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Shadows In The Dark – A Writers Challenge
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“Jesus bloody Christ” Helena broke the uneasy silence that had remained for the whole of the journey back to the cabin.
“What”
“Look”
They all turned to catch a glimpse of a retreating figure scurrying along the side of the cabin. From this distance and despite the fact they could only see the back of the person who had now began to run, they all thought exactly the same thing, the female form, the long flowing black hair, had every occupant jumping to the same impossible conclusion.
“It can’t be” Tina exclaimed.
“Only one way to find out” Bette replied stepping heavily on the gas pedal causing the tail end of the SVU to swerve in the deep snow.
“Bette, Angelica” Tina said reminding her that their only child was in the car and as much as she wanted to know who had obviously just been either in or around their cabin it wasn’t worth risking their lives.
Bette gently brought the car to a halt and turned to Tina “Quick take Angelica” she demanded leaving no room for any argument.
Helena unfastened Angelica’s safety harness and lifted the child out of her seat before opening the car door “I’ll come with you” she offered a high speed car chase in the snow was really not her thing
Tina quickly kissed Bette’s cheek “Be careful, we have no idea who that is or what their doing here” she said before getting out of the SVU.
Bette silently mouthed I love you and for a moment got lost in her own thoughts as she watched Tina join Helena and Angelica.
“Come on Porter step on it woman she’s getting away” Alice urged, chomping on the bit, this was her chance to prove that she had seen Jenny out there on the lake and she wasn’t some raving loon who was suffering from hallucinations.
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Helena reached the cabin steps first, closely followed by Tina carrying Angelica, they both stopped in their tracks as they heard voices coming from inside the cabin, and the door was slightly ajar. Tina grasped onto Helena’s arm with her free hand. “Someone’s in there” she whispered taking a few hesitant steps back pulling on Helena’s arm as she did so.
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Well I cannot believe I am first to leave a comment. Amazing job Skimmer. The action in this chapter had me on the edge of my seat. The video was genius. Tina’s reaction even better. Angelica missing, oh god I was a wreck. Shane having to come back to LA…Oh my…Great Job. Thank you so much for agreeing to do this chapter I hope you had fun…Great Job!!! I can’t wait for Sunkissed.
I enjoyed this. Though I admire SK/C and know that she is up for the challenge, I don’t envy her one bit.
I don’t how much more of this I can take, so much suspense!!! Great job!!!
All you authors are creating quite a suspense novel !!!
This was great! I am so glad that Jenny’s tape that, with the attempt of blackmailing Bette with, was explained to Tina BY Bette. God forbid if IC had written it, there would have been a thousand questions remaining and Tina finding out by someone else, thus creating some crazy a** drama! All of you guys are great, my hat off to you!
Great action and mystery. So exciting.
HOLY HELL! That was so good! I loved it, and I have to admit, I’m a bit creeped out too. Good luck Sunkissed, I’m glad I don’t have to follow that one! There is a LOT going on and I can’t wait to see where it goes!
skimmy one of the most intriguing chapters iv read in a long time, fabulous work
Very emotional chap. Funny(Alice’s comments), intriging,worrisome,suspenceful, WOW! Can’t wait for more of this mystery.
Wow, this is getting not only creepy but dangerous. I think Tina’s idea about going home is the sanest thing they could do. Whether it’s a ghost or a person seeking revenge there is something real going on and they are all in jeopardy as long as they stay there. But it wouldn’t be a good mystery story if they did that so I hope they stay and try to figure out what’s going on :) Great job at building up the suspense.
Thanks to all the talented writers working together on this story. It is amazing how this story began and is constantly keeping the readers up on their toes. The intrigue and excitement are palpable. This “Writers’ Challenge” is a brilliant idea IMHO. As I read the story with its fascinating various writing styles, I also felt the camaraderie among the writers. A very positive feeling both for the participating writers as well as the readers themselves. Thank you so much! As for the reader “nine.minner” who felt it has been a waste of her time reading this story, I think it’s a projection of her perceived reality, sadly a negative one. She is a newbie to the site as I noticed as of yesterday or so. At least she hasn’t stayed long enough yet to read more of the wonderful stories and again conclude what a waste of her time. “nine.minner” there’s always the cyberdoor — feel free to go and don’t forget to bring along your “negative” baggage.
Amazing story.All writers are doing a great job.
Guys you are fantastic! All writers are doing a great job… Can’t wait for the next chapter! :)I think all of us readers should respect a writer’s work… I you don’t like the story leave!
Please allow me to apologize for my previous comment has no merit. I realize my actions to be inappropriate in this venue, but a venue that has provided interesting results for my research. I know many will still consider my actions inexcusable, but I am still quite impressed by the apparently more pronounced sense of community I found here and nowhere else. Interesting to see the personalities of members of a virtual community in just the last three comments here. I digress. I simply offer my apologies and assurance all is done.
Wow! This is just excellent. Thank you Skimmer. The suspense was just sitting at the edge of the seat kind :). Now I can’t wait for Sunkissed. Thank you again all the TLW writers for this wonderful story.
Thanks I appreciate your reply nine.minner Personally I feel happy to just be here, in this site because this is the only way I have to express my love for the l word. I’m sorry if I was too harsh before. However I love this writers challenge! :)
Oh this is awesome. I love where you’ve taken this. I am truely afraid for our girls. Something menacing is starting to surround them. The dog was brillant. Poor Tina’s ankle. Great job I loved this
skimmer- truly excellent chapter. now who can have given Angie that freaking rat on a leash ? great scene between helena and Tina where T knew about the kelly crap. This may story may be totally insane but is it any madder than the crap that Aunt Ilene inflicted on us ? 8 writers so far and its STILL better than Ilene’s mess. go skimmer girl. we have an unbelievable amount of brilliant writers on this site and that should be celebrated.
oh and Skimmer – Michelle B sends her love x
This was absolutely brilliant from beginning to end!! My stomach was in my throat the entire chapter…first with the dark haired person running from the cabin…then with the video…then with Angie going missing…it was fantastic!!! I am always delighted and amazed at the level of talent on this site, and am always thrilled to read authors I haven’t read before…you and Dazed and Amused have proven that the talent is here and it’s alive and well! Thank you!!!
A Writer’s challenge? More like a bunch of challenged writers. I cannot believe I wasted my time reading this. Ridiculous. Yes, couldn’t be more accurate.
Bravo, Skimmer. And SK/C, you’ve got your work cut out for you. Looking forward to the next installment. I love how each of the writers have given us at least one of IC’s story absurdities in each chapter and made us laugh even harder about them.
This story is amazing, thanks to all the writers, I cant wait to read more.
omg just fucking brilliant authors all over the place…the way its coming together..nothing more but brilliant