Maybe a part of me wanted to watch her suffer. Eventually this was my downfall and I was let go. After spending years looking for the black rose and finding nothing, I left it all behind and moved away. I traveled to most secluded areas in the world.

I lived on the beaches, the forests, the mountains. And it was in one of those mountains that my life changed forever. I had fallen. The rocky mountain provided no cushion for the heavy fall I took and I ended out near the bottom with a broken leg.

There was so much blood. I was scared to die but at the same time I kind of wanted to. But then she found me. My queen.

She had so much strength and vigor, yet so much gentleness and tenderness. She snap my bone back in place and helped me to her cabin.

It was the very moment I had stopped being who I was, and became a completely different person.

Tina looked up from the page at Bette who was fidgeting nervously. Tina’s face expressed complete surprise.

"Wow," Tina said, "just…wow."

"It’s only a tentative chapter, I’m sure…"

"No, no," Tina said, "Bette this is amazing! Normally expository writing is a big no no. Can you tell me the definition of expository writing?"

"Yes," Bette said, "expository writing is when the author writes a whole background story as the first chapter before getting to the actual context of the story."

"Yes, and expository writing is not good," Tina said, "it’s always better to get those background details with conversations and actions, rather than just stating it. However, this chapter was such a mix of poetry that it didn’t seem like expository writing at all. It seemed more like a flashback organization. Like instead of started in chronological order, you started in the middle then flashed back to the beginning."

"Yes, I did it that way to capture my audience straight away," Bette explained.

"I don’t even need to know your reasoning, it was absolutely brilliant," Tina said with a broad smile, "but one thing. A lot of a story has to do with description. I noticed that have not described the ‘my queen’ character, nor have you described the narrator. It’s common to not know a name for a while because it’s in first person but we don’t even know the gender of the narrator."