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Do you remember when… Chapter 3
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As she watched Tina drive away, she reached for her phone, dialling the number that she had memorised over the last day or so, the number she always hoped to see on the caller display, the number that made her heart beat faster.
As the answer machine kicked in, Bette’s breath caught in her throat, hearing the tender voice of her blonde date permeate through her ear, her eyes closed as the overflowing tears silently escaped over the curve of her cheeks.
"Uh… Tina, its Bette… I just wanted to thank you and to say I had an amazing evening… it was so much fun; I really had a great time… I uh… I… hope that, if you’ll let me, I… can return the gesture and buy you dinner… sometime… uh, okay… bye…"
Bette’s low mood followed into the morning, the drive to work seemed endless, the work she was faced with more so, for a Saturday morning there was a constant stream of visitors, and in normal circumstances she would have been happy for the volume of sales that a show would have created, but today was different, today she was nursing her heavy heart, she hadn’t slept for a single moment the night before, all her thoughts on Tina, whether she was okay, whether she would see her again, speak to her again, feel her in her arms again, just look into the expressive hazel eyes again.
As Bette glanced at her watch, her mind quickly calculated another that she had an hour and nineteen minutes before being able to retire to her office and finish the paperwork necessary to complete the sales of the paintings that now had sold signs hanging beside them in the gallery.
She took a deep breath as she began talking to yet another prospective customer, her animated behaviour hid her inner turmoil as her smiles and hand movements betrayed the dark cloud hanging over her.
Tina had been standing outside the gallery for twenty minutes, deliberating as to whether or not to go in. The steady stream of art enthusiasts in and out of The Bette Porter Gallery halting her decision, her mind was telling her that she should wait, wait until closing time, until Bette wasn’t so busy, but her mind was also recalling the voice she heard on her answer machine when she had returned home the previous night, the very obvious emotion lacing the words on the machine, the message she had sat and listened to time and time again, last night and this morning.
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1st brb!!!
How is it possible to have a hitch in my throat when reading your story? It was as if I were a witness to their grand love. I want a Bette Porter in my life. Can you arrange it, Jo?
That actually left me breathless. Excellent post.
nicely done….
That took my breath away!!
That was amazing, really intense. You had my attention captivated from the beginning. The story is amazing and this chapter was the best yet. I agree with everyone else – this chapter is breathtaking. Nice one!
God….I think this is the best one. I have read them all and this may be the best. I just don’t know what else to say.
wow is all i can say more
totally perfect!!!!!!
I read the first page so far. It’s almost 1 AM here so I’ll have to finish this later. Pretty cool!
Oh my God, that was so emotional filled with fear, nervousness, attraction, passion and love in just a few hours. You could feel the entire process take place right before the reader’s eyes. I loved the reference to their individual favorite songs of Prince. Cream being Tina’s and the mentioned Pole Dance. Still would love to see those Portard Porn Videos. These two are breathless in their love for each other. I love this story and am so happy that you continue to bring it to us.
Stunning!
WOW!!!! Very nice and sweet!!!!! Thank you
Wow that was cute and sweet, love it. Post soon please, thanks!
There are not enough words to describe how wonderful this chapter made me feel as I was reading it. You are an incredible writer whose talent I greatly admire. Thank you for this beautiful chapter and story.
Holy Moley. Wow. Now that was wordsmithing…details…intense.
I was breathless and Iam speechless amazing
Jo..lol@ the 1st comment, such a coveted spot!!!Anyways….WOWWOWOWOWOW! As I am reading my iTunes player clicked to the next song and D’Angelo “How does it feel” plays creating this sensual,sweet,romantic erotic sensation that just adds the little bit of sweetning to this chapter! I was feeling the kiss like I were them!!! You have a wonderful with words and it is such a joy to read your work and have these emotions flood through me! only great writing can do that! You have a gift! As always I look very forward to your next psot!!!
awww so nice! you took my breath away! the way in wich you put all the wave of feelings in their first kiss was amazing! well done!
Hey Jo – I think I’ve read this post before…hmmm are you sure you haven’t copied it from somewhere LMAO :o))….OMG what a kiss!!!. I totally loved it and I was right; the giddiness and butterflies were right around the corner :o)) The way you’ve combined the old story with this new project is just brilliant and amazing – you deserve a medal!!!! BTW you were right, Tinas comment to Alice….so hilarious LOL.
wow that was so intense……..
I already knew and savoured your wonderful and so full-of-hope ‘I thought we could spend the evening together’, as well as I cried reading this especially moving but beautiful ‘My mermaid’. However I never expressed all my reader’s gratitude to you, so talented author, and I wonder why… Shyness ? Perhaps. There’s always such a big reserve in the way I silently thank my favorite authors here, it must be my naturally introverted nature… But this morning, discovering this very expected update of yours, I had to fight this timid silence and endly express my feelings… *** These three chapters truly are three pieces of pure delicacy and tenderness. It’s simply palpable everywhere, behind each sentence, almost each word, and it touched me a lot. I mean it. Three little jewels with sudden sparkles of intense passion and liberating humour : simply three little masterpieces that made, make and will make my romantic reader’s heart delight. And this third jewel is so endearingly magic, it just made my heart pounds faster with mixed smiles and sighs… How could we got enough of such beautiful and so fine-cutted pieces of love ? Please give us other pearls to full a necklace of happiness. *** Thank you from the deepest of my heart – and all my most sincere and grateful congratulations ! ^_^
Ive said it before …and not just about this chapter…OH Sweet Jesus!..lol….There are somethings that should never be forgotten…and the essence of a first kiss is one of them!…I have my faveorite chapters in all your writting…one being, “The Gallery” and This is right up there with that,…with the very best of your stuff!…One of the most sensual,pieces ive read…I think you`ve captured so much in this one…from Tinas confusion of her new feelings…to Bettes truly falling in love for the first time!…the amazing feeling of a new love!…you`ve filled in blanks we didnt even know were missing till we read this!…ive read it more than once…and it still gives me a shiver…you have a way of bringing the words to life,giving your readers an amazing visual…This one”Got”to me …..Thanks hun..
My brain has gone into overload and sizzled into a pile of goo. I’m not sure how I can get any work done today. You got the cold shower award once, right? If so, I can see why. Like someone else said, this one definitely ranks right up there with the gallery scene from your previous story.
THis is the sweetest of Friday gifts. I am so warm and fuzzy and full of love and laughter. Thanks Jo
It’s stories like this one that make me pray harder at night for S3 to have all been a bad, bad, bad dream. Jobadge, this chapter is unbelievably hot! Three co-workers came into my office just as I had finished my story and the first thing that I said to them was, “Is it hot in here or is it just me?” They all confirmed it was just me since the air conditioning is on. Please post soon!
Wow – I really got caught up in the moment there! Lovely.
Hey JoB, Again with your brilliance! Every word, phrase and paragraph is crafted with love and care. There is real romance in your sumptuous story. The magical spark between Bette and Tina is here, in spades, and flows like a river to the sea; strong and constant. The complete adoration and intoxication between these gals is visibly palpable. The rembrance of their ‘First Date’ and Tina’s introduction to Alice were priceless. Your give me hope that there is love like this in the world and that all you need to do is go out there and find it then open your heart to all the amorous promise that true love can bring. Thank you so much for this long, lavish and luxurious episode in Bette and Tina’s loves. A complete and utter joy to read and reread over and over again. Thank you for this delight and making me smile and dream. Your Loyal Fan.
That was some kiss, girl! thanks for the post.
this is so amazing well told. every smooth detail is now lingering in my head. you really have a way with it.
First and foremost, Jo, congratulations on your coveted first place finish. I know how important these things can be, and God knows, you deserve it. This was sweet and I’m really enjoying the format you came up with to present these recollections.
what an amazing recount of their date and a kiss…absolutely breath-taking
Wow – Jo that was outstanding!
Amazing decripton of their first kiss. the best i’ve read yet!!!!
Wow…so romantic, so beautiful, so touching, so vivid! I’m so glad you continue to share your gift with us. You paint such wonderful word pictures that allow us to see every nuance of the scenes as they unfold. Love at first sight…so nice! I can even hear each character speak your dialogue and see their reactions. I certainly await the continuation of this beautiful love story!