin, but who knows? Just wondering :)
*thud* I don’t know if that was hot or just fucking beautiful. Omg I had tears reading it when I should have been faning myself from the heat of the story. They are just so cute and loving together, Tina you are lucky to lose your virginity to this beautiful wonderful woman name Bette Porter, I’m jealous I wish my first time was with her. I absolutely love this!