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More Than a Feeling
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The man stepped back as Charlie scratched his neck. “She’s right Irwin.” His eyes kept darting from Carmen to Alice and back again.
At once, Alice’s face lit up and her mouth curved into a smile. Officer Irwin frowned at her, squinting fiercely as his lips curled into a sneer. He unfolded one arm, pointing a thick, dry finger at her. “Consider this your warning. I get any more complaints to this house, and I’m personally taking you in, you hear me?”
Carmen smiled before disappearing inside, snatching her close from a near-drooling Shane. “Jesus, get a grip.” She said, rolling her eyes as she walked into the living room, passing Dana by, whose hurried steps slowed as she followed Carmen.
“What the…”
“Of course.” Alice said through the fingers that were desperately pinching her mouth shut, holding that hysterical laughter in. She stepped inside, holding the door close to her body. “Have a good night Officer Charlie…Officer…Irwin…pffsstttt.” Then she shut the door.
Shane jumped back as Alice opened the door and slipped inside, doubled over as she laughed hysterically. Dana set the pile of plastic cups she had in her arms down on one of the lamp tables, the cups spilling off, rolling around. “Does this mean we’re not in trouble?”
Bette slowly shook her head. “I guess not.”
Carmen emerged from the living room, fully clothed, much to Shane’s disappointment. “They’re leaving.” She walked up to Alice. “You’re welcome.”
Recovered, Alice pulled Carmen into a hug. “That was fucking awesome!” She released Carmen. “Whatever I’m paying you, double it!”
“Fine by me.” Carmen said, pulling away from Alice. “Which reminds me…I gotta do a damage check.” She started for her turntables.
“I’ll help!” Shane said, following close behind.
Dana, who had felt a pang of jealousy course through her when Alice hugged Carmen, walked up to her girlfriend. “So, everything’s cool huh?”
“Yeah, thanks to Carmen.” Alice laughed. “You shoulda seen their faces Dane, it was great.”
“That’s nice.” Dana smiled, but then added. “You know what’s not great? Your house!” She waved an arm around the area. “Look at it!”
Alice looked around. Dana was right. All of the lightening fast tidying the other girls had tried to accomplish barely made a dent in the mess. Napkins, cups, plates and all other kinds of garbage were strewn about the house, not to mention the few drunken teens that Bette and Tina hadn’t managed to drag out of the room yet. Alice shrugged. “We can clean it tomorrow.”
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Um, Bette’s wonderful because I’m pretty sure I wouldn’t have had the will power to stop! Tina’s just lucky she’s so cute (“I think I love you”)… great story, looking forward to the next post!
It is nice to see two young women taking their time to become more than lovers but life long friends. The hot and heavy stuff can come later when they are truely ready. Now, they should enjoy each others company. The longer they are together the more difficult it will become to stop the advances of either one of them.
Awesome story and chapter. Hope the studies went or are going well. Post soon. Thanks for taking the time.
YAY it’s fixed! *does half a happy dance due to lower back pain* OW! Anyway, I knew they wouldn’t get very far in their make-out session, but I’m glad you went there. At some point bounderies usually are made and I was happy to see that. Otherwise it’s like, “Okay we’re gonna make out for about 2 months and then BAM we’re doing it.” No gradual escalation or anything. Ths was definitely a story I couldn’t wait to read as soon as I got back home.=D
This chapter left me with a HUGE smile on my face and I’m feeling all warm inside…..so great and sweet this one. Please post soon – I’m addicted :o))
Why is it that the trouble this group always gets into reminds me of the gang in our younger years. Way to go Carmen. Gotta love B&T.
omfg first. lol. thi sis my favorit bt story. post fast.
Good to see you again Manda and this is good chapter. Glad that they not in trouble and Alice is funny and crazy, nice about Bette and Tina. OK post soon please, thanks!
Clarity in the house! This story is my kryptonite. Here’s why: So I was getting my fanfic reading on when sleep came a knockin’. It’s 3 AM, I’m extremely tired and was about to shut down my laptop when I saw that you posted. I said to myself, “Self, read this chapter tomorrow. You’re tired!” Alas, the pull was too strong. The end. Manda, I give you props for this well written story as well as the abundant TiBette make-out session. Your story is still (c’mon, say it with me) fanfuckingtastic! It cheered me up after a very, very, very…very bad week. Looking forward to the next chapter and I hope you kicked ass on your finals. Please post soon.
U TAKE WAY TOO LOAN TO UPDATE!!!!!!! And then u tease me…YYYYYY!!!!!!!
reading this made me all warm and fuzzy inside. thanks so much for sharing :)
I love this sweet story, it always makes me smile! Like the way your B and T aren’t rushing it. But actually they are moving really fast, considering the fact it took them like twenty chapters till the first kiss…Thanks Manda!
Nice continuation! And please don’t worry about replying to each of our comments individually… as far as I’m concerned you don’t need to bother commenting back… spend the time writing more chapters instead and we’ll be totally happy! ;-)
Very glad you’re back, this chappy was a nice one indeed, nice trick Carmen pulled out.
Yay, you are back! Man, they all still so young and sweet. lol… Love it. continue please
Awesome story Manda! I love how you show a young Bette and Tina connecting with each other. Nothing wrong with taking it slow. Please post again soon.
finally you’re back, this was absolutely wonderful
i have been waiting to read another chapter of your story but was worthy this chapter was so cute! i enjoy so much reading this B&T beginnig! continue post pleaseeee
Sweet. fun, sexy. What’s not to love? This story is so luscious and all the girls are heavenly.
sweet,sweet,sweet… *doing a happydance*
Praise the lord your back!! and here i thought my fav writer fell off the face of the earth! lol, manda, beautiful post…LOVE THIS STORY.