Okay if you don’t get it— it may be kind of confusing to understand— leave me a comment and I’ll explain.

Please. Constructive criticism is welcome. This I my first poem that I posted and I know it needs work. It’s kind of depressing. Also posted on fanfiction.net

In this “version” Ashley and Spencer went to prom as friends. They have never been anything more and then Ashley tells Spencer how she feels and there was a shooting. NO AIDEN

Will You Forgive Me?

I watch the life slowly drain from your eyes.
 And you don’t know how much I wish it were me.

I could have saved you.
I could have been there.

I could have stopped the bullet that broke your heart.

But I froze.

The moment you ran.

I stopped living.

I’m so sorry.

I wish I was fast enough.

But I needed you to know.

I didn’t mean for this to happen.

The moment I told you.
I saw the hate form in your eyes.

I saw the affection you once had for me disappear.

I never wanted that.

I wanted you to love me the way I love you.

You whisper something in your final moments.

Something so quiet.

So still.

So haunting.

I can’t help but think about you last words every day.

And wonder how you meant them.

Now I’m here.

Kneeling in front of you.

The rain crying for me.

I cannot cry.

I cannot feel anything anymore.

Part of me died with you that day.
A part of me I will never get back.
And I still can’t help but think it’s my fault.

No matter how much I should hate you for running

Hate you for giving me hope.

Hate you for leaving me alone.

Hate you for making wondering what you meant.

I can’t.

All I want is to see you again.
And hold you.
And laugh with you.

I want you to feel,

What I cannot show you.

I wasted my time.
I needed you to know.

But I waited.
I didn’t want to scare you away.

But in the end,

I killed you.

As I stare at the cold slab of concrete:

The only piece of you I have left.

I repeat your last words.

“Will you forgive me?”

I raise the dagger.
In one swift motion,

I lie down.

Never to wake again.

I’ve killed the one who killed you.

I murdered the one I love.

And now I’ll never have to wonder what you meant again.

Will you forgive me?

Okay the computer screwed up my spacing but please Read and Review constuctive criticism is welcome….