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Closure – Chapter 16
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It took Alice a while to understand that Dana was not driving towards the condo or the writer’s apartment. Alice was exhausted from the events of the last 24 hours. She couldn’t believe it had only been that long. She was also feeling the effects of the mild painkiller that Abby had provided.
“Dana? Where are you headed?”
Dana looked over and gave her a little smile. “You picked a very good time to visit.” She said lightly “I’m staying at a beach house for a while. It’s a place I am thinking about buying as a rental property.”
Alice tried to comprehend what Dana was saying. Something about it didn’t quite make sense, but, she was in no condition to try to figure it out.
“OK.” Alice mumbled “I shouldn’t be in your way for too long. I should get back to my place soon.”
Dana had no intention of that happening when Alice was still so fragile, but, did not want to get into that discussion today.
The mini was parked in the driveway and Alice veered over to it. She was rummaging in the back and came out with a partially filled garbage bag. Dana rushed over. “Here. Let me get that. What’s the point of being a famous lezzie tennis player if you can’t carry big bags for your friends?” That caused Alice to sleepily grin. Dana loved that grin.
Dana opened the door and set the bag inside. She then walked Alice over to the sofa and, even in her current state, Alice couldn’t believe how amazingly comfortable it was.
“I’ll be right back, Al. I’m just going to get you some water to take your pills.” Abby had given them a couple prescriptions for pain and a general antibiotic.
“OK” Alice responded sleepily.
By the time Dana got back, Alice had curled up into a tight ball on the sofa and was sleeping soundly. Dana did not want to wake her just yet. Her pills could wait an hour or so. She gently tucked a throw blanket around Alice and went to the kitchen.
Dana dug into her purse and found Alice’s cell phone. She knew the code to Alice’s voice mail. She felt shitty using it, but, she needed to know if Jackie called and what she was thinking. She turned the phone back on and noticed there were 3 unheard messages. Dana was surprised there weren’t more.
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it pisses me off that someone would do this to another person! Sighs but as a good writer it is your job invoke these type of emotions to kudos to you for doing that at least in me,lol. I never tire of dana’s love for aliceor her friends. in fact i wish dana had more time on the show and they developed her character more than her just coming as a pro tennis player.
Awww, I want a Dana to take care of me since I’m depressed. Can you supply me one? Just for a day or so, I promise. I’ll give her back. And please don’t feel bad, you’re doing an incredible job! I’m just a sap who’s in love with a fictional piece of adorable named Alice, that’s all. Happy New Year babe!
Really enjoyed this chap. My first thought would have been to delete the messages to save Al any pain, but it’s true that you really need documentation in domestic cases….and remembering Harrison in the show I was quite amused picturing him teaching Dana how to use a taser :) Happy New Years to you (officially 24 mins ago where I am and dang I gotta work at 9am)
Very believable. I can very easily say that this is how a real life crisis can be handled. The safe house, the locks, the packing. A doctor prescribing a slight sedative and antibiotic is very real to help ease the pain and give the patient some sleep. And Alice needs all the rest she can get. Jackie’s third call, at 2pm, was ridiculous. She came off like if Alice doesn’t come back to her, on a leash, she’ll just leave and Alice’ll be left all alone. SHE IS NEVER ALONE You brain dead bitch!
Im glad Dana is there for my sweet Alice. Still makes me mad as hell what Jackie did,when is the gang going to meet up with this awful person? Thanks again for writting this story!!PPSHave a healthy 2008!!!
SORRY IT TOOK SO LONG TO COMMENT. I was sleeping till like 4 pm. So now im all caught up. I really love Dana. I want her to be my best friend. I’m not saying I don’t want to do nasty good things to her. But anyway. I love you MAGOOSE you are great. Love the story.Weapon of the day is…a steel pole
Awwwwwwwwww…awwwwwwwwww, just lots of sweet awwnes for that chapter. Sorry I’m like last to comment, my internets been down but another lovely chapter. Jackie needs that phone stuck where the sun don’t shine. pps! Happy New Year xxxx
To comment after partying all night is a challenge but I don’t want to wait †ll the morning because I love this story. MaGoose, another excellent chapter. Thank you Harrison for the pepper spray and tasers. If needed there are screwdriver and crow bar too supplied by HF. not to forget all the baseball bats and tennis racquets offered by the other readers.I am very touched by D’s tenderness and care. The messages made me sick to the stomach. (I wonder if it had to do with the extra drinks consumed earlier.) From the looks of things, A would need all the rest she could get. Poor A! Thank you for letting the gang worked together to protect her. MaGoose, you are really doing a fantastic job with this story. Thank you and Happy New Year!
What I been thing of doing to Jackie,was the same thing she did to Alice. Then I would have been a Jackie. So I still like the lrgal way. If she is stupid enough to try to hurt Alice again. Let them all do thier thing A good old wood shed a&% kicking,whooping. thanks Hey Lady Happy New year to you and your/ thanks
sweet!!!!!!! dana is doing such a great job..she loves her so much i can’t wait till they get back together :)alice deserves so much more its sad that its come to this point but im glad shes got the gang
You continue to tell this important story so well. Reading about a physically and emotionally exhausted Alice is really difficult but it is made somewhat easier knowing that she is in the caring hands of your attentive Dana. Thanks for posting.
:)…………..yesh, Dana will protect Alice!
I love how you’ve captured Dana’s internal life during this period…so many thoughts banging around with no one to bounce them off of and at the same time keeping focused on the only thing that counts at the moment: keeping Alice safe emotionally and physically. While I suspect Al will fight both of those things when her head starts to clear and Jackie’s programming starts to kick in, I just wanted to let you know that your committment to telling such a difficult story is impressive…I know it can’t be easy on the author. Looking forward to your next…Happy 2008!
Loving this story – you are writing it so beautifully. Just wish I could get my hands on the ‘person’ who did this to Alice and live in hope that Dana gets the opportunity to show her who is boss. Look forward to more and more in 2008. Thank you from a loyal Danish fan.