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Breathe– Chapter 23
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They both nodded silently and Bette’s tone grew more serious. “You’ll get more details from you watch commander, but I need you to be focused. One of you outside the room at all times and she doesn’t go anywhere alone. Is that understood?”
They nodded again, assuming from the detective’s tone that some development in the case had transformed their assignment from a simple security detail to one of witness protection.
As the officers walked away, Bette met Tina’s concerned and questioning gaze. “I guess there is a little more to my relocation than you wanting me close,” Tina said, still holding Bette but waiting for a response.
“A little,” Bette replied honestly. “But for right now can we forget all that and can I just tell you that I love you?”
Bette stroked her cheek and then letting her long fingers curl around Tina’s neck brought her face close. Searching her eyes, Bette said “I love you so much it hurts,” letting a slight moan escape her mouth which Tina quieted with her own lips.
As their mouths came together in a soft, sweet embrace Bette felt the tears start to form and fall from her eyes as her body released all the pain, frustration and anguish of the last several hours.
As she felt Bette’s body begin to shake in her arms, Tina released her lips, drew her close and let Bette’s head slowly fall to her shoulder.
Stroking the back of her hair, Tina whispered “Let’s go to bed baby, you’re exhausted.”
Bette nodded, not taking her head from Tina’s shoulder and then said weakly “I need to get us a room.”
Tina shook her head and held up a magnetic key card. “I think James took care of us. The manager gave me this as soon as I came in with the officers.”
Bette had never been more thankful for James attention to detail. She slipped one arm protectively around Tina’s back, letting her hand curl around her waist and held her close as they crossed to the elevator.
They rode in silence, lost in their own thoughts but so grateful for the touch, the love, and the mere presence of the other. When they were finally alone in the quiet and safety of their own room Tina drew Bette into her arms and asked “Baby, are you all right? You’re really worrying me.”
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I find myself checking to see if you have posted. The thriller side and romantic side of this story come together in a really seamless and natural way. This is a wonderful page turner :).
What an intensity…
But your so powerful story is always magnificently filled with every possible level of intensity anyway, magnifying fears until terror, waitings beyond the bearable, love until passion…
Yes, I’m more than ever admirative of your work.
Being both a detective stories’ passionate and an incurable romantic soul, I so deeply enjoy your story. I simply love it.
For me, it’s one of the very best I ever read in this site – and I read a lot.
“Their lips and hands making promises that words could not convey” , “a place where words were no longer needed” : that was beautiful…
Reading your note about the difficulty to write NC-17 parts, let me say that I’m not a sucker of gratuitous simply “anatomic” ones. I always need emotions and feelings mixed with desires to feel fully satisfied with them.
It’s where the true talent of writing is : changing a simple kisses scene in a much more powerfully erotic scene than many of so-called NC-17 ones.
With meaning and feelings. The only way to make them unforgettable…
And your current one is a real must !
Beauty was everywhere here…
Heartbreaking indeed. I adored it…
*** THANK YOU ***
This is a great story and very well written. Don’t doubt your ability on the NC-17 you capture it beautifully!!!Please post soon can’t wait!
I so agree with what B&Tforever said…You story is so gut-wrenchingly intense it’s hard to think of anything else–even when I’m not in the midst of reading it! It’s one of those page turners that haunts your mind throughout the day! I hope you continue writing for a long time even after you finish this story…I think I see a novel in your future. Thanks!
I’m a night owl.but I missed this one. This is just a wonderful story, It is full of love.mystery and friendship. The killer is changing his MO he will make a mistake and Bette will nab him. My attach is black and white 11lbs.will hi five shake hand and it you say bang will play dead. I know I have more to do,but.Love that darn thing. Let Bette keep Tina safe,and thanks for giving them some down time together. They both needed that. Thanks for posting.
It’s still so intense; how do you get into the mind of a crazy man? I like how you ended so beautifully with Bette and Tina coming together.
Thanks for writing and posting.
Your writting is amazing. Love this chapter awaiting the next.
Your flow from chapter to chapter is seamless. In less capable hands, this story could be bogged down by too many details and too much techinical information. Yet each time you are able to take those necessary specifics and distill them into a chohesive, readable narrative. Amazing.
Now, if the killer was the one in the boat that took the picture – then that means that Tina has seen him twice, right? Maybe hypnosis could help her recall more details?
His blatant need to beleaguer Bette and the investigation seems realistic to me. This is a guy that needs to feed his ego, show them that he is running the show. But in trying to prove himself superior, he is creating a trail of bread crumbs to his identity. The elk hair, the different knives, type of camera that was used, or where the photos were developed. All seemingly harmless, but all critical errors And, as Bette alluded…arrogance will beget arrest.
I am loving James The Protector! I always thought of him in that regard on the show and I am happy to see you flesh that character trait out. I just hope that he does not come to an untimely end by taking Bette’s car.
I find it interesting that the people in the investigation who once disguised their predujice for Bette’s sexual proclivity in a joke, are now being able to see that everyone is the same and that Bette’s love/caring for Tina should instead take on the mantle of safekeeping.
I saw Bette kissing Tina’s wrists as symbolic for healing the wounds of her self-inflicted crucifixion for feeling that she was unlovable. Her pleas to Bette were a plea for absolution and salvation, and the need to make love a baptism for them both so they could be reborn – whole, secure and filled with genuine love. For themselves and each other.
As for your feeling that you are still skittish writing NC-17. You did a wonderful job…less is more.
I don’t know how you manage to work, take care of your family and still post these magnificant chapters…but if you ever need me to pick up your superhero cape from the dry cleaners, let me know. I’d be more than happy to do that for you!
you’re so incredibly talented..!!and hey..i’m the 1st to comment!ha..when everyone else is asleep..is evenin around here.do post soon..and thx,both of them need some release from the tension that has built around their lives each day.
This story is so intense in so many ways, I just adore it.
Really great story…. Look forward to seeing your story continue
Sox, you just keep me coming back for more. I love this story. It’s intense, sexy, emotional, dramatic… I could go on and on about it. I go through a range of emotions when I read each chapter. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. This is another superb chapter.
Aren’t you the night owl? Your late night/early morning commitment to this story is much appreciated. Some very nice touches in this chapter. lol. You are a very accomplished writer and no longer have to be embarassed by or apologize for your NC-17 chapters. They are sweet, sexy and powerful. Like you. Can’t wait for the next installment, Sox747, but don’t burn the candle at both ends TOO much. Your true fans will be patient and need you you fresh and sharp.
Late night, or early morning, doesn’t seem to affect your writing. That was excellent! I can see now, why people say that reading the book, behind a movie, is so much better. I think that JB and LH are wonderful, exceptional actors, and that their expressions grab us into what their feeling. But, to read about the responsiveness, unspoken loyalty and those deeper emotions is unquestionably (if there’s even such a word) necessary to pull each reader into the point where they are present at each scene.
How the hell do you write like this?!?!?! You’re just great, I can’t get enough of this story please keep it up!
I have to agree with T-Boz..only the very talented writer can take us to that depth of emotion and understanding, shared between the true soul mates. To know what it is…you must have found yours. Good for you!
I look for your posting the last thing at night and the first thing in the morning. To say I am addicted to your story, is an understatement.
Sox, I am very glad to have another chapter to read this morning. Thank You. I don’t have to tell you how well written this is, I am sure you know what I think by now.
Thanks for giving B & T some time to re-connect with each other. They needed that. As for the killer (although I hate to ask), when do we get to know what he’s doing/planning while all this is going on. Was he outside the crime scene, outside Bette’s house, or scouring the newspaper while Bette was at the latest crime scene.
Will Alice (the media) be making a entrance soon? I can’t imagine the brutality of these crimes not getting intense media coverage.
Between writing the story, reading the comments, and the tons of e-mail you must receive, working, and taking care of your family when DO you sleep? Just curious, as I do appreciate your multi-tasking abilities. As always, looking forward to the next post.
you are amazing. The story just pulls me in. It is so full of emotion, love, mystery, wonderful. Thank you and post soon
Thank you Sox for starting my day off right! Your writing is “Phenomenal” and this chapter once again, shows your creativity!
SOX… this story has me on pins and needles… love and hate… love how bette and tina are there for each other… hate what that bastard is doing… but like you said… he is changing his MO… so he will fuck up… and hopefully james finds it fast… another great chapter…
I don’t know what to say. Sheesh, you should write books, and if you do let me know I will TOTALLY read them all. Please post again soon, the love they have for one another is so beautiful, and it is so nice to read an actual story. . .rather than just FF fluff, which is fun, but this story has me coming back not only because I love the characters, but because I love the plot. Thank you for posting so much! And keep em coming!
soxy – I am your loyal fan – and your NC is fine by me – it’s sweet and heat all at once. You write the intimacy so so well – I feel their need and their healing. Are you resting at all or just in a fever? It certainly is contagious I read each chapter so fast and then again very slowly. Thanks for your gifts.
what time did you post. i think i checked at 200 mt. time. i thought i was a night owl. i had a wonderful gift when i got home from the gym this am. my heart just races reading this story. i cant read fast enough, then i say to myself slow down you might miss something. then i have to read it over again just to make sure i got everything. no need to be flustered or embarassed about NC-17s this depth of emotion is incredible. its hard to understand how you do it, getting us to go from sick, scared shitless, and antsy to happiness and joy. what an incredible writer. hopefully theres another one for us tonight. thanks for your time and effort.
I agree with albeez…when was this posted? I think I went to bed at 130am and this wasn’t up. I wake up and voila! an NC-17 Breathe! Bravo!
Some are concerned with your multitasking abilities and the resulting lack of sleep. I can relate to FF addiction but please do take care of yourself. :)
I imagine that like everyone else that has visited this site, we are all suffering withdrawal symptoms and eagerly awaiting season 3 of the L Word. I just discovered this site yesteday and have already left yu two comments. Thanks for making the wait for season 3 bearable. Now waiting for the next chapter of your story is becoming unbearable. Great job! Love it! Love it! Love it!
Glad Tina is with Bette now and save!