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Tina, Tiny Pieces Chapter 16, Part 2
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Sunday morning, 3:30 a.m., Alice’s
So …
Alice looks at me expectantly. I can tell that against her better judgment, she’s interested in the events of the last several hours. Meanwhile, because I am beginning to experience small but violent bursts of clarity — a sad sign that the wine is wearing off — I find myself reluctant to continue. I begin to think I should just skip to the end.
So … um … things didn’t go so well after that.
She sneers at me sarcastically.
Because up until then, they were just humming along??
No – I mean, well, we – just, we – I mean
She sets her coffee cup down and looks at me.
Excuse me, Tina, but I’m not the one that came over here crying and interrupting what could have been a really good date – no, was a really good date –
I said I was sorry, Alice. I am sorry.
Yeah, I know you are. With any luck, I’ll get another chance. But if you think that I’m gonna buy some “well, things didn’t go so hot” and then what? You pass out on my couch and I go night-night and everything’s cool – you’re wrong.
I start to protest but there is no point. 3:30 a.m. or not, ruined evening notwithstanding, she is still Alice and I’ve sucked her in this far and she will not be dissuaded until the story reaches its end.
I –
So Henry left. Where was Bette?
Outside.
Her eyes widen yet again, she gasps, her mouth a perfect, horror-struck “O.”
Holy shit! Bette followed Henry outside??
No … she was in the back yard. Henry went out the front door.
So … you like followed her outside, right?
Yeah. No.
Well which one – yes or no?
I was going to. But then the phone rang.
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I stood in the living room a moment, trying to slow my breathing, my ears still humming from the thunderous slam of the front door. I looked up, ready to begin my apology for Henry’s arrival, and she wasn’t there. I scanned the room quickly, my eyes resting again on the discolored patches, and then I took a few tentative steps toward the kitchen. I saw the patio door open. Relief flooded me and I exhaled heavily. She was still here.
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Wow. That was some drama. Can’t wait till the next chapter. Poor Alice.
Sad, so sad and tragic! I loved your comments….baseball…hmmm…started out loving it…it let ya down… and ended up hating it…then finding something else to love related to it instead…so insightful in an sublime sort of way..Lastkid, I think you are brillant! I still think Tina’s gettin a bad wrap, but I followed all of your previous stories, so I know kinda how you “feel” about Tina..so I am beginning to “understand” how you write her…I just wanna say..I love your layers!!!! You are great to read!!
Love it. Love what’s Tina’s feeling, and her apparently failed attempts… LOVE angry Bette… Great, as always.
Kid..your writing continually amazes me. It makes me feel so much. OH…I only like baseball, if I’m at the game with a hotdog and beer. post soon
I love it! Each word of this chapter. Now I found I’m moving on too. I didn’t feel sad seeing Tina suffering or whatever. I feel like I could live without here too. BTW, were you talking about baseball or Tina in your notes?
Jesus! I freaking LOVVVVEEEE ITTT Especially these precious little words “Get the fuck out of my house, you lousy lying cunt.” I have come to the conslusion that Tina loves abuse in fact it probably makes her feel better about herself. She is such a punk Biatch! Why can’t she be honest for once?!?! How quickly I forget that this is tina, who does not the ability to tell the truth. Why does she insist on making Bette’s life a living hell with her bullshit. You know what Henry and Tina deserve each other, a match made in Hell! Post soon!
again another superb update and i loved reading ur note. but i cannot figure why they dont have civilised conversation. what is it about each others’ presence that blocks their senses? with tina choking up every time and bette being SO nasty, cannot imagine the direction they’d go next.
Has Tina finally pissed off even Alice? I don’t see where she is getting a bad rap. She left her wife for a man and a legal marriage. Threatened to and did take their daughter away. Tonight she shows up drunk demands Bette’s attention and essentially lies to her as to why she’s there. Its scary that this woman is entrusted with the care of another life. She took advantage of Bette’s underlying love for her, anyone else would have been at the gas station. Then she runs to Alice, missing up her evening plans, Tina is selfish and self absorbed, only her world matters, not Henry’s, Bette’s or Alice’s. Please write again soon. I am a fan of the love that was between Tina and Bette it will be a coup if you can get them back to that relationship.
I can’t help but to be amazed at your writing. Amazed. I hate the way Tina is portrayed but I read because I think you are truly talented and I enjoy your writing. Keep them coming…I’m hooked.
your writing style is overwhelming, I can literally feel the tension, sorrow, despair, and remorse floating in the room… I feel bad for both of them and hope that they will in the end be able to find what belongs uniquely to both of them, eachother.Love your chapters!
Yes, I think “Get the fuck out of my house, you lousy lying cunt” trumps “spineless piece of shit”. And again, it may be a lapse in etiquette, but Bette does have some reason for feeling the way she does. I’m not sure who I feel sorrier for, Bette or Alice, both having been victimized by Tina in one fateful evening.
I can’t believe, she threw up! Well there at least. I thought she was when Bette was calling her spineless! I wish Alice would be able to talk some sense into Tina, so Bette is able to see the baby. Just hearing about the room brought me to tears again! Can’t wait for more!
Love love love this story.
i agree tina’s life is one giant bad idea, ic’s bad idea. but you manage to spin it to create a truely sad and tragic story something the creators lack the talent to do. bravo!
Bottom line…I really like this story. I look forward to future chapters.
LK…you’re brilliant. That baseball riff was amazing. You must be a wonderful conversationalist…quick-witted, clever and funny as hell. We are so lucky to have you writing for us.
jeez freakin dramatic!!
That was great! Can’t wait to read the next one.
damn, you made me cry again…is there an end to the agony? you know how i know that your writing is brilliant? i’m afraid to click on every chapter you post because i know i’ll either cry or swear or scream…and still i come back and read
What intense dramatics! Loved Bette in this chapter. I’d like to see her play Tina a little more. Looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for writing!
oh lasty, you’ve done it again..I was howling with the baseball stuff..GO MARINERS..and then plummeted to the depths of Tina’s psychosis. I absolutely believe she is not telling Alice the whole truth, and I actually expected Bette to hit her, which she has every right to do. tina always goes to Alice because Alice lets her, so that Tina can continue to be the poor victim, and Bette the villain. I have said before that if I were Bette, I would be done with Alice, she is no real friend to Bette. Your writing is beyond amazing, and I wanna be your best friend..I would love to know you!! Is a certain mountaintop EVER gonna be revisited? With this one though its time for the agony to end. Tina is making no move to try to get herself together and her @#$$# can go on forever. She has hurt Bette enough!!! It is also true that there is no way she should have the care of a baby, and whether or not she loves Angelica isn’t the issue.
Truth. Tina balks at its very existence. She avoids the truth at every opportuity, opting instead to live her life and tell her story to Alice via half-truths and the sin of omission —- Tina’s need to control things is once again evident when she insists that they talk inside, annoying Bette to the point that she finally gives in…..Tina’s entreaties to Alice whether or not she deserved Bette’s ire is another example of how Tina cares about what people think of her, how important it is that she is seen in a favorable light, regardless of her own culpability in the resulting consequences of her actions……Tina is only interested in the truth when it implicates someone else —- Tina toying with Bette, telling her that she should be grateful, dangling the promise of something important regarding Angelica in front of Bette and her baiting of Bette is Tina at her passive/aggressive best. Lunge, parry, riposte she is adept at emotional sword play, cutting to the quick instantaneously barely leaving a mark, but inflicting deep wounds —- Tina’s indignation that Bette was not pining away for her, or wallowing in visible misery for her was the last straw for Tina. Tina is angry that Bette isn’t playing by the rules that Tina invisioned, she was not able to see Bette devastated, on the floor so she lashes out even more. If she truly knew Bette, she would know that Bette has never been one for public displays of pain or hurt. She may be passionate about them, yelling and hurling objects – but always in private. Why would her why would her grief over the resulting carnage of the demise of their relationship and the Tina’s denunciation of Bette as Angelica’s mother be any different? —- Tina continues to exacerbate her interactions with Bette continually feeding the fires of chaos, anger and resentment because Tina is subconsciously punishing herself. It’s a form of self-flagellation, her skewed version of penance for all of the poor decisions she has made that has created the catastrophe that is her current life………….Bette was the paragon of civility compared to what could have transpired. Holding Tina’s feet to the fire and trying to force her into actually talking about why she was really there was exactly what Tina needed to see, that Bette was not going to be played so easily. Unfortunately, Tina will always have Angelica and the possibility of her reintroduction into Bette’s life as her trump card. Bette knows when to stand her ground and when it is best to acquiesce. Bette’s use of the truth was not what Tina wanted to hear and she finally played her trump card by fully disclosing her true feelings about Tina when she entered Angelica’s room. Some pain is not meant for anyone other than the one that is suffering. Tina is fortunate that Bette didn’t say more…..The embers of Bette’s anger has now been fanned into a full flame…..But will Tina be smart enough to realize that it’s time to for her to stop walking over the coals as an act of reparation and that unless she fully acknowledges her part in the Gordian Knot that they have created, she will never be far from the fire or able to make amends —- Alice was funny, always about the details and keeping Tina on track, but even her patience is wearing thin. Alice isn’t stupid, she knows that Tina is not being completely honest, she knows Tina better than Tina does herself……..Great chapter, as always……as for those cashew thingsy in the Baseball Nut, are those even real? You may want to send a sample to Stephen Hawking, he might be able to help. You’re batting a 1000 with this story Kid. Another one out of the park!
How do you top “spineless piece of shit,” anyway? That’s easy. You top it with “you lousy lying cunt!†Although Bette was as torn as Tina, this was her at her best; not allowing Tina, Henry, or the life they once had, get in the way of clear logical thinking. Tina on the other hand couldn’t put together one cohesive thought. Tina’s little sojourn to the wrong door got her exactly what she deserved to get. Personally, I will not start to feel sorry for Tina UNTIL she stops feeling sorry for herself. The one I feel sorry for in this chapter is Alice. If you bust up my life at 3:30 in the damn morning, you have to have one hell of a GREAT reason for doing so. Thus far, Tina sat there and said a lot of nothing. Anyway Kid, I hope you keep portraying Bette as a woman who will continually grow stronger each day and finds real happiness with someone *cough* Helena *cough cough* that ALSO believes in forever. I want Bette to look back and say, “Meg Who?â€
You’re shaking my fundaments with this one luv. I loved it from the A till the Z. Thanks!
almost caught up kid. damn this is great. your killing me as always. but your writing and thougths a great. thanks.
Sorry – the dog was squawking at me. Beautifully written as ever.
For some reason this cracked me up:”I mean, it’s a good story so far but all I’m getting is you come in, Henry comes in, Henry goes out, Bette goes out, now you’re both going back in.”I feel sorry for Tina. So weak and so angry. Beuatifully writen as ever.
Oh i love a bit of angst. do you feel like a pupeteer with Bette & Tina dangling on strings – at your every whim – just wondered! love it! thanks – & more angst please!
My goodness Tina just goes from bad to worse. Has she hit bottom yet? Your writing of this scene is so skilled and sharp, it kept me riveted from beginning to end. Thanks for this amazing story.
There’s a lot Tina’s not telling Alice – a lot that really did happen. I have to wonder whether Bette really said those vile statements to Tina – and she’s drunk enough to make things up to suit her needs.
So, are you trying to tell us that Bette needs some Baseball Nut until she becomes a fan again? Or, am I just hearing that when I play the record backwards? I love baseball. I once had a cat named Fenway. He is gone now and I don’t live in Boston anymore which sometimes makes me sad. Now living in the Bay Area I try to support the Giants but it just isn’t the same. Worse still, I have begun to question my character while I secretly hope Bonds breaks Ruth’s record, even though I suspect he has not been completely forthcoming about is dietary supplements. Anyway, this was a great chapter, as always, and I particularly loved Bette’s voice. I will say that even though I have enjoyed seeing Tina wallow in her deep, dark hole, I am ready for her to come out now so she can take Bette to Baskin and Robbins on their way to a doubleheader.
This has to be one of the best stories on this site. As much as I love Bette and Tina, I am loving the steely facade of Bette and the wonderful insults she is hurling at Tina. I think Tina needs a session with Dr. Phil and Oprah. She is really fucked up. She is beyond belief and reproach with continued willingness to lay blame at everyone elses feet and not hers. It is never the full truth, its never her fault, its always a half-truth. Let the drama continue! And dump and divorce frecle-back Henry, get some serious help from Dr. Phil or try Bette’s approach in S3, go and seriously sweep Bette off her feet and start rebuilding her life with Bette and Angelica.
That was truly painful, and truly brilliant. I don’t know why Tina couldn’t just say, “I was a total douchebag for taking away Angelica. Whether you forgive me or not it doesn’t matter. You’re her mother too and should raise our daughter as well.” I didn’t cry over this chapter, but I busted up laughing at Tina throwing up. LOL Man moments like that really suck. And I hate baseball. I hate that it always seems to delay my TV shows by at least an hour.
I so love this story. WOW!!!! Why does Tina always go to Alice? Bette was just great. Thank you for the time you put into your story.
I agree with JFreez. I also fill bad for both of them. In no way am I defending Tina’s actions but Bette calling Tina a “…cunt” really makes me sad. I guess I am one of the few that believe they belong together and would like to see them work it out and get back together…call me a romantic.