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Soft Spoken Secrets (Gudamg Garam) # 14
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Previously
Bette tried to get his attention again.
“Good to see you again…Jeremy…”
“No…It’s not…”
And Jeremy took the gun he had hidden inside his jacket.
Madison didn’t hear or saw it coming. She just felt the push Bette gave her, the burning pain and the blackness.
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What Madison didn’t see, but sooner would appear on national TV was Jeremy talking to Bette, pulling the gun out, pointing nervously and shooting, not once or twice, but at first, three times.
She didn’t see her friends in despair running through the door like a manada of wild animals. Only Jim, each was paralyzed by fear got sat with his brand new camera in his hands.
The first shot crossed the air and found the board behind the two women.
The second shoot got Madison’s shoulder in the way, tracing a line of heat only because, when Bette saw his move and previewed what was Jeremy’s intention; she pulled Madison fast, behind herself. But she was not fast enough and Madison got shot, but instead of three times, she was one.
The young brunette felt down and her head kicked on the floor.
The third shoot penetrated Bette’s soft flesh. A palm from the heart.
But the fourth shoot hit the target just like Jeremy wanted.
The fact was that the pain that crossed Bette’s body was far from enough to disconcert all her senses and she didn’t know anything about the fourth shot.
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There was a strength idea firing in his mind and he was one of the God’s soldiers. Bette must die because she was showing the way of sin to innocents and Madison… Well, Madison because she was a lamb that denied salvation. Jeremy had thought enough. It was time to do the job.
Jeremy walked the steps with strength. He was pride of his task.
He shot to kill Madison at first just because she was his target and also his desire. He loved Madison, but he hated this love. She was not descent. She was not a woman to marry him. She was a sinner. Jeremy got mad because Bette had tried to interrupt his task and when both, Madison and Bette felt down under the impact of the bullets and the pain, the fourth projectile was addressed to Bette.
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Hello Braz, that was one of the most powerful things I have ever read… those emotions… they cut straight to the bone… that piercing heat is just… brings back some powerful memories… that was completely brilliant… the love that Bette has for Madison and Tina is infinite… the memories like I was living them again right here… right know… Thank you that was completely brilliant. Sincerely, JC
Braz, you are a writer that moves me when I read your material. I cannot help but allow myself to get lost in your stories, particularly ones which pull at my heart. The hurt, pain, shock, that Tina is feeling is just going to dismantle her completely. Like JC said, it truly felt like I was right there when that violent act took place. Brilliant writing my dear friend. It’s always a pleasure to read anything from your gifted and creative mind. Love and Hugs, and once you are settled we shall catch up. xoxo
Now I’m crying and cursing you and asking myself why I read that and crying again and God I’d like to hate you but I can’t.
God I am lost for words, that was just brilliant. I hope dat both Bette and Madison survive.PPS
I so sorry that today at this very minute, some gay or lesbian will be hurt in someway. God is love.not hate, this was so emotional. you could feel the bullets on inpact. You could feel Bette love for these two woman. Just let them be albe to go on living and be the family that they need to be. The other soul that passed. Blame his family and try to give them peace thanks
Braz, I must say that I could picture this scene in my head and all the pain and hate that he had in his mind and heart. TO want to kill a person to rid of thier SINS of course in his mind, as he saw it. But then to see how Bette made a plea to kill her and not Mad is a real mother would wnat her life taken and not of Mas, Beautiful, and then for Tina to see her two LOVES on the floor, oh I can picture the pain in her eyes. I must say that writing is nothing compared to my making my music videos on TLW. As ALWAYS BRAZ, a perfect chapter!!
Our jaws dropped to the floor in shock and horror. OMFG! We could smell the gun powder, see the blood spilled on Mad and B’s bodies, feel Tina’s terrible pain, while watching her beloved ones being targeted. Jeeez, Braz!! If this is not enough material for a complete heart attack, we do not know what could be worse, dear friend. This is the most outstanding, altering and brilliant chapter we’ve ever come accross, Braz. You’re a brave and talented writer, plus we’re sooo proud of you. Big hugs & kisses.- Lucero & Marsha – P.S. You better send those Carnival pics ASAP to compensate our shattered hearts.
This chapter was the bravest and sadest I have ever read. I could kick myself for reading but I could not stop reading. Please let them live, you hold their lives in your hands and your heart and mind. They shoul dnot die like that and let them live to continue to experience the love of Tina, they need to be a family. Please don’t let them die. Great work. PPS
WOW… That was intense in a very different way than what we are used to in this site. Very well written. I hope you’ll continue real soon. Can’t wait for an update.
Damn this is bad and sad, you make me cry my friend. Please let them be ok, Let Bette be alive and Madison are ok. Please post more, thanks!
That was so powerful. Bette’s pure love for Madison, truly that of a mother. The pain of Tina seeing her daughter and the only love of her life. Please tell me you have a way to save them.
aaaaaaaaaaghhhhhhhhh ! I was so happy to see your post, and now I nearly hate you for what you did to them… if I count well, it’s the second time you have Tina finding Bette bathing in her own blood, and with Madison this time… you really have no pity for our poor romantic hearts… just when things seemed to get better, thanks to Madison… now, I really hope that Bette is NOT dead, even if she felt like it… doctors will arrive real soon and save her, won’t they ? won’t they ? please, please, please… :-) — Oh, and by the way, I think that Jeremy took the easy way off, much too easy… I would have shot him much lower than the mouth… somewhere where he would have recalled all the rest of his miserable life in prison for a life sentence ;-) (Yes, I am ordinarily nice, but I can be VERY MEAN to some fucking assholes… especially when my day has not been good, and today has been HELLLLLLLL ! so I just imagine what I would have done him instead of your merciful exit HEHEHEHEHEH !!! — And now, you’ll have to write quick, very quick, to mend all that so that the gang that wanted to chase you around the globe a few months ago won’t decide to re-group ;-) (I know you can’t resist a good threat, can you ?) — thanks Honey (and I was in no Carnival… poor of me, I live in a town where they don’t have any tradition of Carnival (not like Nice or Dunkerque)… I was just trying to rest from my working week, and enjoy a nice sunny weekend with my little Popa who came to visit me :-)
This is soooo painful to read. The life draining out of Bette and Madison as this boy becomes the judge, jury, and executioner. Is there hope for Bette and Madison or will Tina have to live without not only the loss of Bette (again) but her daughter Madison as well?
Hell now how could you do that to me!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You shot not once but alot and that hurt the ABS!!!!!!!!!!! so much but we looked brave The CLT is heart broken they have to make it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wow. so powerful. so sad, but the emotions are defined well. I grieve for this Tina.