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Breathe– Chapter 16
Bette crossed to her desk. Pausing to gather her thoughts she picked up a notebook and stood in front of the interview door. Leaning closely she was met by absolute silence.
After knocking, Bette entered to find Detectives Bodner and Graham leaning against one wall their arms folded tightly across their chest.
Bette nodded and then turned her attention to Tina whose face was streaked with tears. Her arms were pulled awkwardly behind her and Bette suddenly realized her hands were bound by cuffs.
She looked at the two detectives. “You’re ***** kidding me,” she said as she dropped her pad on the table and crossed to the two men while holding out her hand.
They both stood as still as statues until she shook her hand again and snapped her fingers. Finally, Detective Graham fished a small silver key out of his pocket and placed it in Bette’s outstretched palm.
She didn’t even try to mask her contempt as she took the key and gave them one more disapproving look. Moving to Tina, she leaned down seizing this natural opportunity to be close and offer comfort.
Taking more time to undo the handcuffs than necessary, she let her hands linger on Tina’s, reassuring her through this simple touch. She dropped the cuffs on the table and finally looked down into Tina’s troubled face.
Their eyes met and as Tina rubbed her wrists, Bette saw the hard line of her jaw relax. Although she seemed relieved, Bette could still see all the pain, all the fear, all the confusion etched in Tina’s dull and tired eyes.
Resisting the urge to pull her close, Bette simply said “Hey,” as she stood quietly over Tina with a hand resting lightly on her shoulder.
“Hey,” Tina responded looking up.
Both women heard the blast of air that escaped Detective Bodner who threw up his arms and said, “It’s a miracle, she speaks.”
They ignored his comment, their eyes needing to provide the security and comfort their bodies could not.
Bette kneeled down and moving her hand to rest lightly on Tina’s thigh asked “What’s going on Tina?”
Bette could see the flash of anger when Tina finally took her eyes from Bette’s and looked in the direction of the two detectives.
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(65 votes, average: 4.06 out of 5)
I totally got that Bette had no intentions of agreeing to move Tina out. She knows how much Tina needs her right now so it didn’t surprise me that Bette didn’t acknowledge that part of the statement. Another excellent chapter.
Great chapter! I love this story!
Sox thanks again for another page turner. I still can’t get enough. Yes I got your meaning about where Tina would go and it’s funny but in my head I did ghave Bette telling her captain that it was none of his damn business. Thanks for the vivid pictures you draw as you put this together.
I got the “You have my word I’ll do my job,” comment. And I thought it was great that you let Bette’s decision unspoken. smooth.
This chapter was great, I felt like I was there with them, and I got the same feeling of satisfaction when Bette learned that Tina had seen him, and then the same feeling of dread.
Well done, as usual.
xxx
SOX I too understood what you implied at the end of the last chapter.
You’re a really good writer! Whenever I see your post my heart races…I get kinda anxious!
Sox, i too so got it about her doing her job and not moving Tina out – it was pretty clear. I know i’ve said this before, but i LOVE this story. When i get home from work – the first thing i do is check to see if you’ve posted and much to my relief you have … looking forward to the next installment.
Sox,
Was that a little ole complement for me? Why thank you kindly. I just write it as I see it.
Yet again I am blown away with your skillful and dexterous plotting and pacing.
You are a true artist with a monitor and keyboard in place of a canvas and brushes. Words are your paints as every sentence is a brush stroke; giving away fine details and nuances that build up the layers that become the whole picture. This make your story a true work of genius.
It has some many levels that demand the reader attention. It never succumbs to the easy option but maintains intelligent reasoning and rationale.
I know that this is a state of mind so am not surprised that you deal with everything in your life in this way.
The magical mystery has me wanting more every time I read another chapter,
Please post when ever you can and know that I will be watching for it. You make my day richer with such articulate and intellectual prose.
Thank you.
Your Loyal Fan.
PS – Yes, I am known to be sesquipedalian.
Wow I love this dtory you are and excellent writer.. I was on the edge of my seat readig… I hope Bette can and WILL keep Tina safe.. Post soon.. Can’t wait for the next chapter…
Absolutley terrific. This is the BEST story. Can’t wait for the next.
im sneaking reading this at work. i dont really have any words for this. im truly sitting here holding my breath as she takes tina on this journey. so happy that bette is doing what she knows is right, little touches for tina. makes your heart melt. awesome.
This is a really fabulous story, I can’t get enough! Keep them coming, and don’t worry about long chapters….with a story like this the longer the better!
Great update. You’ve gotten me so hooked on this. Hopefully Bette will use her head when it comes to protecting Tina and not her heart, they could both get hurt. So looking forward to your next update.
Another great chapter. I wonder; when will Tina realise that the guy at the boat is the bad guy? The interaction between Bette and Tina in the interview is excellent. Tina showed her strength when refusing to speak to Oliver & Hardy – she’ll be good for Bette. Being a cop changes people it takes them away from everyone who isn’t another cop. Being a homicide cop is a thousand times worse and they don’t even know they are getting damaged until they wake up one morning realising they have protected themselves at the expense of their own humanity. Bette has had nobody while she has been a cop, Tina is her salvation.
Fucking awesome!!!
I’m glad you are addicted just as much as I am. I crave your story.
Tina saw him twice so she will have a good description to give, and maybe the coffe shop has cameras.
Sox, I can’t get enough of this story! It’s the first thing that I look for when I log on each day. Your writing is truly impressive and full promise. I can picture everything that I am reading. Thank you for your long chapters and your rapid posts! Can’t wait for the next one
This is such an amazing story. I don’t whether anyone else has mentioned that you should try and find a publisher, or perhaps turn it into a screenplay.
i SOOOOOO LOVE this story..It is absolutely FABULOUS….Bette knows she is in danger…I am waiting patiently for your next CHAPTER…PLEASE LET IT BE SOON…..
Bette has a job to do … and you are doing yours the best way it can be done !
Interaction between B&T is great and so real. This chapter is amazing.
Excellent chapter as usual. This story is amazing. I certainly appreciate your willingness to give up sleep to bring us this wonderful story. Thanks!
Bette did the job she had to do and protected tina you go MISS PORTER!!!!!!!! great post I am so glad your not sleeping because i get a new post when you don’t sleep. Stay up all night tonight lol!!!!!
This story has me so captivated
What a compelling story, so intense and so real…
I was also closing my eyes in a way, reading this powerful slow-race chapter as if lines were printed on a screen with a motion picture behind.
I could truly SEE this interview room as if I was sit at this table, and FEEL all the inward emotions so beautifully expressed in every little details here.
The way the killer’s face slowly came back in Tina’s blured memory made me think about this famous scene in Hitchcock’s The Wrong Man, when one see the true killer walking superimposed on Henry Fonda’s face until his own face became a close-up and fully superimposed Fonda’s one.
You created the same mentally visual processus here, as well as a great work of slow discoveries for both Bette and us all along this amazing chapter.
What a joy to read such quality writing !! Have I already say how talented you are ?? Anyway, I say it again – and always from the most sincere bottom of my heart.
Thank you so much !!
This again is amazing…each twist and turn has me wanting more..the suspense is addictive!!!..MORE MORE…
I could just sit and read your story all night long. It is such a great story and everyday I hope there is a post. thank you
Sox – you are a creative goddess – each scene with dialogue and description is so vivid and alive. I feel as if I am there. Thank you for sharing this with us and for posting so quickly. If IC had a brain in her head and reads this stuff she would hire you on the spot. You go girl – I’m with you 100%. ~bfan
Woo hoo, keep the chapters coming. I can’t get enough of the story and the little bits of Seattle contained therein.
Fecking brilliant story Sox. Love it .
Wow.
Damn fine storytelling! Please keep it going!
you’re the best Sox!!!! i’m always looking at the board to see if you had already posted….keep us all hooookkkkeeeedddd!
Wow, great drama here! Loving this story, and very glad you are able to update regularly.
wow great as always and i forgot yesterday to say thank u for answering my question!! cant wait for more post soon!!
You…YOU need a 12-step program? I’m right there with you. Hell, I’m working from home this week. Yeah, that has consisted of continually refreshing the fanfic site in hopes of seeing another chapter. I’m jonesing like you wouldn’t believe.
Tell your hubby I’m on my way to Seattle if that’s what it’s going to take to get these wonderful chapters cranked out! Just remind him…he can look, but no touching. I do have a reputation to protect (such as it is).
Now for the real stuff. Each time I read one of your chapters the world falls away and everything else ceases to exist but your page on my computer screen. The quiet way that you lead us through such a difficult experience fraught with such emotion is magnificant. Even though this is a subject and profession that I have no personal knowledge about, I never feel that I don’t understand. If anything, it makes me thirst to learn more.
Both of these woman have been adrift for too long without an anchor. They are each other’s safe harbor. While each has her own strengths, they are bringing out and building new ones that will help each of them as they move forward…together.
*whispering to someone that passes by…”hey, gotta new Sox1 story? I’ll trade you my cat for it”* Yeah, I’ve got it bad.
I think they should just go ahead and violate the hell out of that attorney/detective client privilege thing, or whatever keeps them from engaging in improprietous behaviour.
Have at it girls, before the killer eliminates your chances.
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Sox, this is Technequa – Pleae don’t make this one of them stories where the girl dies in the hero’s arms before he can save her (Chinatown, Blowout).
I hate it when it’s like that.
Okay, do what you like. I just hope they can steal away for a minute and do the wild thang, one good time.
Thank you.
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Now, back to the story…
Sox in my book I would say that you woud win the award for best mystery in fan fiction.Keep up the good work.
Sox – Another brilliant addition to our story. Thanks so much for sharing your time and talent with us. You are a magnificant storyteller.
Hey Sox1! Ditto to everyone’s comments…I know what you mean about sleep—I haven’t been to bed since 3 a.m. in months due to my addiction to reading FF! Thanks for sacraficing for us–keep up the amazing work. You have a gift! (P.S. I hope sox 1 doesn’t mean Boston—I’m a huge Yankee fan—at any rate, I won’t hold it against you because I LOVE LOVE LOVE reading your story.
This is going to get scary – that guy will come back for and now Bette too. I love the way you write all the tender connections between them. But I have a feeling Tina is stronger than we think.
(I use to plan special events for 18 years so I understand..)
Wow, that was intense! I’m all creeped out too!! Good luck with your event!
keep tina and bette safe… maybe bette can get tina to remember waht this bastard looks like… love your story… oh and the dog… please keep him with tina at all times…
maybe tina will remember that bastard was in the boat the day before
This is so good and glad Tina saw him, now Bette can go and get that baster!
It’s not too long! It’s not too long. Great story. I love how you have Bette doing her job but protecting Tina as well.
Thanks!
Want to comment so you keep going but don’t know what to add to all your accolades.
This story is really good. I’m not a mystery genre lover, but I love Bette and Tina and this tale. Hats off to you–this is well written.
great chapter…love it!
Does anyone else get “in trouble” like I do for coming home and going straight to the computer to catch up on this saga? This by far my favorite story in fan fiction.
Sox1 you are an awesome author and the rest of us wait on the edge of our seats for your next post. Sorry you’re missing out on sleep. I appreciate it and miss out on mine to read your story.
Sox, not sure that I can say anything that hasn’t already been said. Your talent is much appreciated. A simple Thank You will have to do as I have no other words. Superb!
that was a great chapter….uh oh bette…tina saw the guy…she might need saving and it’s time her shining cop in power suits comes to save her