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Tina, Tiny Pieces Chapter 13
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Jenny, who has been lifting one leg, then the other, slowly in and out of the pool, looks up. She smiles and nods. Shane walks around the edge, handing her one.
Go over and give Jenny a beer, fine, see if I care. Fucking pool feels like it’s gonna boil over and she sits down there dressed like we’re going sledding, for Christ’s sake.
She blindly tries to grab onto the edge of the pool but instead gets purchase on Shane’s bare right foot. She lowers her sunglasses, looking up at a grinning Shane who dangles the longneck just above
What’s the matter,
Shut up you imbecile. I’m not grumpy. First, you leave me out here with Miss Sparkling Conversation for like 30 fucking minutes while you two sit in there gabbing or whatever. It’s hotter than fucking hell and this pool feels like it’s been microwaved.
Damnit Alice, that hurt!
Give me my beer.
I ought to pour it on your head. Look at that – you left a mark.
Bette walks up to the pool edge carrying a tray of pale green margaritas.
Are you biting people again,
Ha ha, very funny. Tell Ronald McDonald to give me my beer.
Give her her beer, Ronald.
Shane thrusts the beer at
Here, you big baby. And shut up about the damn McDonald’s thing, ok?
Jenny lifts her legs out and walks to their end of the pool. She sits down on a patio chair.
How are you Jenny?
Jenny smiles.
Fine, Bette, thanks. You?
Bette smiles in return, she sips her margarita.
Fine. Better now.
Shane nods.
Nothing like playing hooky on a Friday afternoon. Sitting in the sun, drinking with your friends.
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after reading this chapter i felt desperate for something but don’t know what…well, i do know but don’t think i’m gonna get it any time soon
I love this! You’re just too funny! “Challahback Girl”?? What a hoot. I wish I was Bette’s raft. LOL. Love to have her noni reclining on me. Bette landed a doc? That would make a Jewish mother proud. I love their convos. The repartees are authentic. Most excellent, lk. Your pup sounds like a cutie pie. I bet you are the funny one in your group of friends.
Ah, group time… we never get enough of it.
always happy to see a new post from you. and as always you did not disappoint. thanks for putting Bette and Helena in a bikini, always a nice image to have. also am i getting a hint of jealously from Helena or am I projecting my Helebette fantasy in every story now? thanks for writing.
Okay…when I said it was painful to read…I meant a good pain (you know the kind), not that it was BAD painful. Each and every chapter is incredible! Thanks!
You can always surprise me. I have to act like Alice: tell us all the details! lol. Great and nontrivial chapter.
Ahhh Amazeing…love the whole group scene,all enjoying each others company…and still that tinge of saddness in Bette..but at least she has her friends and their support…loved this chapter,…and for the record i do think Tina will grow…with your help ofcourse..Thanks always a pleasure to read.
Ah yes another great chap. I don’t see too many people useing the word prone though, but since I’m in a physiology class I guess that I just realize what I’m reading now. Love it all keep up the work.
Ah yes another great chap. I don’t see too many people useing the word prone though, but since I’m in a physiology class I guess that I just realize what I’m reading now. Love it all keep up the work.
“Still waters run deep” – that’s Bette.Great chapter.
Kid, you could post a story about sneezing, and I’d be delighted as all get out; simply because it was you who posted it. Ok…on to my comment. I have to partially concur with Lamentamini; ALice and the beer had me rolling. When Helena cast her sidelong glance at Bette I started yelling, “YES!!!! GOT DAMMIT PLEEEEEASE PUT BETTE WITH HELENA!!!!!!”………… What can I say, these 2 women are some fine ass $%^&*(O*#$%^&&&!!……..
Oh Kid, even the chapters that you think do nothing more than “move the story along” are rife with texture, depth and symbolism. Your talent simply does not allow you to be anything less than august………Shane’s interaction with Bette are touching. She sees Bette as both matriarch and friend. She respects the martiarch but wants to help the friend. She pushes Bette to have the ‘issue on the table’ because she knows that the show would not only be a gift to Alice, but a chatharsis of sorts for Bette. Shane, ever the caretaker………..Jenny’s desire for the Happy Meal toy – possibly a wish to return to happier times, or yet another one of Jenny’s needs to fixate on something that it outside of the norm, something that will draw attention and thereby experience……….Alice’s irritation with being stuck with Jenny was interesting, both are writer’s yet neither one of them were able to communicate with each other……….Bette’s honest assessment of how her therapy is going with Dr. Langham was insightful, she realizes that she was fallible and that without her she may have done something serious, that’s growth………Shane is so supportive and she and Bette’s exchange and metonymical use of cooking terms to discuss Bette’s therapy was a riot. More telling though, was Bette’s alluding to the fact that some issues she knows will be revisited may be a subconscious way of Bette admitting that same potential for her relationship with Tina, it’s just on the back burner for now…………I loved how you had Jenny in the shady end of the pool, much like her mental state – she is slightly in the dark about how she feels about Max and his actions. Alice seems to hide behind her sense of humor, using it as a shield and he zinc oxide seems to be an extension of that need to be protected, but noticed at the same time………..You’re killng me with Challahback Girl and Boy Vey – I’ll take that over ‘Got Milk’ anyday!…………The use of playig hookey as a metaphor for allaying the responsibilities of dealing with the vagaries of life was incisive and well written as always………..You capture the group’s spirited repartee so effectively that it’s easy to see the love surrounds the jesting………..The tension is palpable when Helena begins to explain why she knows where the bathroom is and it’s understandable that everyone would cringe at the faux pas. However, there is always going to be a certain degree of uncomfortableness that results as you define boundaries and live with the past as you form new friendships – Helena and Bette are just beginning to learn how to nagivate those waters……….Once again the weather provides subtext, the weather is just as changeable as the atmosphere of the group. Wonderful allegory………..Curious to see what Alice does with the $850K, it shows that Dana cared about her, and was certainly a nice gift, but it comes with a responsibility that Bette’s photography exhibit won’t – although they each have their own burdens……….Jenny’s comment about active avoidance was a verbal microcosm of her life, nice turn of a phrase, Kid…………..Everyone’s reaction to the news that Bette has a date was so like them – Alice is inquisitive and over the top in her pursuit of the details—Shane knows but is circumspect in not revealing anything—Helena is surprised but is the paragon of propriety, especially knowing that she hasn’t quite yet earned the right to comment given their fledgling friendship—and Jenny is mute, because it doesn’t involve or provide any meaningful experience for her……..I was struck by how Helena shrunk back into the raft, she is a part of the group, but not comfortable with it all just yet………And Bette’s fleeting smile was indiciative of her current emotional state – she is finding small inroads to happiness, but they are fleeting and still on tenuous legs. Her trust in the future is not yet steadfast……….Kudos times a 1000, Kid. Your story is intriguing to no end.
What a satisfying chapter. I felt like I was floating on a raft too, just enjoying them all. You’ve really captured their personalities. Loving this fanfic. It’s absolutely marvelous! I love your way with detail. So well written it just flows.
Lastkid you’re a brilliant writer.
i don’t care who you put with who, as long as you keep writing…great job as usual!!!!!!!!!!!
You know, kid, one of your chapters is like a two-for. We get the story and your notes, which are just as good. I love Jenny’s T-shirt. I presume she’s one of the fist-clenchers as she’s never without internal turmoil, but how long has Helena been entertaining thoughts of Bette? When do we get to meet the doctor?
All I ask is that this Dr.Crowley is HOTTT like Fire on all levels!!!! Anyways, great chappy, I chuckled quite a few times. Keep em’ coming!
Wow! lk r u sure u weren’t born with a pen? ur writing is amazing as always.. I don’t know what to say I just love ur story, ur writing, ur ideas, the way I feel each time after I read ur story… Ur just wonderful
WOW!!!! Just Great. Bette and a Doctor this will be fun. Thank you
ALice and the beer had me rolling. When Helena cast her sidelong glance at Bette I started yelling, “NO!!!! GOD DAMMIT NO NOT BETTE WITH HELENA!!!!!!” Yay for jumping to conclusions. *dies of embarrassment* I really do like this story, but sometimes I have a hard time following the dialogue in that I don’t know who is saying what. I’m one of those people who likes to hear the characters’ voices tell the story, and not knowing who is saying what makes that a wee bit difficult. Sorry, just having a nitpicky moment. :)
Around The Way Alice would have said, “Fuck all y’all!”…This couldn’t be better. Could it???
Another great chapter, but please no Bette & Helena together story. Well my bitch dog won’t tussle over balls, she’ll only chase pussy, and I can’t blame her, could I? ;)
You so don’t like Jenny…or maybe you captured the characters so well. I have to thing about that one…you keep it up, i’ll keep reading. My fav story btw.
I get the feeling that Helena knows something and that it has to do with Tina. When she heard that Bette is having a second date with this doctor her demeanor changed quickly. This is probably very good for Bette, but something in Helena’s mood and posture is saying something. Okay, maybe I just want Bette to be with Tina. It is okay if you want to chase cats, just don’t chase mine. I know the payoff is small, but sometimes you have to go for the small payoffs.
Steal, borrow and use to your heart’s content. :) Speaking of borrowing…may I make my own shirt with “Challahback Girl?” Aboslutely love the idea!I like how you portray the group dynamic, even the budding (albeit strained) friendship between Bette and Helena. And I for one, would not be opposed to some pining on either of their parts for the other. However, this doctor lady seems like a cacth. If she is what will take Helena to profess her own interest in Ms. Porter, then so be it. Helebette rules!!!