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To Live Without You (Chapter 12)
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Only ten minutes into the trip they were already lost and Alice was getting frustrated,
"Damn construction, is it so hard to give a fucking detour?" Dana rolled her eyes and began fishing around Alice’s glove compartment,
"Where is your map Al?" The writer looked at the athlete and smiled,
"Map?" Dana nodded still looking, under the seat, behind the seat. Dana’s ass was hitting Alice in the face, and not in a good way
"You have a map Al, everyone has a map," Alice chuckled when Dana gave up trying to find it.
"Why would I have a map of West Hollywood? I lived here my whole life Dane," the athlete scoffed flipping the overhead mirror down halfheartedly hoping she’d find what she was looking for.
"Well apparently that wasn’t long enough…take North Oxford to Serrano that will take you to the 101." Dana gestured wildly as Alice passed the street,
"Why would I take North Oxford when Santa Monica will take me right to the 101 Dana?…See we don’t need a map." The athlete nodded in agreement,
"You’re absolutely right, Santa Monica would take you to the 101….if the exit wasn’t closed for construction." Dana grinned as Alice pumped her brakes for the rather large orange construction sign she should have seen a mile back. The writer huffed, pulling the small blue car around into a rather dangerous U-turn in the middle of the street, Dana’s head bobbed as she gloated silently.
"Laugh it up Fairbanks it won’t be so funny when you’re walking," Dana stopped grinning but mumbled under her breath,
"The way this car is sputtering, we’re both going to be walking."
Once they’d hit the 101 it was pretty much a straight shot to San Diego, which meant the conversation needed to begin. Dana sat with her head resting back, staring at the ceiling, Alice kept looking over hoping it would inspire Dana to snap out of it and talk to her.
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Whoa…it just keeps getting better and better, lovin’ it! Hope my girl’s can work it out and yeah, c’mon who doens’t love them having sex….and more sex and more…ah, yeah…u get the pic. Cheers!!
Love the update. Please post again soon!
What can I say… still laughing my ass off about the raccoon. I love that you can make me feel so many things with your story….especially frustrated. I liked Dana’s comparison of her parents to Emily’s… like reliving a nightmare,lol. When I read that Dana and Alice crawled into the backseat… I was saying “goody”. But why did it all have to stop and Shane’s timing couldn’t be worse!! Damn.. you leave me hanging. What are you going to do to me next…um, I mean Dana and Alice. I’ll be waiting patiently… yeah, right. Don’t disappoint me or I won’t comment anymore.j/k of course. Fantastic chapter, my dear… post soon.
I just wanted to post that I’m really enjoying this story & can’t wait for your next update. Like the other have said … you have a great way of creating so many different emotions & you do it quite well.
I was wondering which car-scene you would like me to comment on. The one where they were actually driving, or the one where Alice was riding something…but not the car. :P (Mmh, not sure, if this one translates as well in English as it does in my language.) I thought the car scene with the quarrel over the map was a funny one. I can totally see myself being a smartass like Dana, silenty gloating because I know I am right in the end. :D The other car-scene, well that was really nice, very original. Never mind my ‘request’ on a little action in the restroom. This was way better! I loved the interaction between Dana and Alice’s niece. She can come and stay with auntie Al in the near future and get some tennis lessons from Dana. And if it takes smashed racoons to divert us – and apparently Alice and Dana too -from the break-up it’s fine by me. (For the record, I don’t mind you’re putting it into this story, your version will have more depth than the one we all know right now.)
whoa shit fuck and damn
Great Chapter. My heart is already aching for Cliff. I’m glad Dana finally mentioned her call to Alice.
Another great update! I feel sorry for cliff, he seems like a great guy but Alice and Dana are ment to be! Once he knows that it will be ok. Loved the Danish scenes, they were cute and meaningfull. Looking forward to the next update.
Great update! Ah I want to know what happens! You always end it in the heat of the moment. I guess its a good way to keep us coming back. I can’t wait to find out what happens next. Hopefully they are closer to happiness. Poor Cliff but eh, Dana and Alice belong together. Fabulous, can’t wait for the next! You’re amazing!
There is going to be so much heartbreak for someone but who will it be please post soon as I am on the edge of my seat can’t wait to see what happens next great post I love it
oh god whats with the cliffhanger ? ? ? ? please post soon and PLEASE get danish back togetherpleasefor me :)anyway great story please post soon :) x