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    No Good Deed Goes Unpunished Chapter 10

    Story written on August 3, 2005 by flairforthedramatic.
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    “Hands touch, eyes meet, sudden silence, sudden heat…”

    Tina, Alex and Alice sat behind a long table covered in headshots and scripts. It had been a long day and almost every actress they had seen was below par. The next woman who walked in seemed to fit that mold. She was wearing a bright sun dress and too much make up.

    Alex leaned into Tina ear.

    Alex: Someone should tell her it’s 10 degrees below zero outside.

    Alice: Some one should tell her that the caked on make up look isn’t working in her favor.

    Tina was grateful that her friends were part of this process. If she had to go through it alone she would have gone mad.

    Tina: Do you have your monologue?

    Melanie: Yes.

    The three waited patiently for the young girl to begin.

    After a few moments of nervous silence Alex chimed in.

    Alex: Any time…

    Alice: Really take your time.

    Tina kicked her two sidekicks under the table.

    Melanie: I’m sorry, it’s just I’m really nervous.

    Tina’s face softened.

    Tina: Whenever you’re ready.

    Alex followed Tina’s lead.

    Alex: Why don’t you tell us a little about yourself?

    Melanie: Well, umm…

    Alice: Don’t say umm, that’s an audition no no.

    Tina: Alice, she’s nervous, leave her alone!

    Melanie: I’m sorry. My name is Melanie McKinny. I’m from Idaho originally but I went to college in upstate New York.

    Alex: What school?

    Melanie: Ithaca.

    Tina: They have a wonderful theatre program there.

    Melanie: It was my first choice so I couldn’t be happier that I got in.

    Alex: Why this audition, why this show?

    Melanie: I’m not sure really. Something about the context just jumped out at me.

    Tina: Who do you see yourself relating to?

    Melanie: Christina. She and I are like the same person.

    Alex: Interesting.

    Melanie: I think I’m ready now. Can I begin?

    Tina: Of course.

    As Melanie began to read Tina could feel goose bumps on her arms. She was wonderful. She truly breathed life into the words that Tina had written. The longer Melanie continued reading, the more fond of her the three friends became. For Tina it was like starring into a mirror, almost eerie.

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    4. ok, i must have sufficiently detached because I’m laughing. these girls is in trouble.

      and i like tall dark and gorgeous too. let tina get her some!

    5. Okay after having a mild anxiety attack, I did my 2 finger dance all the while going wooo hoooo & yippe!!!!! Never saw that one coming, gotta be careful of you!!! Damn my heart can’t slow down (I ain’t joking ..[repeat to self … “this is just a story”] PLEASE OH PLEASE POST ANOTHER CHAPTER 2DAY!!! DON’T LEAVE ME THIS WAY!!!! (I hope begging works).

    9. Oh my, that was great. Bette playing Bette, now maybe Tina should be playing Tina?? LOL Please post soon, and I would love the knee pads. I’m getting quite sore due to all this begging, but I can’t stop, so I’m continuing, Please please please post more today. 5 stars coming your way.

    10. FUCKING FANTASTIC FLAIR!!!!!! I just detached myself from this story, so I’m not even gonna comment anymore. This IS your art, tell your stry baby girl, you’re doing a hell of a job with it so far. Go girl. Im just fucking blown away. AMAZING. I swear I get asthma attacks reading this. Great stuff. Please post soon, this is draining for our gurls though. DAMN!!!!!!!

    11. I love Bette’s grand entrance. THIS should be really interesting! I can’t wait…..I can’t believe how involved I am in this story…keep it coming, I need my drama-fix!

    12. holy mother of god…iam shaking..that was sooo amazing Bette have to fight to be happy she deserve and Tina as well and second changes has that purpose..BUT noone is able to know what you are going to do..lol..i hope Bette win the audition she will make a confession or something?..urgh youre killing me!!! ok you started to make me happy please go on do not retrocede..lol..amazing chapter as always :o)

    13. What can I say. AWSOME,WOW,HOLY GUACAMOLE. Girl you are too good. Just as I’m thinking maybe Daphne won’t be able to go through with Jackie’s plan, BAM in comes Bette. Hey why don’t Tina & Bette play themselves. Not worried about Jackie’s plan Alice will get to the bottom of things. I so cannot wait till your next chapter.

    16. Bette you fool. Damn it why can’t she just let Tina stew? This eternal love is all very well but this Tina is not worth it. Grrr! Excellent chapter – really winding it up.

    18. AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!! That’s all I can say because I’m at a loss for words.. you usually leave me like that after I read a chapter. I’m glad Bette showed up, not only because she would obviously be perfect, but now Jackie and Daphne get screwed over. Hopefully good things ahead for B&T? Can’t wait for more!

    19. Wow, definitly wasn’t expecting that! Seriously amazing, this story has so many twists it’s impossible to know what is coming next! Still loving this story and as always anxiously awaiting the next post!

    20. Ahh, the cliff hanger, got a love the drama, and loved your play on your name. Your story as usual has very good dialogue, bring the twists … even if it does stop my heart a time or two… Could it be possible to get another one today?? :P) Oh yea… and as far as tennis goes, still unbeaten this week, hoo rah.

    21. OMG!!!!! I can´t believe!!! You´re crazy girl!!! I was missing Bette already… i love it!!!
      Is there any chance for us to see another post today??? Hope so…

    23. I LOVE IT…….you’re excelling yourself. And the line “yes well our little Tina has quite a flair for the dramatic”……..well she’s not the only one is she????

    25. Flair….you just made me lose my drink!! I swear that’s it…I’m NEVER reading any of your work when I’m at lunch! Fabulous! Post soon…I didn’t like that Jackie was doing stuff behind bette’s back to send Tina away. Bette is an adult…she can handle her own woes

    26. i was laughing so much when i read the “flair for the dramatic” line!! hmmm, wonder if there’s more to the story than just fanfic. lol!!great chapter!! and now iam so addicted i ‘need’ atleast 2 of ur updates per day to get by; so hope u post again soon!

    27. Flair….what can I say, you are A-M-A-Z-I-N-G! Ok, I’ve just picked my chin up off the floor…now I can comment.

      WTGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!

      Alice, one thing about Alice that everyone including Tina should know is this, although Alice is more the class clown type individual, her instincts regarding when something “isnt just right” arent off the mark. She felt it as soon as Daphne entered the room. Tina should pay attention to that.

      Bette, ohhhhh mahhhh gawwwwd! Bette never fails to leave me speechless. Her entrance was Diva-esque! Loved it! Loved it! Loved it!

      Daphne, bet HAS arrived…you dont stand a chance now with Tina, so you and Jackie go huddle in a corner and make a new plan!

      Alex….gotta love a queen! LOL

    28. yeah bette throw it down like you mean it!!!
      oh and tell that bitch there’s only one person who can rock the all white BP suite and her ass isn’t bette porter.
      see I told ya I liked this story better then the first one. Rock on wit ya bad self flair

    29. Oh MY GOD!
      I wish i could tell you how much exited i’m right now… It’s like YOUHROUUUUUUUUUUUU! Damned girl i’ve got it bad for your story… is there an antidote? Because… i’m not gonna wait until tomorrow for the next chapter! NO WAY! Wow… you wanted comments? You surely know how to have what you want ’cause i think that you’re gonna have thousands of comments with this chapter!
      Wow!!!!

    30. i just fucking hit my head on my desk on the way down to the floor. can you kill us any more with your drama. comments like flair for the dramatic, you have got to be kidding me. where do you write this stuff. are you just giggling to yourself or going oh, this will be so evil if i do this. im not suppose to be on my knees but you keep me there for begging. another one please.

    31. well flair i have come to the conclusion that u def need to write for tlw….i was like whoa…no she didnt and then omg yes she did..i so did not see that comin at all..ur excellent im gonna strap on my seatbelt and enjoy the ride!!!

    33. Hah! I knew it!! Sorry, Flair, but ya didn’t get me on that one…I very strongly suspected that Bette was gonna pursue role. However, you did get my heart beating pretty fast there…about the same time as Bette and Tina’s were competing with the deafening silence. Now, here’s your compliment for the day…My favorite part was when Bette finally looked at Tina. What a skillful and efficacious use of alliteration!…”love, lust, longing and loathing”…In that one moment I actually thought I was gonna start crying. I could totally and completely feel Bette’s pain. But, alas, this is just a story, I quickly told myself. She’s not jerkin’ a tear outta me. Huh-uh, no way!! Truly, just masterful writing, Flair. Can’t wait for more.

    34. Oh my!!!!!!!!!! That was just awesome. Have I told you that I love this story? Well I do. You’re twists and turns are perfect. Let the games begin!

    35. Can somebody say, “AWESOME!! F*CKING AWESOME!!”? OMG! I damn near screamed! I had to put my hand over my mouth, because I am at work reading this. I applaud you on this chapter. It was absolutely wondeful! OMG! You have GOT to come with the next chapter. I am dieing here! I need a drink! LOL. I await your next entry. Simply marvelous

    36. Your story is the best story I have ever read, I truly wish you were writing for the show. OMG! I can’t wait to read more, you are the reason I am literate LOL. Thank you, much love, Tal

    37. Damn….you really do know how to write them and keep us coming back for more. Please post again soon!!! I seriously don’t know how long I can wait.

    39. You are, simply, the shit!! Truly. I absolutely love the emotional rollercoaster. By the way, having Bette walk into the audition, totally late, was DIVA STATUS!! If I could give you a high five, I would.

    41. “Alice: yes well our little Tina has quite a flair for the dramatic. ” I don’t think she can beat you.wow, actually I was thinking how it would be if Bette play herself but quickly stopped that. brr, Bette chewing her own emotions on stage.. it’s powerful and you know that. “a mix of love, lust, longing and loathing”… very real, great line. as always waiting for your next post.

    42. oh man this is getting good! why did you stop? come on, continue, I wanna see what’s going to happen! I’m like addicted to your story so please continue soon! you are doing an excellent job!

    46. OMG,, YAHOOOOOOOO YIPPY YIPPYYY *doing a very stupid happy dance* WOOOOOOOHOOOOOOO..
      I LOVE BETTEEEEEEEE.. LOL..
      ok i have to admitt something, am i crazy, or is it normal to feel that i was in the audition room with them??
      You just never let me down..
      Now that i’m so pleased with this story, are we going to get another chapter today??
      PLZ PLZ PLZZZZZ..

    47. God, god, I didn’t really dare to think I was for something in the choice of this lovely Adeena’s name – even if I noticed something similar with my name indeed… Awwwww, you also created a monster here now ! A monster of pride, giggling, sheepish, pretty flustered ! Thank you SO much for the honour. You’re right : I’m very very lucky. However… stop to be such a charmer, it would become really dangerous for my emotional balance soon !! On this particular point of view, yes, I pretty think I created a monster indeed !! *wink*

      Alex and Alice are doing such a sparkling duo ! Their exchanges during the auditions were so funny, I loved that. Alice’s spiteful remark about wrinkles was quite hilarious !
      By the way, since the last chapter I couldn’t help thinking how Alex would have been much more seduced by the Tony Curtis’ version of Daphne, don’t you think so ? But of course, “nobody’s perfect” after all ! (lol)

      “Our little Tina has quite a flair for the dramatic” : well, well, dear Alice, she’s not the only one, believe me ! I know an irresistible fanfiction writer who… – oh, well, return to comment now !
      “Unfortunately not all fairy tales have happy endings.” Yes, especially Andersen’s ones. … Now, please tell me that’s just Tina’s point of view and NOT yours ? Pleeeaaase ???? As a drama lover I have an endless patience and wiseness, but as a strong romantic heart’s owner I need hope for the end !! Pity, I beg for hope ! “Hope ! Hope ! My kingdom for hope” ! (lol) We’ll certainly don’t need any Scarlett-and-Rhett heartbreaking finale, you know ? (lol again – but with a timid begging smile !)

      Seriously, now… Tina’s acurately painful reaction to Melanie’s question about the play’s “unfair” conclusion was something that deeply broke me too. Past, remorses, regrets, hidden blooded scars, all the most intense emotions running back with few words this way… That touched me so much. Really. More than I could say…
      I think she just fully realized how much more hard it will be to see what was until now just a written work coming to life on a stage, above all with two such realistic actresses playing her lost love story. To write this play was a more than needed emotional outlet, but to see and hear it will be simply too much to bear, I’m afraid. And just dangerous enough to mix reality with reality’s re-creation.

      ***************************

      My goodness… What did you do to me !!
      You know, I’m always writing my comments during my readings – to be sure to not forget anything essential. That’s also a big part of my pleasure.
      So… I had to stop it when Bette appeared on the stage. That was just too unexpected and too moving for my nerves…
      That’s why this comment was interrupted so long, for once. And of course I didn’t want to write everything again, after this new lighting…
      God, how talented you are…

      For me, that’s the most intense emotional moment I read here for a long time – and however I’m a so deeply emotional person, that’s crazy !
      All I can add to my comment now is : you just made me cry. Simply that. Thank you…

      You know – and I’m still more than serious – I didn’t think I could love the sequel more than I loved Can’t help falling in love but I was wrong. It’s not a sequel, but an incredibly powerful fulfitment of every dramatic notes you placed on the first part of your story’s partition to create, in the current second part, a long crescendo until to reach a symphonic level. Yes, a symphone. Or an opera. Your choice.
      Now I understand why you love so much to put a bit of lyrics in each of your concertos-chapters’ titles : a way to mix the evocational powers of music and words…

      More than ever, thank you from the bottom of my heart.
      I’m currently the much moved reader you could ever dream about, dearest drama queen… And I’m still crying. As simply as that.

    48. God..I love you and your story. and when you wrote:
      Alice: yes well our little Tina has quite a flair for the dramatic.
      I was laughing my ass off. Tina and Bette will always be #1 but your AL and AL are awsome. Please Please..with sugar on top..give us another chapter tonight. Do I need to sound anymore pathetic?

    49. Oh my god,I just love your writing, I absolutely love it! Started off this morning and through the day I read the whole storyline… couldn’t believe there wasn’t a ‘next post..” when I just clicked the button :-)!! Please post a new chapter very soon!!

    50. OH MY FUCKING GOD!!! You just threw me of a loop. (jumping up and down like a crazy woman) I can’t believe you are doing this. I LOVE IT!!! you are sooo evil. Pls post again I need my 2nd hit for the day.

    52. You are amazing. I’m at a loss for words. This is beyond DRAMA!LOL Each chapter is better than the last. I usually do not like rollercoasters, but I LOVE this ride!

    53. Yay!!!!! I love you flair! I was hoping that Bette would audition. I’m doin’ the happy dance!!! I hope Tina agrees–Bette should be the one to play herself. I can’t wait to see what happens if she does get the part because I know there are going to be some NC-17 scenes and Tina will be boiling bunnies over seeing her getting freaky w/Melanie! LOL! I can’t believe half-baked is your fav too! SO YUMMY isn’t it! And since you’re quoting Beaches’ songs…who is ‘the wind beneath your wings?’… I personally prefer hot wings w/the bleu cheese dressing, but I’m not sure you want the wind that comes from that! LOL! I know, I’ve lost ya now…sorry! I’m a dork! But, thank you so much for this story and for getting B & T together (in one room!) Mwah!!!!

    57. Hey everybody – it’s only chapter ten, okay? And if you think so divine a foil as Daphne is just gonna fold up and fall off the stage…well…that would be a waste of a wonderful character and a terrific situation.

      Hold onto your hats, the drop may be so steep, it’ll make the oxygen/air masks drop down from their consoles!!!!!!

      FFTD – you are like Roy Jones Jr.: pound for pound, the greatest dramatist on this site – no one would dare challenge you!!!!

      May I say, with all due respect,
      you are a bad mother…(shut your mouth)
      I’m just talking about Flair! (then we can dig it!!!!!)

      I have my digitalis and nitro ready — bring on the next chapter!!!!!!

      WE WHO ARE ABOUT TO DIE SALUTE YOU!!!!!!

    60. i can feel the bubbles melt. sorry i’m eating an aero bar. which isn’t nearly as sweet as this chapter! sry i missed commenting AGAIN but i’ve been going out with some friends lately. they’ve now decided they want to stay overnight here so i won’t be leaving and i’ll be all set to read the next chapter when u post tonight! (pretty please). thank u so much for responding to my earlier comment. i’ve been with this story for a while and i find it totally mind-blowing. one chapter i’m laughing so hard that my sides hurt and another i’m feeling so much sympathy for the characters that i could cry (but i don’t, i have yet to be broken but trust me this story has come close to having me!) wow, this is a really long comment isn’t it? well i’d just like to say that i hope jackie isn’t too pissed off and bravo for bette. i can’t imagine having to play myself reliving the most emotional moment in my life in front of hundreds of people. i tip my aero bar to you (i don’t have a hat). bring on the goodness! oh yeah and i loved how u had flair for the dramatic in the previous chapter. greatness

    61. Dame Girl! You caught me off guard. Well i was hoping Bette would talk to Tina, I guess auditioning for the part get’s them in the same room, It’s a start. I need some TIBETTE LOVING soooon. Love it Flair

    62. omg omg thats AMAZING!!!!

      Oh pls dont leave me hanging! I want anothr bit posted for when I get home from work in 9 hours time!!!!!!

      PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE its so good!

    63. OMG!!! lm on awe of you right now!! U need to publish your material l swear!! Flair you are awesome!! Right coz of your brilliance, lm gonna fly you to London for our ‘special’ date! That ok with you 1st? Then l’ll tell you what l have planned..lol!

    67. Do you have any idea how many ears of corn you can shuck in the time it takes you make a second post? Enough already!…Quit being a comment junkie and hit the button! We’re waiting…:)

    70. Fftd, we’re all standing on our plush seats in our evening gowns and suits cheering and giving you a standing ovation…in the middle of your show!

    72. Oh holly shit, oh my fuck. This is fucking awesome and damnnnn excellent, I was shocked when Bette enter the door, damn now she want to audition and she said” Well I figure, who better to play me, than me?” damn this is crazy and excited to everyone, love it. now let see the drama and the fun began, post soo please. Thanks! Excellent chapter! 5 stars for you!

    74. Awesome twist to the story! I love it and I totally didn’t expect it. Can’t wait for Bette to get the part…please let her get the part….pretty please….what do I need to do for you to make it happen? Just tell me =)

    75. Insatiable is very hot. Hmm, well I’m not quite sure what you’re into…care to proffer any ideas? ;)

      Ahhh I was sooo hoping that this was where you were gonna go with this!!!! YES!!!!!! I knew I was doing the right thing to read your story last! *Does little happy dance* You have made my week flair, thank you!!!

      P.S. – I love how you incorporated your moniker into this chapter! Too cute :)

    76. OHHHHH MMYYYY GOOOOOOODDD!!!!!! FLAIR, YOU ARE LITERALLY KILLING ME HERE! You can´t throw a “I want to audition” from Bette to us and THEN LEAVE!!! What a cliffhanger and I do mean that, coz I AM feeling like hanging at the edge of a cliff of sheer curiosity and I can´t wait to read more! Please, please, send out the smoke signals SOON, am gonna be sitting at the window all day to not miss them! :-))I am completely aware that am asking much now, BUT please post soon again! I love your writing! …five stars are yours again today (they aren´t enough though, but unfortunately it´s not possible to give you the stars of the whole starry sky…)

    77. y’know, this part of your story reminded me of a movie called “Something’s gotta give” played by Jack Nicholson & Diane Keaton. Good one! And as usual, I love Alex and Alice… what a pair of witty ‘troublemakers’. haha.. absolutely love ’em.

    78. Hi every one my name is shifty and I am a Flair addict. I find it difficult to operate between posts and I don’t know what to do with myself, I find that I am constantly searching for the talented and skilled writer’s next post. *hangs head*
      Thank you for listening.

      Thank you Flair for shearing your gift with us. Always looking forward to reading your next post.

      Question without notice, why did Bette have a change of heart about the play I thought she wanted to keep her anonymity, but now she wants the lead role. Was it Bette’s true intention to audition for the role or was her appearance motivated by her need to see Tina again?

    83. Hey.I just had to leave a comment, which I rarely do, only on special occasions..sorry,I’m really lazy like that :)
      I just caught up on the chapters on this sequel and I have to say I like it even better than I did “can’t help falling in love”, which I thought was very good aswell.I’m just so in love with Alex in this story, and it may be because I know an “Alex” in my life too,which makes this all the more fun + the dialogue between all the characters is just totally hilarious.I hope you keep it up.
      So, after reading these 10 great chapters I’m totally at loss what to do with myself, because suddenly there is no more…help?! :)
      Anyways, Thank You for writing this wonderful piece of fiction!
      oh, and “you’re welcome” is “ole hyvä” in finnish btw. :)

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