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You (Part the Sixty-First)
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Alice woke up before sunrise and just lay there for a minute, dreading the phone and the call she figured was coming at some point today. Of course, it was barely after 5am on a Monday morning, so the call hadn’t come yet, but she was almost positive that it would. The past couple days had been way too good, and something had to happen to offset them. She hated thinking that way, but that was how life seemed to be for her, and she didn’t think it was going to change, as much as she wanted it to.
As her eyes adjusted to the darkness of the bedroom, Alice noticed that there were some funnily shaped things on the bed. And the coolness of the space next to her told her that Dana wasn’t there. Cursing herself for not noticing this rather important fact sooner, Alice turned on the bedside lamp and gasped at what she saw.
The room was covered with flowers. There was a mixture of roses, lilies, tulips, and what looked like a bunch of random wildflowers. There were bunches of them on the bed surrounding her, and strewn over the dresser and beside tables.
She might have sat there in shock until the sun came up if there hadn’t been a loud crashing sound from the kitchen. Then she heard Dana saying “God dammit!” in a voice that was obviously frustrated, but toned down so as not to wake Alice up.
Alice just smiled and put on her robe and slippers, then shuffled her way to the kitchen sleepily. Dana was standing over the stove in her pink pajamas, surrounded by a carton of eggs, lots of vegetables, cheese, and a bowl of what looked like pancake batter. There was also a tray on the counter, on which rested a vase with a single red rose and baby’s breath. Next to the vase was a blue velvet box.
While she didn’t want to ruin Dana’s obviously planned surprise, Alice found the entire scene too endearing to pretend to ignore. “Baby,” she said softly, trying not to startle Dana too badly, especially since she had a spatula in her hand and was working over a gas burner. She still jumped, but not too badly. Instead, she looked at Alice with an apologetic smile.
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I would like to visit Happy Lazy Land. Do I need a passport? How sweet was Dana with the flowers, the breakfast and the present? Maybe we should clone yours. Cooking naked = Not fun. Love the talking and re-connecting as friends. And the sex? Yum. Yay for the good of the world! Glad to see you continuing on with the story. I think you could write Alice and Dana reading the phonebook to each other and make it great. Thanks, MT!!
Hey Muted! Even though I haven’t commented in quite some time, this story remains one of my all time favorites and whenever I see a new chapter posted I feel like I’m receiving a visit from some dear friends. So, please continue writing it (and your other stories!)in whatever fashion you can. You have a wonderful talent.
you so cant give up!i love this story so much and if you give up i will cry!u can do lots more with this one like get dana free of cancer, alice and dana married etc see there is loads! but thank you for it anyway its an amazing story and i really do hope you continue with it!x
It’s my first time being first! Sorry for the lack of comments, Muted. Just like Dana, I’ve been remiss! Actually i’ve finished my damn dissertation ( that was hell… really!) and now my danish greed and my faulty English are back to beg you not to give up on this! Just kidding. Take it easy, a break or whatever. (Just don’t give up!!;p).I know what is like to not have any time apart from job… So i really thank you for this one!I loved it!
Well, I’m glad you still write on this story. Cause I really have a problem with stories that just “end” without an actual ending. I once read another amazing story about Danish and it was supposed to be 5 parts long, but the writer just decided to quit it after the 3rd one. To be honest, I was mad. Cause it was a brilliant story. But anyway, I can understand the fact, that you don’t want to write this one anymore. So maybe it’s time to give it a (hopefully) good ending and finish it. It’s up to you. You can always come up with something entirely new. I’m pretty damn sure, we’ll love it over here.I really liked this update, I liked this lazy-happy land. But … the phone call. Hope it’s on next time. CU next time.
Hmmm where to start….oooh I know….Don’t you dare stop writing this story. Ok that wasn’t polite I’ll try again, I’m sorry I haven’t been around to read the last couple of weeks but i just caught up with the last two chapters. I love this story and I think you have loads left to say. Please please please don’t stop!!!! I loved this chapter, you write those little intimate moments so beautifully, as we read this story we see them falling even more in love with one another. Thank-you for such a wonderful story!