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Closure – Chapter 18
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Dana gathered her up in her arms to cradle her like a baby. She held Alice as tight as she felt she could without hurting her. She rocked her gently back and forth and whispered soothing words.
They stayed like that for a long time. It took quite a while for Alice to shake off the worst effects of the nightmare. She still had not said anything to Dana. After several more minutes, Alice slowly extricated herself from Dana’s arms and got off the bed. Dana watched her warily — ready to jump up and hold her at a moment’s notice.
Alice moved over to the dresser and started to re-pack the garbage bag.
Dana felt pure terror. “What are you doing, Al?”
Alice would not make eye contact with Dana as she mumbled. “I really should get out of your hair.”
She glanced up and saw Dana’s shocked expression.
“I’m not stupid!” Alice said quickly. “I don’t plan on getting back with Jackie…” Dana sensed that even Alice realized that her plans did not matter a whole lot as far as that went.
Dana got up from the bed and went over to Alice. “I know you’re not. But, Al, maybe this isn’t the best move right now.”
“I got myself into this fucked-up situation. I know you are all trying to help, but, I can do it myself. Just like I always have.” She looked in Dana’s eyes and said “I don’t need you.” Dana could see that Alice was lying.
Alice turned and grabbed for the door knob. Dana quickly moved next to her and put her hand over Alice’s.
She breathed into the writer’s ear “Please, Alice, don’t go.” Alice was shocked at the shiver that went through her body at the closeness to the athlete and the feeling of her breath on Alice’s neck. She tried to strengthen her resolve. She had messed up Dana’s life enough.
“I have to. If I go back, you won’t get hurt…”
“What are you saying, Al?” Dana asked with a good degree of confusion.
“She’ll hurt you, Dane. If she knows you are helping me. If I go back now, you’ll be safe.” Dana looked shocked at Alice’s words. “I should be fine. She won’t hurt me this badly again.”
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You did a great job with A trying to make up her mind coming or going. D was articulate with her rationale and I really like how she stepped up to the plate and being honest. “butch lezzie athlete, then follow me, Butch..babe magnet”? Excellent! What a nightmare it was! Joining HF, next round, plz take with my vaporizer gun, blast it towards Jackie , reduce her to a pile of sand and make her disappear forever and ever. Thank you again, MaGoose. Fantastic!
Well sorry i havent commented before on ur story but i wanted to be caught up before did. I LOVE this story u write it almost perfectly :) I loved so many things about this chapter but my favourite and most touching for me has to be wen Dana puts her hand on Alice to stop her opening the door and breathe please al dont go. Tht was so touching for me i could imagine it so well lol. Well anyways i hate Jackie love Al and Dana cant wait to see where ur story goes next and loving evry word so far please continue. x x
I can’t help but see the strength Dana has right now. And Alice admitting that she’s afraid of Jackie, screaming it no less; that’s some deep stuff. Fight it, Alice. Fight.
Man I needed to stop to get a beer after Al’s nightmare to calm my wee heart..excellent writing and leave it to Alice to be more concerned for Dana then herself, the whole calling Dana a butch was classic it’s nice that they can fall back into the teasing it should help in the long run.
Awww, my poor Alice. I know I say that every time, but I know how it feels to have an appointment with a counselor trigger some nightmares. I’m just glad Dana is such a wall of support right now, and I’m glad she’s not letting Alice leave. They’re so damn cute together, and there were some subtle hints in this one that Alice is still attracted to Dana. Of course it’d be wildly inappropriate for anything like that right now, but it’s nice to know it’s not just Dana. And yeah, you might wanna check on that package. She doesn’t weigh much and might waste away completely by the time she returns to sender. Here’s hoping neither of us get stuck for a long while!
You become angry yourself,that one human can make another person so afraid. Afraid that your friends can or will get hurt. Poor Alice,has forgotten that she has some tough friend,s very classic,but can stand toe to toe with someone that will try to hurt one of them. thanks
hey sorry i havnt commented before but i love this story soo much its one of the best i have read! its up there with “you” and haruka fairbanks i cant actually remember the name! but anyway your doing an amazing job and i hope you keep posting forever!lol you rock ma goose!!
aw, “babe” – now that’s so cute and sweet. I really like this mature Dana. I know some people who think of her as tiny and goofy but nothing else. It almost kinda pisses me off to hear that. I know Dana has depth and she just didn’t have the chance to show much of her persona (aside from being cute and funny) in the show until her last season. So, I really love reading about her in these kinds of situations because i can totally see her being like this and protecting Alice. thanks, very awesome :)
i love this story!! hmm theres a little something somthing in the air that was nice of dana to say about the babe thing.. hmm its hard to be angry at dana for hurting alice before cuz of everything shes doing for her now but i still dnt think it shuld be too easy for dana to get alice back theres alot of proving to be done..as well as kicking jackies stupid ass pps :)
hey, really great chapter! cant wait for the next one.
Aww “you’re all the babe i need” now that is one heck of a line. I just keep feeling more and more sorry for Alice, but thats because your writing is so touching. DANISH!! I’ll tell Jackie where she can stick her sand pillar. Great post =)
Poor Alice. Go dana. “You’re all the babe I need.” Smooth Fairbanks. I have it all planned out. Dana=Baseball Bat. Shane=Scissors Kit=Mic Stand Bette=Sculpting knifey thing. Tina= Annoy her to death. Alice=SHOT GUNWeapon assignments for Jackie’s destruction MAGOOSE I LOVE YOU
NO dana isn’t too perfect, i’m just worried that she will get too worn down emotionally from all this.will the others help to give dana a break? she can’t be with alice 24/7 with this type of emotional stuff going on… great update :)
Poor poor Alice. Hopefully between Dana’s supportive arms and the experience of the counsellor things will start to get better for her. You’re doing such an amazing job with this difficult topic, thanks!