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I thought we could spend the evening together… PT22
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I thought we could spend the evening together PT22
Previously
Tina turned and looked out to the ocean, the waves still coming into shore, families around them still building sandcastle, neither the waves of the family aware of the building tension inside of Tina, knowing that she needed to be honest, but afraid of the reaction she would get when she told Bette what her statement was. She turned back to look into Bettes eyes and took a deep breath.
“My dislike is uh I dont like” she dropped her eyes, feeling the sting behind her lids, she looked back up, unshed tears welling in her eyes, she quietly continued, “I dont like the way you treat me when Melvin is around”
Bette took a sharp intake of breath, the quiet words hitting her with a force that could have knocked her over. She looked down into her lap, she clenched her hands together, wringing her fingers, not knowing where to look as the statement slowly sank into her consciousness. She had to do the one thing that was currently coursing through her mind. Escape.
She slowly got to her feet without looking at Tina and slowly walked away.
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Bette took a deep breath, she knew from the familiar sting in her eyes and the instant lump in her throat that tears would follow, she had no intention of stopping them, her vision was becoming blurred as she slowly made her way to the shoreline, her hands shoved deep in her pockets, her heart was now pounding, she was almost sure that it had momentarily stopped for a few seconds when she heard Tinas words, but now all she could feel was the hammering muscle in her chest, confirming its existence inside of her, and if she still wasnt sure of its presence it backed up its hammering with a resounding thudding in her ears.
She reached the edge of the shore, the small waves gently lapping at her toes, she looked down, seeing her feet being momentarily covered by the gentle white wave, before it slunk back and allowed them to come into view once again, she flexed her toes, digging them absentmindedly into the sand. Her thoughts wouldnt move, she couldnt think of anything, she couldnt remember anything, apart from those lasts words that Tina uttered I dont like the way you treat me when Melvin is around
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awesome chapter jobadge. you really captured that little girl and her conversation with Bette had so many layers of meaning.
wow…i just read the last 3 chapters… and i am speechless… they were beautiful, sexy. loving, truthful and then innocent as a child… wow just about says it all.. please continue
Yes..definitely. Out of the mouths of babes. Children are so matter of fact. They truly see the world in it’s simply measure…they see what’s in front of them. They speak the truth and it’s truly a huge loss when we lose that. We loss an important gift when we grow up…it then becomes a struggle to get it back. Thanks for this amazing chapter…
Jo, I don’t know how it is possible, but your writing gets better and better with each chapter. Your love scenes are hot, but your last two chapters are just incredible.
Every one needs to met a little girl whos name is Emily.Children are so smart and adorable. Bette know how to say I;m sorry Love this thanks
Good chapter and now let see how Bette will make up for Tina. Ok post soon please, thanks!
Children have a way of totally disarming a person. They can tell a person exactly how it is without breaking a sweat. As adults we may not like what we hear coming from the little ones, but sometimes they know more than an adult does. I appreciate how you can take words and arrange them into such profound statements. There is so much pain in this world and it is nice to come here and read that there is joy out there somewhere (just not on the L word right now). Keep Tina and Bette communicating.
Expertly written! Looking forward to more.
Another brilliant chapter Jo — is there any thing that you cannot write babe — i am so impressed and you have given me food for thought – you are on a roll and i remain in awe of you….
OK, well at least Bette knows how to apologise. Just make sure she has a breath mint or something before she kisses Tina, OK? Ah, from the mouth of babes…Big ones, little ones.
awesome!!! ;)
Usually your chapters leave me a little speechless…and i have to think about how its made me feel ….this one is no exception!,..but ive used up all the phrases that i can think of to describe your story, yes its awesome, yes its hot, and yes its some great writting… but somehow i think you know all that..lol…so ill just leave it as `simply the best`!!! I love the turn its taken….
yeah and Bette it starts off with a really hott ass kiss, continued by some serious loving, and then in the light of day u put old man Porter’s ass in place.
excellent! I think that they might lead to make-up sex!!! lol
Your fantastic writing and story makes me loathe Ilene more and more. Definitely looking forward to future chapters.
I loved Emily…and Bette’s apology. GREAT chapter!!
Always amazing. Again a fantastic blend of things that make me laugh, smile, cry and go all warm and fuzzy inside! I really loved “…she’s five going on thirty.” “Mummy, I’m five and three quarters.” Just exactly what a five year old would reply. Excellent writing as ever.
OMG I’m in awe….