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Pyromance 2
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We pull into her driveway. The thud of loud music beating against the concrete. The party started without her….in her own house.
“Carmen….can I ask you something?”
“If I can answer it sure.”
“Is it true that you had this part for a while?”
“Does it bother you?”
“No.”
“So what’s the problem…?”
Sway of her hips as she walked away. Right, left. Soft click of her heels on the cobblestoned walk way. I tuned out the music and focused on her. She was greeted by Monsieur de roids and I went around back to try to fit in.
Flash of bright Hollywood smiles, Hollywood teeth…..glances met and broken Hollywood eyes. Drinks and forced laughter, everyone knew me and they didn’t. Catching up with Mark drinking talking about the merits of a good book versus a good movie…plans to go see some shows coming up, bands and things.
And just below the surface…Carmen. Her eyes meeting mine, losing her in the crowd…panic…then finding her. Alone she seemed, yet happy. Like she knew this was the price. I wanted her bad. Badder than worse….lost her again….I wanted to be alone. Try to find some place to hear the crickets sing…maybe…..
I walked finding it hard to see with all the booze in my blood. Followed this trail of tiki torches to a waterfall….maybe not a waterfall but a pool. Some scattered chatter…laughter…music was a little softer….the life of the party…Al Green, I don’t remember the song…but it was nice and smooth.
Dug into my pockets. Found my smokes. Sat by the pool. Nice shimmering light, that soft sound of water. Click of heels behind me….Carmen….
“You have a nice house.”
“Thank you. You haven’t seen the best part….come on…”
Warm hand, extended we walked over through this brush of wilderness. High up in the hills…..darkness and these millions of dots of light. We where far off….the music trailing us in the distance…
“I come out here…when I want to be apart and alone.”
“My place is nice but I don’t have this view….all I see is the sludge of Sunset….well its not that bad…..but I definitely don’t have this view.”
“I like the shape of your mouth….its perfect for kissing…..”
Now there where a lot of ways I could respond to that. But I couldn’t think of one.
“I should get back…..’
“Wait…..”
I took her hand pulled her over to me. We where so close….black on white…..she kind of rubbed her nose against mine. Things where getting throbbing inside me. We where channeling our roles…..right? That’s what I was thinking. We kept warm…but we didn’t kiss. She just kind of slid out of my arms and was gone before I could blink my eyes closed.
Tbc…….
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First the rating bit. I read fics and often leave a response but I often don’t rate them because I simply forget to do so. The main thing is that you know your fics are well read and extemely well recieved among readers, just look at the comments.Now on to the important stuff: this fic! This fic is shaping up to be my favourite of all your fics. As someone previously mentioned, there is always palable chemistry between S/C. I like suspense, so I hope they will dance around eachother for a while. Plus, Carmen has a b/f and I can’t wait to see in what way that he fit in all of this. UPDATE SOON!
uhhhh to ur comment up there. I dunno what kinda crazy bashing or watever pple are doin…. but ur writing is PHENOMENAL!! So nevermind haters =DI LOVE all ur fics.. ALL… this one is nice n light and cute. Different but still amazing!
sorry to hear about the haters! :(but i loved the update! i would have given it 5 starts! like i always do to your fics, they’re my fav!
Hey, I love that you write about my favourite character Shane, so as long as your stories involve her then I will be reading. I appreciate all the writers who take the time to write and post. It makes for part of our wonderful community. So thank you and as always, looking forward to your next posts.
I love it!!!!!
amazing! Keep going…fast!
love too the way you write like ohter your stories. It’s lighter than before and some partly is too slow but give me different pleasure. Thanks.
My guess is that it might be in large part tibetters with the sharmen hating. If I’m wrong – sorry tibetters, but if I’m right – I don’t get what they’re doing reading a sharmen centric fic if they’re just gonna give bad ratings for some inexplicable reason that probably has nothing to do with the quality of the fic. Your fics are all phenomenal, New Dawn Fades. They always manage to pull me right into the thick of whatever is going on in an update. I don’t know exactly how to descibe how I feel about your fics other than that there’s always such an intensity there, and it’s just unavoidable not to get caught up in it. I really like the beginning of this fic – I was hooked from the get-go, and I’m really excited about seeing how things will develope. Hope you update soon!
Sharmen, Tibette, Danish… we all have our ships. If anyone’s trying to bring anyone else down, it’s a damn shame and they probably need to get a life asap. Ratings are a fickle thing and, imho, totally pointless. The comments are the real deal. I love your stories NDF, you are talented, have a wild imagination and never fail to surprise us. Thank you for that, you rock.
I’ve noticed the same rating problems happening w/ other fics as well. Its unfortunate that your readers can’t give you the top ratings like before but its understandable & probably best that its disabled. Many above have written my thoughts on the whole “ratings hater” thing, so I won’t reiterate. No matter what au story you write there’s always that undeniable attraction between them. Carmen doesn’t appear to be showing Shane her diva side, maybe because she see’s that Shane hasn’t been corrupted by Hollywood. Luvin’ this fic. Your chaps. always seems to end too quickly.
still amazing still msking me gag and most of all i still love youlol… love where you goin withh it but… question… does shane have long or short hair…? its just its hard to imagin her like the beach girl on and off
I don’t care about ships. maybe a little..but I think it would be better to do care what you like than what you hate.