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Me, I’m Not….Final
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Me, I’m Not…..Final
Ch 21
We decided we needed a change of pace and so we drove. Each taking turns till we hit the coast. Till deserts waned and blue water so sparking loomed over the horizon. Time was just something moving with us, a guide track. It drifted past us much like the vehicles on the highway. Every now and then they spoke in low voices. Shane next to me as I drove her neck turned toward the window so she could hear whatever light secret thing Carmen had to tell her, something she noticed on the highway, did she want some of her bottled water, did I? A low murmured acknowledgment of her feelings a deep sigh from Shane. A smile she could not shake. I looked and turned the radio on for ambience.
The city…this coastal city was wonderful just another beautiful place. Tourists milling about. Children running in the streets offering various trinkets for sale. We came upon a quaint beach front hotel. Not too high with most rooms facing the glittering water. We choose a suite needing to feel our larceny. The weight of money burning a hole that seemed to follow us waiting to spent, begging for someone to earn it. Carmen did all of the talking and off we went.
I followed them and they followed the bellhop who is leading. Taking in how close they where to each other. How they tried to hide their ever growing smiles, how Carmen laughed at Shane’s silly jokes. The way she touched her arm, it was all falling into place. I smiled despite myself. The bellhop he opened the double doors to our room and we where instantly greeted by the scent of fresh cut flowers, our eyes moving over the expanse of the modern decor and the icing….a dead center view of the ocean and the ten or so tall white sails floating by.
I gave the young a man a tip that made his eyes buldge in his smooth face. He was speaking in a rapid tone to the effect that anything we needed we should ring for him personally. I didn’t need Carmen to translate. I had heard that time and time again. It was such a huge relief to be able to feel that power again. I smiled as they talked about the beauty of the room. I hadn’t the heart to say the room was quaint and a little small. It would have been snobbish and truthfully compared to the room we had in Tijuana it was the Ritz.
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“Its just fan fan fiction, its supposed to fun and its supposed to get you to that Calgon moment.”It’s supposed to be fun, but that doesn’t mean that you shouldn’t still know what you’re doing as far as grammar, spelling, punctuation and story development goes. It’s what separates the hobbyists from the real writers. You’re not even a hobbyist. You’re just masturbating here. Doing it for the ego stroke. Make this your last story for a while until you know what the hell you’re doing.
Sooooo Good.. loved the ending really! you never stom amazong me, you trully have a gift and you should never stop writing… i know for sure i would never stop reading. You make us love does characters to the point we are crying laughing and so very into it. For the hater… thats what they are haters, and if they dont like you, they dont really know whats good. Because your great you’re D’ Best so dont listen to him come on!! one out of a million hates you so what!? people hate britney spears but she still sells 5o million a year (and i like britney lol) YOU CANT STOP WRITING EVER!! you R the only reason some of us come here at the first place you have a gift so dont stop because some loser told you, you sucked just to make you mad lol so fuck him and i’ll be waiting for your next story like a kid in chrismas so.. b’bye!
I’m speechless again, everytime I read the ending to one of your stories I am fucking speechless! All I can say is that it was fucking BRILLIANT! Like always. FIVE STARTS *****
I am spending way to much time on the net today. I was being sarcastic, I am not quiting though I have been thinking about it. I have been thinking about it because I have a really good job as a Audio Engineer, I cut sound effects for movies, and as many of you know I am in a band. And yes this is a hobby, I have never claimed writing to be anything but a hobby. I never said that I was god’s gift to writing fan fiction. And this isnt my life. It might be that way for some but its not for me. So yeah….I have always been honest and humbled by all of your responses. As for one my one true love music which you all know. That is was matters most to me. Writing is something I do to get junk out of my head so I don’t spend all night trying to figure out ways to hate everyone. Also something that I have made clear. I can only ask about the amount of time someone spends reading “Total Garbage.” Oh yes I know those who cant write, who dont write, who take this all way too serious…they critize. Just some advice…its really a waste of time and space to spend your exisitence, (cause you plainly have no life) its sad to spend it picking and choosing which insult to fling to whatever the moment calls for, “it would have been great if…..finally got Carmen right….total garbage….god what else did you say that “I am stroking my ego?” I am what jerking off to fan fiction…..Right now I would insert a laugh track if I could…..none of this mine….I don’t own anything….this is fun nothing more nothing less. As for you my sweet. Make up your mind…not wait…let me…..keep reading stuff you dont like….it only makes me and my fans, and my band mates laugh harder.And take pride in this for a moment you got me down to your lame level, rejoice, laugh, masturbate in peanut butter for all I care….I know you’ll come back for more and I know that I wont. So lick it up babe cause this cant spell cant put a sentence together peson aint got no more time to waste on you….I hope you read my words and they make your eyes bleed….As for eveyone else I am sorry that I have wasted so much time on this….Not quiting got something in the works will put it up when its up…..Love you all even the haters….because after all if there where no balance…I wouldnt know where I stand..Fists up laughing at my screen…….later…….New Dawn Fades……..
~Applause~ Well put, NDF. Can’t wait to see what AU you give us next. Seeing things from Helena’s pov worked extremely well. Great job.
Bring on the next, NDF! This fic was awesome(Like all your fics are..) and I’ll be waiting for more. You love the haters, huh? Your a good person, I see. I say fuck them.. Thanks for sharing your stories with us. Really. Take care. =**
lol jaja see. after that i only have to say…. your rock lol hey we get is your hubby but you cant blame us for trying to keep you as long as we can lol we really like this… man keep it up as long as you can and ive told you before i hope nothing but the best for you and your band but if you get famause please keep the name!! LOL
New Dawn Fades = Amazingly talented writer that I would gladly pay to read.Negativebl1ss = Whack job
Wow!!!!Always the best!!!! Thanks
“Purest feeling”… sweet NIN ref. Great story. That kiss in the nightclub, it’s so simple but so beautiful. Keep smoking. * * * * *
Very nice, few people write for Helena, nice to see it, Great story
I could tell this is the best Helena in fics that i’ve read recently. Bandit things were really great. Thank you for finishing this one and.. thank you agian.. :D
“Make this your last story for a while until you know what the hell you’re doing”I’m scared….you got me shook. You got me…..I won’t ever write again……And you wont ever need to waste anymore of your speical needs time on me…..I am going to hide under my blankey and never write again….you win loser…you win….
it was a perfect ending!! Thanks for the happy ending, i know it’s not normally your style! hehee