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To Live Without You (Chapter 20)
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Hey people, I know it’s been a long time and I had made some promises to post earlier but this talk was a lot tricker than I expected. I would like to thank Poopy-Sh*t for helping me with the conversation with a little roleplaying (not like that perverts, I only role play that way with my girlfriend) And I would like to thank my love brteyes for being the amazing woman she is, she’s the reason this chapter was so hard to write. It’s difficult to write angst when you’re so damn happy.
Much Love,
ClosetDana
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Alice parked at the rehab center fifteen minutes early for the athlete’s appointment and looked over to Dana quickly,
“Ok, so you’ll be done in like an hour and a half…it’s real nice outside so I think I’ll just be over there in that little park area on my laptop.” The writer pointed over to a small grassy park near the doctor’s office, the athlete nodded grabbing her bag from the rear seat of the MINI and smacking Alice directly in the bag of the head with the oversized duffle.
“Oh God, I’m sorry Al, here just let me get it out.” Dana pulled the bag out of the car and leaned back in,
“Ok, I’ll see you in a little bit.” The athlete said kissing the writer on the lips quickly, Dana froze staring wide eyed at Alice. The writer would frequently drop Dana off at the gym while they were dating and the athlete had inadvertently kissed Alice out of habit. The writer’s eyes shifted as she thought of something witty to say to no avail,
“Um…I-I’ll yeah, I’ll see you…after your appointment…1:30.” Alice stuttered, the athlete still staring at her dumbfounded. Dana wasn’t sure where the kiss came from, the athlete knew they weren’t back together but something about the action felt so natural. Alice seemed a little frazzled, but not angry so the athlete decided she’d just be happy that the writer wasn’t burning rubber to get away from her.
Dana closed the door slowly, wondering if Alice was going to get out of the car. The park was right across the street and the athlete didn’t think Alice would actually drive such a short distance…Dana was wrong. The writer pulled the MINI out of the parking lot and drove it less than one hundred feet shifting into park across the street.
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CD my dear friend, this was so good. First off my apologies for forgetting to comment on your last chap. Not sure what happened there, but anyways, I have no idea what you were so worried about. This is exactly how these two would act and what they would say. I think you nailed it. It’s the great story of two people in love and two people to damn stubborn to let themselves be happy, so it’s pain and drama galore…and I fucking love it! Way to go girl. 5 stars from me! This was so awesome. Now, you just need to shake them both for me so we can get to the lovin’! LOL. Keep it up babe.
that chapter rocked! the conversation was so well written and brought up a lot of points that needed to be discussed… i agree with suzieb, look forward to more, now that the initial confrontation is out of the way i hope Al and Dane can work through their insecurities because you know how we all love happy Danish :) well done – i really loved it.
I really enjoyed this chapter, and I’m left longing for more. Dana and Alice have needed this conversation for a long time now. They’ve finally had it, but there are no answers … yet.It’s great that you are so happy, but don’t worry, you can still write the hell out of some angst! lol
wow aint that the truth cd
I love this story! Thanks for writing. I’m a little confused about the “cousin” though… Julie is Alice’s sister, right? ans Emily is Julie’s daughter? then, shouldn’t Emily be Alice’s niece?
oh alice…love is enough…its always enough…*sigh* post more soon please
Sugar, you are the amazing one. I think you’ve shown you’re capable of writing angst no matter what mood you’re in. I must admit I do like to challenge you, lol. I liked how Dana kissed Alice out of habit. I don’t know why it was the first thing I wanted to comment on, except for maybe the fact that I’ve been obsessed with kissing lately. I like the conversation between Vic and Dana… maybe Dana could learn something by taking things slow. So what does Gena do with her tongue that makes Vic crazy… maybe you could describe it or demonstrate, mmmm. I like the storyline with Emily… I can’t wait to see where you go with it. Maybe Dana will get involved somehow or is that my own wishful thinking? I love Vic’s comment about sitting in between some random girl’s legs, lol. You always have the ability to make me laugh sugar… and it’s a definite turn on. You write the angst well sugar… you have me all tied in knots with Alice and Dana. I hate to see those two at odds with each other. I hope they find there way through and find more then the common bond of love. It’s obvious that they love each other but I can see how it might not work out. The things that they’ve both been through are good cause since it’s really easy for them throw the past into each other’s faces. It makes me feel so sad. Can you see all the emotions you are capable of making me feel? You tie me in knots, sugar…. but if I am I want to be tied to you. I can’t wait for the next chapter. I love you and am counting down the days.
Such a great update! Intense and somewhat sad. The long dreaded (at least for me) but much needed conversation, like everybody else already said, you nailed it! You could just feel all the pain they gone through in the past months in it. It won’t resolve everything in one time….but it cleared the air. And that’s a start. It’s up to them (well it’s up to you :P) where they will take their relationship from here. And yay, you brought Emily back to the story! I loved the interaction between Dana and Emily (erm…actually I loved the effect it had on Alice).
Wow… what to say that hasn’t been said. Dunno, you’re just amazing and you always leave me wanting more of this story. I figure they still have a long way to go and I would say I hope you’re not this happy when you continue the convo between them but that’s mean… and it’s really not the case because you nailed this one even being happy. :) The eay you describe Alice’s looks is so cute, btw. Post soon, pretty please!
Once again, an amazing update – how do you do it? Just make sure you keep on doing it – and often.
God yes.. when you find true love it IS enough [ im in love! yay ]. Danish life is so painful right now it literaly hurts me to read it. They need to talk, talk and talk some more until they both find what they have been searching for all along.. and thats each other right? Great story, post soon. Thanks.
I can understand it was difficult to write but man you nailed it! The emotions were just on. I liked the kissing out of habit that says so much. Hope you update this story real soon because I cannot wait what you have in store for these girls. Keep it up!!
I hope that love will be enough for alice and dana in the end I love the way you write this it gets better and better please post soon great update
Thanks for the great chapter ClosetDana =)
Yes, I do realize that you’re not actually a part of the story, but you do control how much of the story we get to read … therefore taking the attention off of you by making Dana the scapegoat. See it all makes sense in my head. At any rate … I loved this chapter and all the little things & details that made it wonderful. Keep up the fabulous writing & please update soon.
This is great! On the edge of my seat!….literally!!!