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Forgiveness *****Chapter 5 Love is in the Air*****
The following day, Dana drifted into The Planet as she swooned over the previous night’s events.
She spotted Alice and Shane over by the window and they called her over.
Shane beckoned Dana to the seat next to her, “So, how goes it with Miss Lara?”
“Greeeeat. I had the best night last night…just like every night since we made up…”
“Yeah you’re sporting the we-fucked-all-night look.” Alice jumped up, “Oooh ooh! In other news, I’m seeing this new hot little number!”
“Who, Al?”
“Her name’s Pen. She’s staying with her sister Clarisa down the road.”
Dana’s face fell slightly. “Al, there’s something you should know about Pen…”
“Yeah I know you’re girl got me up to speed. I plan to ***** her and leave her before she gets a chance to entangle me in her ‘unrelenting web of deceit’ I believe was Lara’s wording. I mean how could I not? Have you seen her *****? Mmmm-mmm!” All three of them laughed.
Just then, Lara wandered in, which triggered Dana’s uncontrollable smiling mechanism as she walked up to her. “I thought you had wrk today.” “I called in all my vacation time, we have two weeks!”
Dana blushed, “Uh guys…”
“We know, we know, you have to go ***** like rabbits now!”
“Go! GO! Time’s a wastin’ lovelies!”
“Thanks guys.”
Lara was practically dragging her out of the door now. They were almost undressing in the street. “MMM…MMM” Lara broke their passionate kissing, “Wait, aren’t you afraid people will see us?” “Who cares?!” They re-initiated their steamy dealings, “You make me come so hard Dana Fairbanks!” Dana glowed as they meandered back to Lara’s, simply because it was closer, all the while unable to keep their hands, not to mention lips, off one-another.
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(34 votes, average: 3.32 out of 5)
Ok lying is sooo bad for your karma – and so are short chapters!
Extending a special thanks to Gargy, leash and trinitigal (who I forced to read) and Ida…the pressure IS so on for the 6th chapter…I do have pairings in my mind (yes, not only Lara and Dana will be getting action)…anyway it’s not going to be up for a while, but I think you’ll all be patient with me considering I was so fast with all the other chapters
Tres good writing…am definitely looking forward to the next chapter!!
As a generally a good idea all around for everyone: GOLDEN RULE do NOT use the rating NC-17 unless you ACTUALLY write some really HOT GRAPHIC SEX SCENES! :D
Alright, alright, message read LOUD AND CLEAR. All ratings will be changed to PG-13. I was just being safe. Thanks dark_princess, you actually read it!=) And thanks to everyone else…I wasn’t lying, or trying to…there will be a sex marathon I promise! I’m so working on it…under a lot of pressure!
Hey girl! Hehe, I’ve just read it all and it’s great! :D Can’t wait for smut!
Aw thanks Kat! You have NO IDEA what that means to me! And, again…thanks, all, I’m touched (and hopefully improving lol)…please brace yourselves as you prepare for my most unexperienced writing field ever in Chapter 6 – Wild Things (not yet published)
I was only making that one suggestion………..because, people have a tendancy to click on (well, all the readers here, at least) all things rated “NC-17” and they have a tendancy to get a little carried away when they are deprived of such eatifcation (totally spelt wrong, I just know it-YES, PUN DEFIANTLY INTENDED! LMAO!) remember I never accused you of lying……….just to let you know some people can and will get downright violent when it comes to NC-17 stories that are not as promised………..NC-17! Shit I will shut-up now…………is it Sunday, yet! LOL! ;)
WOOO!!!!! Awsome – love the twist with Al planning on fucking pen then leaving her! LOL! More please!…
sooo you’re actually gonna write a sex marathon huh? not worried about the line anymore?
okay so i know i might sound desperate now… but for the final time… where’s my advanced reading?! btw, i have been reading thus far and i must say each chapter gets better than the next… guess the pressures really on for the next one ;)
Here i was… all ready to have a go at you for writing a NC-17 chap… and it’s sooo not. you need to re-think your rating. But other then that… it was very you. very… smushy. it was well written though. well done babe
Haha I tell you what..I’ll post what I have of Chapter 6 up…just a little bit!
must have more. quite on the edge of my seat…and uncomfortably so. :P