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Broken Girls with Strange Frames (Ch. 21)
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“You don’t know why?”
“I mean, Bette’s great,” I started, and then didn’t feel like finishing. Kyle looked at me impatiently, though, so I continued, “I mean, she’s smart and beautiful and… generous and…” I screwed my face up in thought. “But so are a lot of people.”
Kyle nodded, accepting this.
“And, she has all these flaws,” I went on. “I mean, she’s so selfish sometimes. And overbearing. And her obsessive perfectionism? Absolutely annoys the ***** out of me. I mean, ‘failure is not an option’-who says that?” I looked up at him and he smiled, so I continued. “But I… forgive for that, you know? Because I admire her. And I… love spending time with her. And so all that stuff about her that annoys me just kinda…” I gesticulated lamely. “Disappears.”
“Well,” Kyle said after a minute, “I don’t really know, but maybe that’s what love is, you know? Like, accepting people’s flaws to the point of-”
The phone rang. I groaned. “Uh, hold that thought,” I said, reaching behind the couch to find the cordless. “Hello?”
“Hey.”
Oh, stupid stomach, stop lurching so dramatically. “Hey, Bette. What’s up?”
Bette paused. “I haven’t seen you in a couple of days.”
“Yeah,” I said. I waved Kyle away. He headed for the kitchen, taking the sour cream with him. “Um, I’ve been working.”
“Right.” She sounded strange. Whatever. “Well, what if I came over tonight?”
“Are you just inviting yourself?” I joked.
She seemed too distracted to understand humor. “No, no. We can meet somewhere, if you want, or…”
“I was kidding, Bette. You can come over.”
“All right.” She paused awkwardly. “After work.”
“That’s… good,” I told her. “Are you okay?”
“Yeah, I just have so much work here-I’llseeyoutonightokaybye,” she rushed out and then hung up. I looked at the phone for a moment before hanging it up.
“That was Bette?” Kyle asked as he came back in, free of sour cream.
“Yeah. She’s gonna come over tonight.”
He nodded slowly. “All right. I’m gonna…” He checked his watch. “I have work in like, an hour, so I’m gonna leave you alone.” He put his hands in his pockets and stood uneasily near the doorway. “So… hey. Promise me you won’t tell Bette anything tonight.”
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Youch! Bette! It’s to character…which would make Alice’s “you can be a little bit cruel” comment rather kind.
Wow, I felt bad for Alice. I never thought I could feel bad like that for her…
Bette and I need to have a serious conversation about this thing she’s doing where she breaks Alice’s heart. That’s not cool. Always, your characterization and dialogue are just… flawless. And I can’t be too upset with Bette. She’s trying to do the right thing.
It sucks to hate Bette when JB is just so hot. The show should have a spin-off, focus just on Alice/Dana/Helena/Lara, with Bette just showing up once in awhile for a sex scene with no lines.
On a happier note: ‘I laugh in the face of your love, Alice. Ha, ha, ha, ha!’ was hilarious!!
Your dialogue is perfect but I loved this bit of description too:
“Another nod, this one a little more hesitant, as if it realized the ludicrousness of Bette’s speech and was ashamed to be attached to her.”
Oh. My. God.
Alice, Alice. I could practically hear your heart shatter into little pieces. My heart goes out for you.
I am stunned beyond belief. The things Alice went through in terms of Bette. And considering what she had went through and then still remained friends with her ex (later on) just stuns me speechless.
Rachel, your writing got me stunned, too. Four amazing pages of a rollercoaster ride. Amazing!
Please keep on doing what you’re doing because you are doing it so right.
Yeah, let’s kick her…to the curb. This is so real and so raw.
I can’t WAIT to see Bette get her comeuppance from Tina. Bette in love, that’s rich!
Really, I can wait. I love Alice in this story.
And it all comes full circle. Thanks for painting the picture that we have yet to see on TLW. Makes their friendship on the show have more depth and meaning now, given the history.
The last line was pricless!