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Breathe– Chapter 18
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Bette tapped lightly on the door frame of Captain Benson’s office. He looked up from a stack of case files and motioned for her to take a seat.
“That was a ***** of an interview Bette, one ***** of an interview,” he repeated, relief and pride evident in his voice.
Bette sat in the worn chair across from his desk and finally let the relief wash over her. She picked up a small ball of rubber bands and absentmindedly began to roll it in her hands.
“Thanks boss,” Bette finally responded relieved to have the interview behind them. “She was easy to work with,” Bette said smiling, baiting him for a response.
He laughed and agreed, “Yes, the two of you do seem to have a good working relationship.” He looked at Bette over the bifocals resting on the end of his nose. “Where is she now?”
“I have her with one of the sketch artists. Her memory isn’t real clear,” Bette explained “I’m sure she would recognize him like that,” she said with a snap of her fingers, “If she saw him again.”
“I’m just not confident she can proactively describe him with enough detail that he won’t look like everybody’s uncle, brother or troublesome neighbor. The false leads could drown us.” She paused, giving them both time to mull and fully absorb the impact of this information.
“I’m just not sure how productive it would be to release a questionable sketch to the media.” Bette stopped waiting for his reaction. Since she wasn’t sure her intentions were completely honorable, she knew she should carefully weigh his input.
“Well,” he began, “You’ve given yourself some cover. We had a packed house in the observation room, representatives from both the Mayor and Chief of Police as well as the usual suspects from the DA’s office,” he informed her.
Bette raised her eyebrows, wondering what the audience thought of the touches, smiles, and long looks she and Tina had exchanged so freely.
Captain Benson seemed to read her thoughts. “Don’t worry Bette, your connection was pretty obvious, but you were fairly discreet and they were impressed,” he said trying to offer her a little comfort.
“The simple fact is,” he continued “This case is a ticking time bomb and they know it. We need this guy off the street, and I think the politicos finally saw that you’re the detective that can make that happen.”
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go kick some ass detective Bette Porter!! lol.. the pace of this is just rite, awsome stuff sox!
Sox, thank you so much for this story, it is different, refreshing and very very interesting and intriguing. Please keep this story going for a long time, but please get the bastard before he causes harm to Bette or Tina.
Thank you again.
sox – really great dialogue as always – oh the guilt Bette is headed for – hope she gets help dealing with it.
Once again, great chapter! Please let Bette catch the jerk before he gets to Tina! Or anyone else for that matter. Keep up the great work! I’m looking forward to seeing some more sweet B&T moments. :)
Sox, great job as usual. I know you’re busy with a fundraiser this weekend. Thanks for still taking the time to write for us. Can’t wait for the other chapters!
Thank You Sox1 for another great one.
I finished reading #17 and then POOF #18 appears,you are AWESOME…THANKS FOR THAT TREAT…Great job on this chapter..Now on the DRAMA…..
This captain Benson is a very clever and wise man, I like him.
Yes, his advice is the best : to find this dangerous killer as soon as possible is the only way to really protect Tina.
Duty’s conscience against emotional fears, need to keep her mind clear and effective instead of panicking about the potential risks for her protégée… life isn’t easy for our brave detective Porter now !
Cheer up, Bette !
… and once more : congratulations, talented writer !
Enjoy your so deserved week-end – and thank you !
OMG! OMG! OMG! Great chaptet! I just hope that Tina remembers that she saw that guy on the dock near Bette’s place too. Man, oh man, oh man! I am sitting on the egde of my seat, waiting for what comes next next. This is a really good story!
Your story is so well written, it’s a real pleasure to read it. Thank you
Come on Porter, you can be strong and in love at the same time. Do your job, like you were taugh to do and you will see the light at the end of the tunnel. The LOVE GOD IS GIVING YOU A SECOND CHANGE. Take it and run.. Thanks
Yay 2 chapters i just got on and i saw that there were 2 and i couldnt wait ne longer and i just had to read them!! i love this story(but i think i’ve said that in jusy about every1 of my comments) its coming along really well and i cant wait for the next chapter post whenever u can!! cant wait!!!
UMM can I have another, see when you give us 2, you just make us need a bigger fix next time. So to give me a fix I have found a huge need to read books. I just spent yesterday at barnes and noble getting books.
I’m glad to say in 1 day I read postmortem and handcock park.
And I’m so ready for bette to use all these skillz I keep hearing about. Let the hunt start!!!
Sox, you are amazing. I can’t wait for the next chapter so start typing.
I got so excited when I saw two chapters posted. Ya got me. Hook, line and sinker. ;)
Time for bette to get to work and catch this killer that will be intrsting can’t wait ( Don’t sleep tonight lol)
yes. got home and heres another one. whats a little sleep when u have all of us giving u so much support and warm fuzzies. bette will be the shiznit. all over. and from chapt 17 comments. i dont want u to lick anything u dont want to. love my left hand. soon, if u can.
oh yay! two posts in a day! very nice! please keep on posting
This story is like reading a best selling novel. You’ve got me hooked!
WOW! this story is fantastic. Its a book that cant be put down! Cannot wait for the next round! oh did i mention the WOW factor??? great job sox
I hope Bette realizes that she is a target also and takes the necessary precautions. Or will you throw in some twists and turns along the way?
It’s so exciting to read this story Sox! Thanks.
That’s right Bette, look after Tina in EVERY way by catching this basterd. Oh and by the way does he have a new victim inline? Another great chapter please keep this up!
Yup it happened again. I log in and see that you’ve posted and BAM! my heart races! It weird…I’m not looking for your chapters but then I see ‘Breathe’ and I lose my breath! I get scared, anxious and excited all at the same time. Keep it up Sox!
I hope she gets him soon..but I am sure there will be so much more drama..thanks Sox
Sox, this is 1 helluva story. And yes, I waso engrossed that when I went to click “next post by this author,” my mouth dropped and all I could say was…whyyyyyy? LOL
I need another chapter so I can breathe again.
This story is truly captivating!
i love this story and have been awaiting your return . the weekend is over and no word(s) from u . hope all is well. pls continue soooooon!
Yes Bette go kick some ass and put the baster in jail!
In an earlier chapter; wasn’t there a mentioned that the killer likes to “hang around the crime scene”. Wouldn’t the press have pictures of the spectators? Would Tina have a chance to scan and see if she recognize “him”?
I hope Bette catches him before the he gets to the real estate lady.
Great story!
Good luck with your fund raiser thing on Sunday!
You should really consider trying to get this thing published, it’s that good!
This story is like an exceptionally fine wine, it’s depth and full character are developing with age. I am savoring every bit of it.
Happy to see that Capt. Benson was there with words of wisdom and support for Bette. He was able to get her centered without admonishment.
How will Bette manage to remain focused with Tina living with her? Tina’s insecurities and fear will surely tug at Bette’s heart. Will Tina listen to what Bette tells her to do so that she doesn’t put herself in any danger while Bette is tracking the killer. Will Tina eventually be used as the bait to draw out the killer? It’s a good thing I don’t bite my nails or I would surely not have any left by now!
I’m playing catch up, so I’ve just finished the last 4 chapters, and they’re just great. Sox, you’ve got me stuck on this story. It’s good to see that Bette is realizing that the best way to keep Tina safe is to keep focussed on her job. Going to love Bette’s progress in tracking down this sicko and making him pay. Anxiously awaiting.
Sox you have an amazing talent of sucking the reader in and making them feel that they are in the story…i love it…and your chapters from the killers pov are great…always love to see both sides…keep them coming…maybe put it in book form??…the way you have connected these two in so short a time and made it real…i am almost speechless as you can see …lol…can’t wait for the next installment.
Two very good chapters indeed …
I agree that it is time Bette gets back to work but in the meantime, we are Sunday evening and the week-end is not over for our 2 love birds I hope ?
They will come back to Bette’s place and given the intensity of their feelings (and also the toughness of the interview), I do believe they have to reconnect before their ‘feet back down on the ground’.
Especially since Monday morning will see the strong Bette Porter in action and probably not as available as she would like to be for Tina.
Thanks again and I hope you had a nice w-e.