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Tina, Tiny Pieces Chapter 3 (reposted, all icky symbol thingys fixed)
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What time is it, Kit?
Kit glances quickly at her watch, smiling, her voice soft.
You got time, Bette. We’re gonna finish up the steaks outside, ok? Jenny – you coming with me?
In a second. I need to get the salad finished. And I promised Max — I want to find that other sandpaper he asked for.
Speaking of Max, when is he gonna stop that infernal racket? He’s had that thing going for an hour!
I think he’s going back over the ones he already spackled. Smoothing them out.
Bette wanders towards the master bedroom, stepping around Max who turns off the palm sander and steps away from her, deferentially. She stops, she offers him a small smile.
Thank you. You don’t have to do this you know. I’ll get around to fixing them — once I … once I stop making them.
In the kitchen, Kit frowns and mutters to no one.
If you don’t stop making them, the whole damn house is gonna look like a piece of Swiss cheese.
In the hallway, Max pulls down the mask covering his mouth and nose and smiles shyly.
It’s no big deal, Bette. It’s an easy fix. I – I understand. I mean, not what you’ve been going through. Don’t think I mean that, please. I mean, I guess – I understand the holes.
Bette meets Max’s eyes. Her face reveals nothing. Her voice is kind, soft, almost breathy. Her words unravel slowly but with strength.
Contemplation … is healing … to those who would be healed. I have found that contemplation, meditation — while admirable — offer me now only undesired and unrelenting focus on spaces waiting to be filled.
Max nods. He looks down at the floor. Bette reaches out and touches his arm with just her fingertips, which brush him gently, she lets her fingers fall away. She walks into the bedroom. Max clears his throat quietly, pulls the mask up, and turns the sander back on.
In the kitchen Jenny chops carrots, lettuce, green and purple onions, jicama, peppers. She smiles down at the vegetables.
It must be therapeutic. I envy her.
Kit raises her eyebrows in surprise.
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WOW..THATS REALLY SAD..I LOVE UR STORY..RIGHT NOW I FEEL LIKE RIPPING TINAS HEADS OFF..I MEAN WHAT THE HELL SHE SEES IN HENRY ANYWAY..I MEAN SHE DUMPS A HOTTY LIKE BETTE AND GOES AFTER A GUY WITH NO FREAKEN LOOKS, AND I HATE WHEN HE SMILES….ANYWAY…I HOPE BETTE GETS BATTER…IC…UU R FUCKEN KILLING ME WOMEN!!!!!! THE REASON I WATCH THE L WORD MOSTLY BECAUSE OF BETTE AND TINA..NOW I CANT STAND TINA..BUT I LOVE U LUREEN …ANYWAY MORE SOON.PLZ…LOVE UR STORY…
oh man…i just cried like a baby angelica from ep. 7 deleted scene when bette left her with james…so f***ing sad…i’m going back to denialville for a while…maybe i can read about clowns next time (with bette and angelica together?)…please don’t torture us too long, reunite them…pleeeeeaseeeee
real disheartening… Bette is showing signs of OCDness and they are not good ones. As much as I dont like Tina in the last episode or the way that they are writing the character of Tina, I am still ultimately a Tibette fan, so hopefully you will guide the story in that direction.
This is well written but so fucking sad. Tina is one mean bitch. It’s as if their relationship never existed. BTW, something is wrong with the formatting: wherever there should be apostrophes or punctuation there are trademark signs, foreign accents. Makes it difficult to read.
I never thought I’d cry reading ff. I mean it’s … fan fiction. But wow! Bette’s heart has been torn out of her chest and placed on a platter for Tina to trample … every night at 7:45. Torture, repetitive like an electrical pulse or just the plain ticking of the clock… relentless torture. I’m not sure time can heal this. Hell…
fuck
I can barely type for the tears streaming down my face….And SHAME on all you whoever you are to PM lastkid and make any reference whatsoever to being like IC…If you don’t like the storyline then don’t download the page….Sure it’s hard to read, but it’s so well written, obviously so much thought and time invested into it’s birth…it’s a story, her story to tell to us and I say thankyou!!! There is no guarantee that this will end up happy and for previous posts you go where you want to take us regardless of what we may want…kudo to your willpower and strength..Don’t ever be freightened to post this or any story bearing your name..A true writer can transport you to a different place and time without ever realizing you’ve left or returned…you do that and thank you!!!! You are one of few..pls post soon
“Want a clown chapter?”…No, I want a chapter featuring a hermaphrodite with fake facial hair. And a squeaky voice. …I haven’t read this chapter yet. Blackrose’s all caps comment is scaring me. I might wait unti tomorrow. Gene Pontecorvo swinging in his basment is a cautionary tale about not being able to quit. BTW – who else had that last name? Someone in Dante’s Inferno? Beatrice Portinari and Gillo Pontecorvo. It’s all meshing folks, time to go to sleep. Night, LastKid!
Damn, Last you made me cry. I’m glad to see I’m not alone in that! You can’t tell me that Tina loves her child and so casually rip her other mother from her. God, Bette, she’s so…so…this is what a broken heart looks like. Far more than Tina’s relationship betrayals. Damn tina..can I be next to rip her head off?
Tina is doing what she thought was best for Tina,not anyone else. Henry was looking for someone to share his and Mickey life,Yet he is the one that cheated on his wife. Tina was in trouble with her life and he was there to try to make her feel better.Yeah right. He knew what he was doing.amother,housemaid cook,and a fuck when he wanted to. Love LH,but IC has made Tina hated by the lot of us. Bette will get better, but Tina life will get worse. thanks
I didn’t know Max was gonna be in this chapter. Honest!…anyway, I’m sure YOUR Max is charming. Thanks!
Lastkid, your writing always captivates me, but today, tonight, with this you paralyzed me. I cried, still crying and it makes me hate Tina more and more. And while I agree with your statements in regards to your last chapter about Tina, I disgreee to some degree about Tina’s …I hestiate here…ignorance. She was more than aware when her and Bette were looking for a donor, where her insecurities are, and yet she completely forgot them in a rapid rush to make a “normal” family. Speaking from a standpoint of having a white mother and a white father (after my mother remarried), I know how hard it is to live in between 2 worlds. I don’t envy baby Angelica…
i feel so bad for bette. the story thing is just so sad. i’m a tibette fan or maybe i should say was but doesn’t matter to me if you split them up or bring them back together because at this point it’s going to take some convincing to make me believe in them again. but no matter the route any authors decide to take the couple if we get a good quality story out of it then every fan should be thankful. how dare people compare you to IC, she could never write such insightful material. I for one prefer stories with substance. so keep up the good work.
you do a lovely job with the details ( i loved the bits of veggies on jenny’s hands from the salad). sad, but that’s what would happen right? glad you’re back, you’re a wonderful writer
Amazing story! Hope to see more soon. And I definitly would not compare you to IC, please disregard any comments along those lines.
Damn, lastkid, that was a beauty. The writing of the chapter I mean, not the content of the story. God, you even had Max convincingly touch on the profound and Jenny made some sense, and that’s quite an accomplishment. Bette’s way of mourning her loss(es) doesn’t really seem to be helping her cope. Much pain all around.
you go where only one woman dares….YOU How in the living hell do we start out so kind and end so heartlessly?Bravo Maestro.Continue
DAMN! my poor Bette…sobs
OMFG!!!! Please let Bette get better soon. We need to see the ALPH Bette back. Please Post Soon
That was unbelievable…i really dont think ive ever been so touched by a story to this extent…Bette is absolutly heartbreaking….this whole chapter really was amazeing,the very sad picture of Bettes nightly ritual will stay with me for some time….im in awe of your writting…Thanks
I love Max for his last words. If I were Shane, Kit, Jenny or Alice, I wouldn’t forgive Tina before Bette does so.
Once again last you have compltely thrown any expectations, i love how your writing can capture true feelings in essence and i know your all going to hate me i am one of the biggest tibette fans and right now i can honestly say the thought of them not being together is not as harrowing as it once was and the way the story is at now i don’t think it would be possible but it makes me wonder how much tina must be going through to be capable of something like this from being one of the most loved characters to turning into someone we can barely sit and watch i must admit that i have alot of sympathy for her and i hope IC only has the writing to pull of possibly bringing back the real tina if not for bette but for us because i just dont think the show would be the same without her and anywho as above so not like IC last
Oh, Lastkid. I had such a bad day today. I practically had no outlet for my pent-up rage and frustration. Until I read your fic tonight. I felt so sad for Bette and Angelica. Got a good cry and now I feel better. I know that there are people who rip you a new one all the time. Please don’t let them discourage you, however salient or regurgitated their opinions are. Because, Lastkid, YOU CAN WRITE. Happy endings be damn. I LOVE YOUR FIC ALWAYS. Cheers!
This was absolutely amazing. I have no other words to describe it. Your writing is superb. You are truly gifted.
Kid, the expertise in which you are able to take your readers from agitation to anguish is remarkable. Each chapter is crafted in such a way that it could stand on its own, but when read in continuum creates an even richer tableau. Max connects with Bette because he understands an anger that is borne out of feeling as if you have no control over your life. Two very different people that share a very basic emotion. I love the symbolism that the holes in the walls represent, the hole that is in Bette’s heart. Wonderfully done! I suspect that Bette is not trying to liberate her anger as much as she is trying to shrive her guilt. An underlying feeling that she has in some way failed Angelica could be fueling the holes in the wall. We always seem to focus our anger on those that have hurt someone we love, and in this case Kit’s animus is focused on Tina. Whether culpability is hers alone is another matter, but she is the natural target. OK, Jenny the cutter using the knife had me in stitches. I was waiting for her to have a moment, but thankfully she managed to stay on task and dinner wasn’t interrupted by a trip to the ER. Jenny has always had a somewhat tenuous grasp on the present and you captured that perfectly. It’s the details that fill out this story in such a wonderful way, Kit’s laid back speech and her friendly banter is evidence of that, again well done! All of the friend’s have each other’s back and Shane comes to Alice’s defense assuring Kit that she would never bring Tina to The Planet. I’m speculating that Tina has other ideas. I laughed when Angus brought up the weather, too funny. Love the continuity. I like how Angus’ nuturing personality is evinced by his trying to engage Bette in a conversation about art. Curious though, was the mistake in the name of the artist a true accident, or was it deliberate, and therefore an avenue to further draw Bette out of her shell? All of them feel the anguish that comes from feeling helpless when a friend is hurting. Second guessing whether you’re doing them more harm than good is natural. It’s a difficult balance to strike, knowing when to push and when to ease off. Too much and you risk either a further withdrawal or a false sense of processing. Too little and the process of recovery is protracted unnecessarily. I sense that Shane does have some anger towards Tina and that maybe the reason she isn’t telling Tina how she feels is because it hits a little too close to home for her…the physical need fighting with what the heart truly wants. Lastkid, you have almost managed to convince me that Jenny may be the new Yoda – at least in this story. Shane is someone that is familiar with multiple homes and parents or caregivers…Angelica may have two parents with Henry and Tina, but Shane knows that difference. Interesing parallel drawn between Bette educating her clients on the difference between investment versus interest and her own life. 400 pages as opposed to 900, yep, that would be Jenny at her palaverous best! Is life imitating art when Bette is talking about the mixed media artist that is using differential equations with probability designs? Hmmm. Max does not appear to be a complicated person, he doesn’t see beyond the obvious. His plus sign and taping a TV show observations illustrated that perfectly. His anger at Tina was primal as well, he is the perfect counterbalance to Jenny. I’m wondering if Bette’s lack of a watch is her way of making sure that she never forgets her connection to Angelica. If you wear a watch you can become complacent, the time is always readily available. However, if you do not wear one then you are more aware of its passing, you need to be more present if you don’t want to miss a specific event. As Kit says, Bette may stop reading aloud to Angelica…but she will never forget. Just a remarkable chapter Kid, truly brilliant. Can’t wait for the next chapter. As for those that think that you and I are one in the same, we are not…I could only hope to be half as creative, eloquent and gifted as you are in my lifetime!!
lastkid what time is it?..It’s time for Shane to talk some sence into Tina…that was sad I don’t normaly cry when I read fan fic but I found my self crying at this one, that was some great writting. Please post soon and don’t keep Bette in pain to long, poor thing I could not imagine what I would do if someone took my baby girl from me.
i cried…….
Wonderful chapter. You’ve captured all of the character so well. All the dialogue is spot on. Loved Jenny’s meanderings in this. Shane too. Do not be discouraged that some have questioned the plot in this story. This is your story and I think it’s beautiful. I know I am not alone. You are so skilled, you do completely transport us. I would have loved to see this onscreen rather than that junk IC and crew fed us.
First, Lastkid your writing is phenomenal. Wow, this chapter broke my heart. I’d love to see how Tina is going to right the incridible wrong(s) that she’s thrown at Bette. Please post soon!
Okay I’vestopped crying long enough to comment. Wow! What an amazing fanfic! Very sad and wonderfully written – I can’t say I would be heartbroken if Tina stays in her miserable marriage. I loved the ‘framily’ together – even Max is sort of sweet.
here I am again to say you’ve done me in this time, lasty. I am still crying also! this is such exquisite pain, written so exquisitely. I too was wondering about the watches, like lamentamini, and thinking maybe time means nothing anymore. I am glad Bette is able to compartmentalize enough to function at work. Oh @#*! just tell Bette we love her!
This was beyond painful. I got that one single tear in my right eye that just refused to gracefully slide down my face. Yet I felt that gut wrenching pain that let me know this story touched me deeply. You like no other on this board elevates my Tina hate to levels previously unheard of.
Such a powerful story. Thanks for posting.
Fucking Amazing!
Lastkid, you’re writing leaves me always wanting more. No matter how painful and sad the message, I want more. You’re nothing like IC, you clearly have a heart and soul and the ability to reach the readers on an emotional level that IC could never even dream of.
Heartbreaking. I somehow feel that Shane is going to take matters into her own hands. This can’t go on – someone has got to get through to Tina and let her see how wrong this is. Beautifully written, as always.
lastkid–I’ve read your stories in the past and they were wonderful, but this story is amazing. Like so many others, I was moved to tears and found myself really hating a fictional character, although I have not lost track of the fact that Tina is fictional. This is a powerful, moving story and I would hate to see you discontinue it or change it because some people find it too painful to read. And, for those who are comparing you to IC–ignore them. As Chasemenow said, this is nothing like IC or any of the other writers have given us on the show. This story does have direction, does have heart, and isn’t leaving us to wonder what happened or if someone knows something that the show writers have decided needed to be left out. Again, thanks!
Tina, err, right. Sometimes so-called adults (human specias > 18 years, claiming to have experiences) act more childish than a four-year old. And, hey, folks, you’re right. Lastkid is Ilene Chaiken is Condolezza Rice is an alien is a bowl of silverskin onions is the devil impersonate and everyone/thing else that is sheer evil. And how do we know that? She doesn’t like chocolate. I mean, come on, what a bad camouflage is that? Has there ever been a hero, a savior or a good person who did not like chocolate? See? No, honestly… Don’t misunderstand me, there is absolutely no pun intended in the following – I’m sure LK welcomes every review or opinion expressed by a reader, be it to improve her writing or to get new insights into things or whatever, – but there’s gotta be an end in everything and I think critism should always be constructive. If Ilene was the tiniest little bit like Lastkid the show would be so much better, more profound and… yeah, just better. Lay off. Let’s wait where she’s taking it. As for those who know her previous stories, don’t you know that LK is always making everything alright, one way or the other? LK so does the characters justice, and in some cases that means that there’s no happy end and not everyone is all smiles and happy. That wouldn’t be real, would it? But she always, always does them justice. I know, it’s hard to see this relationship come to an end and to imagine the pain Bette must be going through and you wouldn’t wish that anyone. But at the same time you know it’s happening. It’s happening every day and this is a very real portrayal of how things might be, how Bette might feel right now I think it’s admirable how with every season, every turn and every character’s change LK can… like ‘jump into it’, her writing is excellent, precise. It’s not like you have to read this story, right? Insulting her won’t change her story. So just enjoy it and if you don’t like what you read, try to say it nicely.Oh, and LK… uhm, I’ve got to tell you something, but I don’t want everyone to hear it… *whispers* there’s Jenny in your story. *points at her* You know, just in case you overlooked that. Now you can let a rock fall on her. Or a piano. A car. A brain. Whatever. They’ll lynch you ;) And for the record: I like silverskin onions.
This story is great. You’ve captured how both Tina and Bette would be feeling. You’ve got Tina’s unfounded feelings of anger that seem to enrupt at every person she comes into contact with. You can also feel Tina’s sense of lonliness eventhough she is with Henry and the life she thought would make her happy. To quote Josh “Tina is one fucked up woman.”This chapter made me ache for Bette. Eventhough this story is painful I hope you continue sharing with the site your talent for writing.
That had to be one of the most painful things I’ve ever read on here. But your writing makes it so easy to get sucked in and stick with a story regardless of what’s going on. Normally I’m not crazy about Max but I like how you included him in this chapter. Here he wasn’t all whiny i.e. “No one understands!!!” or whatever it is people claim he often says. When Jenny started goin’ to town on those veggies I got a little scared she might chuck that knife across the kitchen. I’m not understanding why Bette has no watches though, unless she figures time is no longer important. All she has to worry about is Angelica’s bedtime. Oh and people who said your writing was like IC’s…WTF. Do we see plot holes or skips in time that make no sense in this story? No. Just do your thing and if people don’t like it, they can read something else. There’s enough light reading here that we can handle something heavy.
Last-amazing writing. You are truly a gifted storyteller. Keep going to the dark places…it makes the light place all the more warm.