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    Tina, Tiny Pieces Chapter 5, Part 4

    Story written on April 5, 2006 by lastkid.
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    The Chicken Dance, Part IV

    In Tinas Car

    I have driven around for an hour.  I have butterflies and damp palms.  I am determined.  I don’t want to go home.  I don’t want to see him, or face him, or talk to him, or explain myself to him.  I have a gnawing feeling that I will have to, soon.  But not right now.

     

    Right now, I just don’t know what to say.

     

    I’ve driven past the Planet.  I slowed down but thought better of it.  I can’t.  If I’m being honest, Im too afraid of what Kit would say, how she would look at me – disappointed, angry.  What would I say in return?

     

    I have driven by Cream four or five times.  It looks the same, except the sign.  Its larger, the lettering spaced farther apart, the letters more angular, more serious.  I look for their cars.  I look for Bette’s car.    

     

    I wonder, sadly, if they’ve gotten new cars.

     

    I take a deep breath, I turn around on La Cienega, I head back towards Melrose.  What’s the worst that can happen?  I catch them off guard, but they’ll recover.  It’s not like I’m going to run into Bette.

     

    I’ve looked for her car but not because I want to know if shes there  I don’t want to know if she’s there, I want to know if she’d be there.  There is a distinction and its important and I don’t know why, exactly. 

     

    On the floor for two years.

     

    I shake my head, I frown.  I circle the block once more, I park.  I sit back in my seat, I sigh.  I sip from my water bottle.  My cell rings.

     

    Hello?  Yeah.  So, is she ok?  Ok.  What?  I’m sitting outside – never mind.  I’m fine.  I’ll be home later.  Later.  I don’t know when.  No, not late, just later.  What?  No.  Ok.  Henry?  Um, I’ll – I’ll call you if I need anything, ok?

     

    I lean my head back, I close my eyes.  He is a good man.  He is a good man but  No.  I can’t think one more second about what I don’t, I can’t, I shouldn’t, I didn’t, I won’t.  I clench my fists.  I push them against the steering wheel, my arms taut, my muscles straining, my knuckles whitening.  I grit my teeth.  I relax my arms.  I grab my purse off the passenger seat, I open the door.

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    1. oh my hell…such a point to stop…my heart is pounding, i’m holding my breath…i feel like tina…post soon (i so hope, i pray actually, that your story will have a happy B&T ending)

    4. you just had to stop there… grrrr… and i know what you mean about alice/alive… bette/better… tina/tona i have hit them all too… ok write the next chapter… i can’t wait to see what they all do…

    5. thanks for the great updates. man, i was hoping Tina wouldn’t go and ruin their fun but let’s just hope Bette continues to get better. Tina makes my head hurt, what the hell does she want? come back soon.

    6. Ai! Really digging the story. Always happy to see an update even though I know I will be getting a dose of angst. Just hoping there will be some light at the end. Hope to see more soon!

    8. I howled with laughter at imagining Alice standing there looking like shit and singing into her hairbrush. Hell that’s me on a GOOD day. LOL I know all about the typos with everyday words, not so much character names since I haven’t written anything for nearly a month. Remember comes out as rember or remebeber, and lately comfort comes out as comofrt. Go figure.

    9. hey, anyone in particular about the roadkill comment?? tks lastkid, this story is exceptional in all it’s facets…Just all Bette to your spellck dictionary and it’ll be ok…Thankyou for posting regardless of it’s annoyances…I love it and appreciate it…now, more pls!!!

    10. I also need to learn to type….that’s add bette to your spellck…you have just the right amount of angst and light hearted banter in this story…tks!!

    11. It hard to type when you mind is ahead of your fingers. Alice is so funny and so is Shane. Tina is in for a big surprize.Will they invite her to set with them are will they all get up and leave. thanks

    15. AARRGHH SELFISH ASS B*ITCH!! GO JUMP OFF A BRIDGE TINA!!! Ok got it out my system, OMG your writing is absolutely amazing, loving this, cant wait for your next post, thank you.

    16. Lastkid, you simply rendered me anoxic till Ch 5.4, p.3. I may be blue in the face but I am absolutely over the rainbow after reading your posts. //¶// I had some good laughs from your author’s notes. And, of course, from my new fave expression: Oh, lord love a duck. If I say that one really fast, people (I think) think I have Tourette’s syndrome. Thanks for posting. Cheers!

    18. Oh god, my heart is pounding. I feel like Tina holding my breath wondering what is going to happen next. I know what I would like to happen. I can feel Bette’s eyes boring a hole into mine as the different silent emotions run through her mind and heart. Oh please don’t slam that door on a happy Bette and Tina and baby Angelica who needs her mommy B.

    23. Tina has always lacked the strength to make a decision that isn’t couched in some sort of underlying need for someone else to force her hand. She tacitly blames not seeing their cars as an excuse for not stopping intially, then wallows for a brief moment at the thought that they might have bought new cars and not informed her. She feels the effect of being out of the loop……Tina’s reticence to face Kit shows that she is not ready to accept the consequences for her actions……She questions everything, examines all of the possibilities, looks for answers everywhere but inside of herself…..The difference between IF and BE is the difference between healing, and moving on. One most definitely excludes Tina……When Henry calls, he is the excuse that she subconsciously uses to exit her car and walk into Cream……Their group of friends is far too intimate for Bette and Alice’s shared secret of ‘dry cleaning’ to go unnoticed by Shane, but it’s Shane’s subtle acknowledgement that continues to buttress their group, rather than vitiate it by exposing their secret……The visual of Alice, complete with bed head, is by far one of the most vivid pictures of Alice that has leapt forth from the pages of fan fic! That was pitch-perfect……Having each of them share something they liked about being single was cathartic and to a degree healing in its own way. Admitting their foibles as a group of single women served to take a bit of the edge off of the loneliness that only single women understand……They things they revealed and how they revealed them said so much about each person’s personality. With Jenny continuting to trivialize others feelings while skating on the lunatic fringe of her own mythic existence……Tina’s longing for the Halcyon days she voluntarily gave up with her frineds was palpapble…..Playing the group conversation against Tina’s inner dialogue created a wonderful sense of tension, it gave depth and texture and you could almost feel the Vortex that was pulling Tina closer to the epicenter……The tenuous first steps by the group to establish some normalcy was nicely juxtaposed with Tina’s mistep as she approached the group……The group loves Bette dearly and knows that she has been and still is, hurt deeply and I am on the edge of my seat waiting to see if Helena’s mention of Tina’s name will be an indictment an entreaty or a dismissal……A magnificant story with such fully realized characterizations. Another great chapter with rich layers of complexity superimposed onto each other that create a very intense, intelligent and engrossing tale. Applause!!

    26. no no no NO NO Lasty, NO! It continues to be all about tina and her I want I want I want…with no regard or thought at all to the impact on others. She has destroyed Bette, she doesn’t have the right to come into the group like nothing has happened. NO! Love your writing…you know it. ps..I wouldn’t put up with any raisin bagel stealing or bagelnapping, not no way, not no how!

    29. Good God woman how can you stop there? You are such a tease. As usually this story is painfully good. I love seeing them all trying to get on with their lives, stumbling forward and back. Nice to see them around a table having fun for a change.

    31. I have totally come undone with this one Kid and I could not be happier. Even though Tina evokes the feeling of utter despair in me I still get her or at least her longing for something and not being able to truly distinguish what that something is. Tina wants to belong but she has no clue where that is and she seems unwilling to act based on what her own being tells her. Thanks Kid

    32. Such a nice vignette, lastkid, giving us a quick portrait of them all, even Max, who tends to be vacant even when he isn’t absent. And of course, some more of Tina’s stream of consciousness that rarely pauses to consider. If Henry’s such a good man, why can’t she stand to be around him? I certainly look forward to how you’re going to handle this meeting. Why do I feel like it’s doomed to be awkward?

    33. Wow! My heart quickened reading this. I can only imagine what it would be like being one of those characters in the room at that moment. I hope Shane and Max stand guard and shoo Tina away. Of course, doing such with a few choice words from beforehand would be even better. How else will Tina get a clue to the level destruction she left in her wake?

    36. That and the last chapter were excellent…loved every word…it was funny,emotional…sad and a complete pleasure to read…Thanks….Loved the `Bettes teeth` thing very fuuy…..

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