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La Mer PT 10
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La Mer PT 10
Ch 16
Huntington Beach, California.
I watch wave after wave missing how unafraid I use to be. When I got back home mama was her usual annoying self. I had come to the realization that coming home didn’t mean that the life you where running from stopped. It was that tree in the forest making noise even though no one can hear it.
Shane. I missed Shane. I feel angry, alone, volatile.
Why did I leave? Why didn’t I fight that stupid voice in my head? Why can’t I get over this and just get in the water? My leg is fine, my board is waxed, my wet suit is dry. Why don’t I just get in paddle till I reach the break and go….? Why can’t I stop thinking about how much I miss Shane, and the goofy grin she gave me when she thinks I am not looking?
Damn.
I stick my board in the sand and sit down and watch the riders….it the most amazing thing in the world….realizing you’re in love…then the reality sinks in….your in love…what now?
A twenty hour flight brings me closer to her. Listening to Jeff Buckley was not making the trip any easier. The stewardess keeps the drinks coming; I guess this is the privilege of first class. Me a millionaire, money till I die, money. Never cared much for money, I never dreamed about that car, never wanted to own a house. The only dream I ever had was to meet Carmen.
I am not in the habit of falling in love with a poster on my wall. Not in the habit of falling in love at all. The reality of this strange situation hitting me as I waited on line at the airport with no luggage, and no passport. I left my house as soon as I got that letter and in the haste of trying to catch up with her I forgot everything else. If that isn’t love then I don’t know…..
Sarah was not at my place when I got there. Which is a blessing. I didn’t want to talk to her, didn’t want to her excuses and in the end didn’t want to see her cause she reminded me of dad….my dad dead, my mom dead, no family no friends just Carmen, my dream girl.
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awesome story! fantastic writing. i must say i liked the ending i dont think it was irresponsible in anyway, your story, your rules, but u handled it very well. i loved reading it till the end! now we’ve only got As Sure As The Sun for survival lol but something is better thn nothing right. well congrats dude it was an awesome ride of emotions. and thankyou!
I LOVE YOURE STORIES LOVED THEM . I THINK YOU COULD HAVE DONE MORE BUT THATS UP TO YOU . YOURE MY FAVORITE WRITER SO ENYTHINK YOU DO IS GOOD TO ME LOL. DONT FINISH LIKE THAT As Sure As The Sun BECAUSE I WILL DIE LOL BUT PLEASE MAKE ANOTHER STORY LOL
How am I always the first one to comment? Is it my almost stalker-ish/obsessive love for this site/your stories? Maybe. I don’t think that was an ‘irresponsible’ ending in any sense, I think it was very sweet and mature of Shane to let Carmen come to her. And if you feel the story is over, then it is. I want you to love your stories and feel like you are saying something with every chapter, because as much as you are writing this for all of us, you are writing it for yourself too. It’s important to let your writing and creativity guide you to where you want to go, not to push it, and sometimes you just know that it’s time to end it. I enjoyed this story very much, and I hope to see more from you very soon! P.S. I absolutely love your taste in music…
I understand that you don’t want to write just for the sake of putting words down and dragging something out. But I’ll be honest, I didn’t want this story to end. It was nice to see Shane be happy-ish and goofy and sunny; it’s different, ya know. Still, you ended it on a happy note and all’s well that ends well. Thanks for sharing; it was an awesome story.
Bull bull! you just don’t like this story as much as your other one!~ *sob* This is my favorite story, and though I am still in denial about the abrupt ending, sigh what can I say, not like I can put a knife at your throat and force another chap or two out of you. I love this story for all it’s worth, and for the sake of all the fans in the world, write another story. Please. Thank you.
I thought it was a lovely ending. You are absolutely right. It is your story to tell, in whichever way you want to tell it….short ending, or long, it is up to you. And, I loved this line…”There are moments when you think of the actual physics that are needed to kick your self in the ass.” LOL So true! Thanks!
I am surprised you ended it, but if you continued they would’ve been forced into drama so I do understand the ending. They did come full circle & Shane was drug free for once (thanks for that). Great story, Hope you decide to write more.
I totally understand why you ended it this way. I think Carmen needed time to realize just how much Shane meant to her and every since the accident Shane had been there. The time apart was good for Carmen and well the reunion was good for them both!! No complaints here.