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To Die Standing Chptr. 14
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Bette’s body was sore and had taken more than she thought she could handle. But not unlike any other strenuous exercise, she was feeling the consequences. Her calves were tight and her thighs were burning, one step off of the bike and she wobbled. If she’d been on slanted ground surely her footing wouldn’t have been enough to keep her upright. She’d definitely gone too far today. Bette leaned her bike against a wall outside of the guest house and unzipped the small pocket on her shorts to retrieve the key, the moment she stood upright to unlock the door she felt her back muscles tighten, she groaned and leaned on the door before opening it up. She stepped into the house and unbuckled her shoes before removing them and placing them on the mat beside the door. She never wanted to get their home dirty on intrude on their space in any way.
Walking into the bedroom she began to peel her clothes away. With all of the perspiration and dirt stuck to her it felt like extracting a layer of skin. She folded them and placed them on top of the laundry basket. She got into the warm shower and immediately felt the comfort of hot stream pulling away the stiffness of her over worked body. Throughout the shower Bette continued to run down her mental list of questions she’d asked herself throughout the ride. And not one answer came with a definitive conclusion as to why she’d hide that portion of her life from Tina. Tina had been so forthright in her own revelations of her childhood. Bette had thought she’d done the same to a degree. Sure she left out a few points but those were insignificant, weren’t they?
Before she knew it the shower had run extremely cold and it was time to get the weight off of her heavily used thighs. Bette stepped out of the shower and reached for a towel with all of the strain of a body run into the ground. She didn’t have the strength to fully wrap herself. So she just wrapped it around her waist, which was good enough. She cautiously walked back into the cool bedroom and regretted it the moment her skin was blasted with the colder air. She didn’t have the strength to make it pass the bed. She sat down and felt like she had no control over her body falling completely back, for the moment it felt better. But then it hit that she had no desire or will to get up after that.
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Thanks for the update. I’m glad to see that Tina is so strong. Here she is confronted with 2 beautiful women, both of them Bette’s former lovers, and instead of feeling weakened through intimidation she seems to have been empowered somehow. Tina has really gone out of her way to show Bette what she means to her. Now it’s Bette’s turn to venture out of her comfort zone and come through for Tina.
What a welcomed surprise…. But I totally had to go read the last post (it’s been way too long, lol). Now I’m caught up and want to know how much will power does Bette Porter really have (not too much, I hope). Thanks for the post… Don’t stay away so long next time.
Thank you for posting. I have so missed this story. This was incredible. Thank you.
Oh damn this is so good and please post more, thanks!
Let me say FIRST that your writing is NOT CRAP, okay. You are a GREAT WRITER. After reading one of the chapters of this story, I just cringe and wonder how long we will have to wait for another, so I will read that one several times to keep the story in my mind between posts. I believe I can safely speak for the readers that we do enjoy your writing and just want you to continue posting as often as you can. Please. Just please don’t think that your writing is not good, it is fantastic. Thanks. Rant over. Now I’ll go read the story.
Thanks for the post. Yes, it has been too long but the story only gets better with each chapter as you delve into what makes each character tick. I love the depth that you’ve taken them. Every one has a mystery to them and through trust it gets revealed. Hopefully Bette will understand that Tina’s intentions are honorable and true and will let her in to a depth she hasn’t before. Difficult things happen to all of us… its best to learn from them and then move in a forward direction as not to miss out on the rest of what life has to offer. I love your writing so please keep it coming.
Willpower? Bette’s got the woman that she loves doing her damnedest to tend to all of her needs… it’s time to let go and fully trust Tina. She’s not going to leave. By the way nettababy, there is nothing sub-par about your writing. I love this story and I’m always looking for your next chapter… I just wish your posts were more frequent (hint, hint). Thanks and post soon. :)
This is a great story and you are a good writer.Thank you.PPS
nettababy3 – Many have already said it in their comments so I will just reiterate that there is nothing sub-par about your writing. Perhaps your infrequency in posting is not a matter of not following through on your committment but instead a testament that you care enough about your readers, your characters, and the integrity of the story that you won’t allow yourself to post unless you are satisfied that it meets the standards you have set for yourself. I for one would rather read fewer excellent chapters as the one you have given us today rather than the flood of mediocrity that is so prevalent when the focus is on quantity and not quality. As for NC17’s they are over rated. There is nothing appealing to me in reading graphic depictions of the sex acts, the pounding of flesh, the screaming orgasms, characters whose vocabulary only extends to four letter words and intimacies that require contracts, safe words, and written consent to insure boundaries on the level of pain and degradation one will endure rather than the depth of pleasure one can expect. For me the subtle eye contact that Bette and Tina shared in this chapter to give permission has so much more poignancy. The care Tina took of Bette’s body while at the same time seducing her brought me into their world without it feeling like voyerism. The imagery in the way you described the scents you could almost smell, the touches you could almost feel, the trust that was building; stuff like this never disappoints because it brings the emotional connection to the act and not just the physical expression. The sensual journey and exploration of Bette’s body culminating in Tina’s giving into the physical need to express her love and Bette receiving it was perfection. In my opinion you accomplished so much with an R rating that it doesn’t necessitate an NC17 unless you want to take it to that level. This story makes for good reading and continued interest. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Omg what a treat to read a chapter of this story !!$ sure missed it!! But it was way too short post soon!!