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Masked Feelings CH 91 Reformed?
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If there was any time where Sharon’s intrusiveness came in handy it was now. Her mother always showed this amazing strength and she wondered where it came from. It was a good thing that Dana had been holding the gun at that time. Sharon wouldn’t have thought twice about shooting that bastard for attacking her daughter. As cool as she appeared on the outside, on the inside Sharon was just the exact opposite. She was a bundle of nerves. Her heart was racing when she saw the scenario running through her head again and again.
When the police arrived, Dana was still holding the gun on Tony’s man. She held her shirt closed with her free hand, clenching it with a firmly closed fist. One of the police officers had to practically pry the gun from her fingers. The other officer cuffed her attacker and read him his rights. The policeman asked Dana to fill out an incident report. She looked over at the man and he was staring at her. He smiled at her then winked.
"I’ll catch you later, sweetheart."
Dana knew he was just trying to intimidate her and sadly it was working. He’d probably get out without so much as a few hours in jail. Mobsters had the best sleezy lawyers that knew every loophole.
Dana also filled in the police about Alice being kidnapped. They said that they would report it to the proper authorities in Los Angeles. Somehow this didn’t make her feel better. She knew she had to get back home as soon as possible. Hopefully she could get to Alice before she was locked up in that damn mansion. Tony was probably never going to let her out and even if he did she’d have someone with her at all times. This was worse than any prison sentence.
When they finally got all the information that they needed and left, Sharon grabbed her daughter and hugged her tight. It surprised her a bit, just because she didn’t tend to openly show her emotions. The only ones she got to experience were of the negative persuasion. She had to admit that her mother came through for her when things were at their worst. Her mother’s timing couldn’t have been better. There have been times however when she messed up a lot of good moments… for instance spending Christmas with Alice. She sighed heavily when she thought of her. Dana wondered if they would ever have a chance to be together now. Something or someone always stood in the way.
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I have no idea what to even say about that chapter and I knew huge chunks of the story before hand. WOW! That was fucking insane. Probably more insane than any other chapter you’ve written before and that is certainly saying a lot. Thank you for rushing to get this chapter posted for my birthday and all your wonderful birthday wishes. You are truly amazing and I’m extremely grateful to you and fortunate to have you in my life. I still don’t know what to think about any of this. You definitely threw some curve balls in there. You took my outline and ran with it. If there is anyone that doesn’t like this chapter however, I will entirely take the blame for making you jump through that many damn hoops. Thank God Tony is dead and all I can say is, it couldn’t have happened to a nicer guy. I’m still have issues trying to find any sympathy for Roxy. I don’t like her and the fact that she had a fucked up childhood, doesn’t excuse her actions as an adult. I was shocked and upset about Kristen’s miscarriage. I’m still on the fence with her as a character and haven’t always known what to make of her and her motives, especially where Dana is concerned. I really don’t know what to make of this new FBI agent and can’t wait to see where you take it. Your new assassin/ninja is seriously cut-throat. Are you sure you’re going to be able to contain her? Sounds like more than a handful. A Danish threesome? Will wonders never cease? That just looks like it’s going to leave a hell of a lot of carnage in it’s path, not to mention how David will respond to his new hire dipping into the merchandise. Tsk tsk tsk. Sounds like hell to pay. Oh yeah. DING DONG THE WITCH IS DEAD! Oh Yeah! Jenny is fucking dead and I’m loving it!!! I’ve said it once, I’ve said it twice, you’re a sick fucking bitch, but you’re brilliant! That was positively demented. Thank you for my birthday present. It really does mean the world to me that you dedicated this chapter to me and indulged my insanity. Thank you again!!!
I think everyone else is still too stunned to comment….
damn girl, 43 pages!! you’ve really outdone yourself. i’m at a loss for words. the chapter was great, very disturbing. the part about jenny was kinda funny… dude, how twisted am i? i don’t know what that outline consisted of, but thank you The Pineapple Head. this chapter definitely gives you a lot of different paths you can take w/ the story. when you first introduced diana, i thought it was lara coming back to wreak havoc. i’m glad tony’s gone, but that was a brutal way to go. poor danish, they just can’t catch a break. how much longer must the torture last, brteyes? the road to danish happiness is becoming ridiculously twisted and long. i will do a happy dance when this is over. well, thanks for all the hard work you put into this, and i hope the next chappy gets posted soon. ^ – ^
how did you find out about female ninjas? i’ve never heard of them. i’m amazed at the amount of stuff you know and have researched.
I’m here! Sorry for being late to the comment party. 43 pages? Holy moly. Here we go… So glad the Fairbanks women held their own and that Dana made reports with the police. Maybe this will be the push to get them to talk a bit more about what Sharon is holding back — if they ever get a quiet moment. I feel for Kristen and the miscarriage. It’ll be interesting to see how she handles the grief. I wonder if she will track down Roxy? Hopefully David doesn’t bother her. I hope Dana doesn’t continue to feel guilty. I think her anger was appropriate at the time of their conversation. Alice having to be in the house and under Tony’s thumb *and* being an informant? That is a lot to ask for. I don’t know what to say about Roxy. It sounds like David has some sort of plan other than just torturing her for the sake of torturing her. I can’t imagine her having to relive these horrible moments in her life. I am not sure yet if I am glad of the increased FBI involvement. They really haven’t been very helpful thus far. I understand why Dana gave Alice the pill and why Alice was angry about it. Unfortunately, this leaves both girls with just each other as alibis for what happened with Tony. Maybe the FBI agent was still around outside somewhere? Shoot. Even if Alice didn’t do it, it was done on her behalf — which may be enough to set off Bobby. Diana. Hmmmmm… I am not sure what to think. I agree that she shares some traits with Roxy. I wonder if push comes to shove whether her morals and dislike of David would outweigh her work ethic. She could either be an ally to Dana/Alice or another huge threat and wildcard. The massage parlor set-up was well done. I won’t be sending flowers to Tony’s funeral, either. He got what he deserved. I guess Jenny aggravated the wrong person this time. You had me giggling a bit at Diana’s thought process at the bar. It seems like Alice may have found a way to turn Tony off — by not fighting. I hope Alice had one more morning after pill left. I would hate to see her pregnant after all this. Then again, maybe that would save her from being killed by Bobby. I can’t believe we finally get rid of Tony and the blame may fall on Alice again. I am happy that Diana was there to help take care of Gino. But another dead body tied to Dana and Alice? This is getting messy. It was pretty significant that Diana felt comfortable taking Dana and Alice to the penthouse. I wonder if the threesome was based solely on her lust, or, if David mentioned getting them closer together and she saw that as a way to do so. At least Diana is not seeing anything permanent coming out of the encounter. Hopefully her resolve sticks. The ending scene was pretty hot and I was quite jealous of Diana. The moments/morning after should be…uhh…interesting. 52 card pickup, indeed! You have your work cut out for you, my friend. I don’t think I could proceed without some deus ex machina moments myself. Good thing the story is in your more than capable hands. Thank you so much for this amazing story and your courage to continue writing it.
WOW!! If MaGoose is saying sorry for commenting late then i am reli reli sorry i have been terribly slow at gettin to this point lol. Ok you did warn i will give u tht but BLOODY HELL!! Yes i’m a visual person like you so reading tht was hard but at the same time thrillin wat with the people that were being killed … not so much for Poor Jenny thou i mean tht was pretty rough way for her to go! But HAHA Tony he so deserved tht althou i’m not entirely sure it such a good thing he dead, well it is but it’s going to come with so many consiquences for Al and Dana, Al especially Bobby already hates her and now with Tony dead .. Oh dear, just take care of them both! I know u will lol. You reli have me intrigued with this Diana i mean she is seriously kick ass cool but i have to echo wat MaGoose has sed, is she going to be another serious threat to Al and Dana or will she turn out to be an ally and give David his endings for treating Al and Dana this way?? I dont know only you can tell us haha. I say it nearly every chapter but Poor Roxy is just gettin worse for her. Poor Kirsten as well! Be interesting to see how she deals with things now and her feelins for Dana now she doesnt have the baby to focus on? Well im going on to much lol just one last thing i love the intro with Diana as hard as some of it was u did give us a pretty hot 3sum at the end so we must thank you for tht i know i am haha :P. This story just get better nd better everytime i read and u NEVER cease to amaze me but tht is a good thing :) Thnk u so much for a great story cant wait for more :) PPS xxx
Does your mind work this way often?
brteyes, this is such an incredibly awesome update. First thing first, Between the Olympics beach volley ball men final and reading this chapter, I am a little late in wishing The Pineapple Head (TPH) a happy birthday. Hope you had a great day. brteyes, I am truly impressed with you keeping your promise on posting. Never doubted you though. lol. And thank you TPH for your outline and brteyes doing a fabulous job with it. TPH pretty much summoned up my reaction to the chapter. I would also like to add a few more thoughts. Thank you for bringing in Ninja Diana (ND) to give Tony what he absof*ckinglutely deserved. Karma, uh? I actually enjoyed reading what ND did to him. That was quite remarkable. Is this story starting to rub off on me? lol. When Tony forced himself on A again, I was livid. I kept hoping that he would be the next one off. And so he was. A BIG THANK YOU to you! Now would you please make sure A would get a proper medical check up to ensure everything was ok? Back to ND, I am fascinated by her unique skill and coolness. If I read it correctly, she also possessed a sense of righteousness. I hope it would play in A & D’s favor eventually, especially when David would finally do away with them. That was really hilarious how she and Jenny hooked up. LMAO. I have no problem with Jenny being gone ‘coz I never like her away. However, it scares me that ND was such a cold blooded assassin. As for the threesome. OMG, that was way, way, way too hot. Excellent writing job leading to it. I worry how this would affect A & D’s already fragile relationship. I never thought that they would get themselves involved with a 3rd person and even more unlikely with a stranger they just met. I suppose under such extreme emotional stress and with enough alcohol, anything is possible. So much had happened in this gigantic chapter. Please let A & D have some private time to sort things out. I was in tears reading pg.10 thru 12 thinking that A would be taken away for good. It was the same feeling when I watched “Color Purple” when Whoopi Goldberg cried as she witnessed her sister being taken away. You got to me again. As for Lara, I still think she would be back. David was extremely well organized and clever. I guess we will find out in due course why he wanted A & D happily back together I do have a theory on it though. Like TPH said, “you’re brilliant.” Simply BRILLIANT! Hats off to you again. THANK YOU VERY VERY MUCH for all your hard work!!!!!! You are indeed “a league of your own”!
This chapter was truly fucking with my mind but I loved it anyway. Well, maybe not everything and you know what I’m talking about, lol. Wow, 43 pages!!! That’s a new record, girl. I’m proud of you for being such a patient writer. Although you’re not getting enough applause and sometimes also negative comments from some readers you still keep going and I more than appreciate it. These people just don’t understand how much work you put into this and mostly even set your life, especially your free time and hobbies aside. I do hope that you’re going to continue writing because I’d be missing your brilliant story way too much. Big thanks to the Pineapple Head for creating the outline and finally being responsible for killing Jenny, lol. Finally;-)) Also, a belated Happy Birthday to you, Pineapple. Hope you had a nice birthday party and a lot of sex, lol. Now on with this story: When are you going to tell us more about Sharon, brteyes? Now that she’s proved to not being a total bitch I’m interested in her storyline. There absolutely have to be more skeletons in the closet. I’m looking forward to reading about her. I’d like to see her being a lesbian in denial…if that’s the case she should be have an affair with Roxy, lol. More dyke drama, lol. Damn, I’m really sorry for Kristen’s loss. This must have been so fucking hard for her but I have the feeling that she might seek revenge….and it won’t matter who it’s gonna be in the end. The newly introduced character, Diana, is quite like Roxy. She’s alone, and searching for trouble. We don’t know much about her yet but I’m quite sure that she’s just as depressed as Roxy. Maybe you should reveal more about her. She’s a lunatic but I like the way she got rid of Jenny, lol. A ninja…..don’t ninja’s usually wear black suits and a mask? You should change her clothing, lol. YAAAAAAAAAAY!!!! Tony’s dead!!!! Thought this would never happen. Now Alice can be more than happy that this insane chapter’s over. He deserved every single bit of torture Diana was doing to him. Actually, it made me laugh the way you wrote and portrayed it. Definitely don’t feel sorry for that bastard. David is still a monster. What is he trying to achieve with sending Tony’s “parts” to Bobby? Who does he want to make responsible for that? Alice? Dana? Or maybe Roxy? And what are his plans with that poor woman Roxy? Didn’t she suffer enough? Come on, brteyes, let her escape and kick David’s ass. Kristen seems to be the right choice to be stepping in and bringing him down, don’t you think so? I think, I missed a part somewhere because all the time I was wondering: where the hell has David this money from? I must have forgotten and for that I’m undeniably sorry. Can you see me blush? lol Yeah, I must have missed something. The last of this story was kinda confusing and all the time I was asking myself: what the fuck are they doing? It was awkward and probably a little out of line but it also fit the story somehow. By the way, now I don’t want to have sex with Dana anymore. I’m turned off by her, lol. Now that Tony’s dead: is Alice pregnant? If so, will she keep the baby or not? And how’s the relationship between Dana and Alice going to continue after this weird threesome? Both of them needed to feel something but was it the right way? I am sceptical about it. Just tell me that they’re still in love with each other and that will make me feel better. Or do you want them to break it up, hmmm? Are you a romantic, brteyes? What do you think most people are seeking in their lives? And don’t say money because that would be such an unromantic thing to say, lol. What do you mean by saying that you know better ways for making me lose my voice, hmmm? You need to explain that….Oh, and no rabbit story, just never ever! What do you want as a price? Maybe a whisky bottle? A sex toy? lol You should tell me;-) Merci beaucoup for this insanely super dooper XXL chapter. Hope there are more to come….what about next week? lol Thank you so much for writing!!! This one was truly evil! Please more of it!!!!! See you later, alligator;-))