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Fallacy (Part 2)
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“Why not?”
“Because I love her.”
“Does that fix everything?”
“Jesus,” she said, and then said it again: “Jesus. I don’t know what you want from me.”
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“I want you to stop cheating,” Tina said and Bette felt worthless.
“Cheating?” She looked up. She was leaning her chin on her hand and tried to stave off her exhaustion. “This is a legitimate move.”
“Well, it reads like cheating,” Tina said to her from over the chessboard, “because you always win.”
Bette poked at her bishop half-heartedly. “Yeah?”
“Yeah. My turn?”
She nodded.
Tina in thought was a study of dark eyes and an adorable lower lip caught between her teeth; it was a furrowed brow and a stern expression.
Bette smiled at her exhaustedly. “Move the pawn,” she suggested.
“I will not. You look tired, baby.”
“You know me,” she yawned, “all this sitting around all day and not working is just tiring. Move the pawn.”
“Stop cheating.”
“No tricks, just a suggestion.”
Tina moved the pawn.
“I remember when you taught me how to play this,” she said.
“I was trying to impress you with my intellect.”
“I know.”
Bette moved a pawn. “Did it work?”
Tina vacillated between moving her pawn again and moving her rook and finally decided on the latter. “I’m here, aren’t I?”
She very much was. Bette smiled a relieved smile, glanced down at the board, moved her knight and said, “Check.”
Tina was saved from the embarrassment of her impending crippling defeat by the activity over the baby monitor. “That’s the baby,” she announced, standing up. “Don’t move anything.” She glanced over the board for a moment, most likely searching for a way to remove her king from check.
“I’ll come.” Bette followed her into the nursery. The baby was restless; sometimes she was so absolutely quiet that Bette forgot she existed and sometimes she was so noisy you couldn’t forget her. She’d been fed already and Tina acknowledged that she didn’t need to be changed, so she looked at Bette expectantly.
“What do you think?”
Bette shrugged. She wasn’t sure if she was really allowed an opinion on it. “She just wants attention,” she said.
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Great story…I’m really enjoying it. You can really feel Bette’s pain…looking forward to the next chapter…
Bette need to talk to Tina and Tina must listen to her communication is the key..great chapter Rach cant wait for more
wow…no other words…wow!
Damn this is sad Bette need to talk to Tina and tell her how she feel, this so much pain for Bette and fear that Tina will leave her. Post soon please, thanks!
This is a great story though at times I find it makes me quite sad and depressed. Bette so needs to get over the fear of losing Tina, and learn to talk to her. I’m not sure what Tina can do to reassure her she’s not going anywhere, but knowing Tina she’ll listen if Bette will just talk.
I’ve been having a look at authors I haven’t had a chance to read before, and happened on your stories. Both this and “Broken Girls with Strange Frames” were really just… outstanding. I’m not sure if you’re still around, but I’d love to see you posting again.
This is so brilliant, it’s so wonderfully done; so very very sad and you can actually physically feel Bette’s pain. God, you’re good! Just found this and had to comment.
this story is just so deep and raw. I often wonder when things seem to be going good for myself what is gonna happen next. This is awesome writing looking forward to the next chapter
That’ll be me, over there on the cliff’s edge.
Last one off is a rotten egg!
I am scared to death where your talent, in the service of this story, will take me. Yet, awestruck, I cannot look away.
Thank you.
How different is your writing style in this story compared with the other story written from Alice’s POV! Yet how brilliant have you captured the characters’ voices at different stages in their lives! You have thought and written “beyond the square” again! No cliches from you though.
Looking forwards to being further mesmorized by your writing.
been absorbing your story: indeed intense, sometimes raw. as a reader you can feel the pain, i guess because some of us been there. thanks for a good writing.
this is really sad ok like no other story can make me this sad it amazing your wonderful but i really do hope things work out bette needs to learn to talk lol and i mean shes so afraid of loosing tina its heart breaking!! heart breaking man !! lol well anyways thank you for the amazing chapter and please post soon thanx byeness<33897325892
Great chapter. I like this insight.
Apt descriptions of how our desires can take us somewhere without our emotions necessarily joining the fray. Wicked good writing. Bloody brilliant really.
Very well-written.
i was wondering when you’ll ever come back. you show us the characters in such a truthful, if painful, light.
dear rachel_raj, please come back!