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Tina, Tiny Pieces Chapter 6
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I wouldn’t be so sure, Shane. This has all the hallmarks of something
Bette, please. Let’s try to keep our wits about us.
Bettes head snaps in
I’m merely saying.
Bette appears to calm herself, slightly, momentarily. I clear my throat, I’m about to speak but god knows I have no idea what I’m going to say. I watch
I wouldn’t do that if I were you,
Bette, come on. You don’t honestly think I –
Can it, Bette! Your’e way fucking out of line! You don’t even know what’s going on!
This is surreal, like one of those reality shows where the participants become so accustomed to living on camera that they simply no longer notice the camera itself, they become blind to the most obvious intrusion. Instead it becomes just another fixture, like a lamp, or a drinking glass. I am that fixture, I am that camera.
So you tell me then. What is going on Shane?
Um. Shit. I don’t know. But I know that whatever it is, it isn’t what you think.
Do you know what I think, Shane? I think that this was
Bette, really. Try and take a deep breath.
You take a fucking deep breath,
I wonder, for a moment, if it will do any good to tell Bette that I’m here of my own accord. As I’m wondering, I see Shane step quickly around Jenny, so she’s directly in front of Bette. She levels Bette a look – not angry, but serious. Bette meets her eye but does not move. I’m so stunned, so engrossed and so paralyzed by humiliation that I dont see Max maneuver around Jenny. When I focus, I find him inches from my face. He looks directly at me, his eyes flinty.
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Paging Tina’s common sense. Paging Tina’s common sense. Please return to her immediately! I think it’s safe to say that Tina needs to go back to the drawing board for Operation Win Friends And Love of My Life Back. Please post another chapter of this amazing story soon, Lastkid.
This story is awesome! Maybe Tina will finally realize that the world doesn’t revolve around her… I doubt it b/c she isn’t the smartest bear in the forest. What would possess her to go to “there” club and not expect drama. No one wants or cares about her tears. As much as I hate Max/ Moira I’m glad she stood up to Tina.
i don’t know what to say… this was a differcult chapter… but a necessary one… please continue
I didn’t realize I was holding my breath, thank goodness it was only 3 pages…3 wonderful, drama filled, exciting pages. Have no idea where your going with this, but I’m along for the ride!!!
Can’t say Max didn’t have his first question to Tina thrown back at him for no reason. But hell what do I know? I went to The Palms (my first time in a lesbian bar) and there were men EVERYWHERE. It was like walking into the fucking Twilight Zone. But anyway, this was definitely a tough chapter and way more intense than I expected. At this point, if Tina let Bette and Angelica into each others’ lives again, I don’t even think Tina could have her friends back.
sfdf5, every author has her (or his) right to write a character (or characters) however she (he) sees fit. Sometimes, the audience (or certain few) won’t always agree with the portrayal(s), but that doesn’t mean the author should “get that [the point of view] checked out!” If one doesn’t like or agree with the story, then that person need not read it. If you must criticize, please do so toward the story or characters. No need to personally attack the author for having differing opinions than you. TY. :^)
I’m at a complete loss for words to describe what I feel about what just happened. Feel sorry for everyone of them, especially Bette and Tina, they are both hurting, something awful. Maybe they can clear things up, hopefully. Thanks for the post.
Wow, kid, you blew me away with that. (I think I just gave away my age.) Jesus, Tina must be some kind of cretin to stick around and argue once she felt the chill coming off their collective shoulders. A little surprised at the venom Bette directed at Alice, even after being assured by more than one party that she had not invited Tina, but I do understand the misdirected fire behind it. God, kid, given the lack of restraint and reflection B & T have demonstrated, how does one explain the years they were able to stay together?
With every chapter I get more caught up in this story. I feel sorry for Tina, but damn if she didn’t bring this on herself. I’m in for the long haul, but don’t keep us waiting too long!
Wow. And I thought my life’s dramatic enough in relation to the people I work with. Tina, Tina, Tina. What were you thinking? Oh, and the most dramatic of them all has got to be Max. Estrogen beats testosterone anytime (er, drama-wise, that is). I don’t know about Bette, though. I really couldn’t take her anger seriously anymore, after she likened her deep breaths to Jacques Cousteau. ANYTHING in reference to Cousteau simply reduces me to giggles. I love your fic as always, Lastkid. Thank you for posting. Cheers!
Okay, maybe I am just stupid, but I really would like to see Bette and Tina work this out. I know that Tina is not using the brain god gave her, but somewhere inside of her drove her to go to that club. She is missing something in her life or she would have stayed at home or gone to the gym. But to drive to a lesbian bar something is telling her that she is missing something very important to her (namely Bette). Great story, and I know that most people are hating Tina right now, but I can’t help it they belong together. This is all fucking IC and companies fault.
You know Kid, if they only would have used Bette and Tina as the example of Newton’s Third Law of Motion in physics – I might have paid more attention in class!! Execellent distillation of the third law “For every action, there is and equal and opposite reaction”…..Tina with the group, Helena with Bette, Alice with Bette, Max with Tina, Shane with Bette – each and every depiction, brilliant!……And on a tangenital subject, a vacuum of sorts is created with Tina’s presence……Once again, Tina tries to eschew responsibility by claiming that she is ‘objectively’ looking at Bette. Subjectivity would only undermine her decision and force her to accept her culpability……Each of the groups acknowlegment of Tina gave the perfect snapshot of their personalities – Shane: Always there…Jenny: Rarely there, vacuous…Max: Visceral reactions bordering on hyperbole…Alice: The best of intentions, but always misunderstood……Understandable though, that Bette would immediately conjecture that Alice had set her up, it did appear to be a possibly orchestrated meeting – despite the truth……The whispered interactions between Alice, Bette and Shane once again illustrate that Tina has lost her priviledges with the group and her punishment is now to be on the outside looking in. The obvious pain that she has caused the group doesn’t give her the right to know just how deeply……Tina lives by the premise that she is the center of the universe and everything revolves around her – her belief that she is the fixture, the camera that allows her to view this surreal world is a pretty vaunted pedestal she has put herself on, when in reality all she has become in an interloper……God, your Jacques Cousteau visual had me in stitches!……The vitriol that Tina has for Max and her caustic remark about her having a ‘real man’, is nothing more than Tina trying to justify her decision, her belief that a ‘real man’ will mean a ‘real life’ in some way……Tina is consistent, that’s for sure – she was looking for Bette to bail her out and come to her rescue when Max lunged at her – she wants anyone other than herself to run interference for her actions……I get the feeling that Max’s defence of Bette and his hyper-exaggeration of chivalry is becasue he feels for Bette in a way that strikes at his own core. He understands what it’s like to feel emotional pain so deeply that it turns against you in fits of rage. When you want to hurt something else so you don’t hurt so much yourself……Tina’s anger at Max is her way of making him pay for HER transgression, she is angry that they are accepting HIM and treating her like a traitor. I suspect that if Tina examines the reason she is being treated like a pariah she will find that it has more to do with how she treated Bette in regards to Angelica, not that she left her for a man – although that most certainly didn’t help……Tina seeing that Bette is wanted is just another tacit declaration of what she couldn’t or wasn’t willing to do. She wants to feel that acceptance, but her choices have left her on unsteady ground emotionally……Kid, what can I say…this tour de force that you have created is an insightful, moving and sometimes painful depiction of life’s choices and their consequence. Tina is an enigma not only to us, but to herself as well. Your writing is exquisite and thoughtful and you illustrate clearly the barriers that sadness and bitterness can build between a group of friends when they feel betrayed and the sobering effects for all that are involved. More, please!
I love this story and your three dimensional characters – they are all so flawed, and conflicted, weak and unsure of themselves, yet strong and noble – all so clearly drawn. This chapter has more tension in every word than Max could ever hold in his fists. Power is the word that came to mind at the end of the chapter. Powerful writing but also the power we hold over our friends and ones we love, to build them up and break them down. The power we have to dig ourselves into a hole or drag ourselves out of the depths, the power of friends and family to help us through our struggles, the power of a “look†or the absence of one. Ultimately the power of words to hurt or heal. ~~~ As usual, your dialogue is spot on for each character… your characters that is. The rhythm of it adds perfectly to the tension. The reference to Jacques Cousteau was perfect for Bette and sure made me smile. Thank you.~~~ Tina’s words are the pot calling the kettle black. She knows this [at least I hope she does] but it is as though she just can stop herself from uttering the foul words. Someone has to pay for her not being part of the crowd anymore. Still, it’s as though she is punishing herself with every word – slapping herself in the face as much as Max. She so wants the love and to belong to all the women present but she knows she’s given up the right to be there. She doesn’t seem to be ready to admit it all to herself yet, that she has messed up and denied her true self.
Your writing is intense, original and completely captivating. Thank you for sharing it with us.
fyck Tina…you did it to yourself, you did it to Bette, now you gonna do it to the gang just cuz you wanna be right? you wanna be pitied? you wanna be the centre of attention? and Henry doesn’t get you any of that so why not go back and torment Bette???Max is so onto it!!!!
I’ll just echo massmom here. Now THAT was drama! Are you listening Irene?
Their relationship is torn further asunder. I don’t see how they can get it back together after this. Tina has some serious issues she needs to address. It seems she still has friends in Alice, Shane and Helena. I hope she will reconsider the custody arrangement. This story is very well written, painful and hard to take sometimes, but very, very well written. Thanks!
What chaos Tina wreaked. Lastkid, you are so amazingly talented.
yet again another excellent chapter. it’s obvious that tina’s not gonna win the “how to win friends and influence people” award just yet and the way you wrote this chapter had me on the edge of my seat just begging for someone to slap her!! (but your way was so much better!!) keep up the great work.x.x. (and yes they are hugs)
Woah!..Tina just walks in and without saying hardly a word…..chaos!….great chapter…oh and im sure the obsessive compulsives havnt taken offence…their too busy…double checking other stuff..lol…
Heart racing and intensely beautiful.
I have really enjoyed your story thus far. I just enjoyed the fact that tina’s behavior in this story is not blamed on Bette’s cheating. It is great tina is force to see the consequences of her actions. Really concerned regarding Angelica.
Your writing is fucking amazing!! I think I was sitting at the table feeling sorry for Tina. I know she deserves it but that was ugly. Then there is Bette, UGH!!! I hope you post soon.
That was good, not completely as i expected it but still very good. Post soon, i can’t wait what happens next.
Hmmm… they left Al to pay the bill and obviously Al didn’t have such money, so she invited Tina to sit to coax her paying the bill. Smart girl. lol… The chapter is awesome, but I’m beginning to worry about the ending, since my understanding is you’re not very into TiBette.
You amaze me. You have this ability to place the reader in the moment, feeling every emotion.
Wow!
you have some serious issues with tina’s character. it seems that all of your stories make tina a unbearable villian! you need to get that checked out!
this was intense…it was hell, for all of them actually…will it get any better? maybe tina should rethink the custody if it’s not too late…i just hope IC and company won’t go this way in s4…the writing is much better but the drama is too intense to handle
LastKid, This was a very well well written and intense chapter. I had to stop and close my eyes and count to ten when Tina commented to Max about knowing what a real man is….I almost busted my new computer….I truly don’t knkow how ANYONE couldn’t have not reacted to that in the group of friends esp. Bette….I hope once Bette calms she’ll hear Al out. Of course now Al is talking with Tina…so… Can’t wait for more.
First, thanks for having someone (anyone) give Tina a much deserved verbal lashing. Secondly, what a sad night for all around. I would feel empathy for Tina if she could only get a clue on how she fucked things up, instead of continuing her pity party for one. At least Bette owned up to her egregious mistake (that happened over two years ago) and tried to make amends, which turned out to be in vain. In the end, I really hope your Tina and the one of the show eventually reclaims the redeeming qualities she once held in season one.
jesus f-ing christ i cant imagine tina ever sayin those words…but wow she did…
Spectacular, and I put the emphasis on SPECTACLE! Five-5-Five-5-Five!!!
Max might like Bette but she was out of line. I believe Tina would have left on her on.Poor Alice,Tina gave as good as she got. Glad that Max and Jenny got toss and no one else thanks