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In Too Deep Ch. 4
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“I’m out! I can’t do this! I’m out!”
Dana looked at Carmen. “You’re not being serious are you?”
“Does it look like I’m kidding?” Bette stood up from her chair.
“Calm down Carmen, take a seat.” Helena watched her partner take a breath and sit next to her. “I’m sorry for what happened to you last night, but it’s a part of your job.”
“Being fuckin’ raped by a psychotic is not part of my job.” Helena touched Carmen’s arm, and Carmen sighed heavily.
“Morales—you did what you had to do. You couldn’t blow your cover.” Dana crossed her arms as she leaned against Bette’s desk. “C’mon, it wasn’t that bad.” Carmen stood up and stood in Dana’s face.
“Were you ever humiliated before in your life that you couldn’t like at yourself in the mirror?”
“Well I’ve never been raped.” Dana smirked.
“You fuckin’ bitch,” Carmen went to hit Dana, but Helena stopped her.
“Now hold on a god damn minute,” Bette walked around her desk. “Fairbanks, you were way out of order with that one.” Dana held her hands up.
“I’m sorry, but I’m telling the truth. C’mon Morales—you’ve had worst things happen to you.”
“What are you talking about?”
“You know exactly what I’m talking about—abusive, alcoholic father who was the biggest drug lord in the 80s. A mother that was a whore who never was around, but your brothers kept an watchful eye on you.”
“That is enough Fairbanks.” Bette pointed her index finger at her. “You need to back off and let them do their jobs.”
“Remember this Morales—I know you more than you know yourself.” Dana walked out of the office and slammed the door. Helena pulled away from Carmen, and Carmen fixed her jacket. She sat back down in her chair and raked her fingers through her hair.
“She didn’t have the fuckin’ right to say any of that to me.” Bette put her hands on her hip.
“I understand Carmen, I’ll take care of her, but we need you two to get back in there and do your job. I know it’s hard, but please I’m begging you to do this for me. I can’t trust anyone else in this precinct than you two.”
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I’m caught up now. So Dana is dealing to Jenny. Verrrrrrrry interesting. The scene with the guns reminded me a bit of “Face/Off” when everyone was pointing a gun at someone in that church. PPS!
I’ve got 2 words….time line. It feels like Carmen and Helena just got here 2 days ago and already they’re taking over half the business. Story is hot, don’t get me wrong but some things are just a bit off. Shane doesn’t open up that quickly….but I guess with Carmen, anything is possible :p But I hope you don’t feel rushed. Cuz I mean, Carmen got raped by Shane(it was hot :p) and now she’s jumping back into her bed with glee. Okay, time for the smelly stuff to hit the fan lmao. Alice wanted to chop Helena to pieces. Now, they’re all over each other. I feel like she’s that way cuz she hasn’t gotten laid in a long while. Jenny on coke and Shane is pissed? Or Jenny on coke from Dana? I’m lost. Is Jenny some inside-man or what? Why is she paying for coke anyway? That should come with the job no? I mean, she gets paid and can get a tub of snow for her bonus. Okay I’m rambling. I have a feeling…Carmen enjoyed her previous time with Shane…cuz she doesn’t seem pissed enough about it. But now that Carmen has Shane by the proverbial nut-sack, well…Shane’s brain is already out the window. Okay, okay, okay….great update. I’m a bit antsy but eh…time line please? Oh, does Jenny know that Carmen and Helena work for Dana…or wait has Jenny been working on Shane as a cop, the whole time…from way back then?
hey ACB! great update! but i do agree with TMAJO… its not that its totally confsing or anything its just that it’ll be even more better… anyway, i still love ur story and would read it anyway you’d write it… so keep it up! PPS!
Oh no, please don’t be sorry about the rape scene on my (or anyone else’s) account. It’s your story and you stayed true to your vision. You’ve stayed true to the characters you’ve created and, of course, their actions prove it. You don’t have to apologize for any of it. Right now, even though I find much of Shane’s actions repulsive (it’s just a normal reaction of mine), I still understand why she’s doing it. And if the beginning of the story starts out with Shane acting like a completely ruthless drug lord, then I’ll believe it wholeheartedly. In fact, you’ve done such a good job with the characters that it’s hard not to take them and their actions seriously, as far as the story is concerned. Okay, sorry about the rant. Sorry. I’m gonna read the story now. And thanks for answering my question. (I’ll be back with thoughts on this update once I read it. Hah! And you thought my rant was over. Not even close, ’cause I’m a total windbag.)
Ok what the hell is going on here, what the hell is Dana doing dealing drug with Jenny, damn this is bad and drama coming. Ok post soon please, thanks!
ACB, You are a twisted author and thank the heavens for that. I think that this tale is a great take on all of the characters and Dana’s deception was another knife into justice’s back. I can understand Carmen’s reluctance to continue but am happy that she is seeing the big picture. Maybe she will get her revenge in due course. Blood curdling and exciting stuff. More please and thank you very much for the bravery of following your own thoughts and ideas of fan fiction. Diversity is a wonderful thing. Your Loyal Fan.
Okay, I just caught up with this story. I love the Helena/Alice scenes. Can’t wait for more.
Agree also with TMAJO, but this story is really good. Perhaps you shouldn’t let Shane turn into Carmen’s puppy just yet. But bring on the NC-17 anyways (yeah, I’m a perv). Looking forward to the next chapters ! :)
Well, I’m glad that Carmen showed some cojones in this chapter, because I’m sure that brought up her “street cred” a few dozen notches. And I noticed that Alice said goodbye to her “don’t mix pleasure and business” rule. Out the window! LOL! But I won’t blame her, it was bound to happen. On another note, I can see why Carmen and Helena are getting more on their plate in this chapter. Like you wrote, they’re working with Shane, so it’s understandable that they’ll be making some changes, here and there, to improve the system. But at the end of the day Shane is still getting the profits. No takeover. And I think I understand Shane’s anger toward Jenny. Any (successful) dealer knows not to use their own product and not to surround themselves with employees who do, because that’s when the business suffers. An obvious reason is that people get sloppy if they’re dependent. But the main reason is that loyalties end up getting placed on the drug and on *anyone* who provides it, instead of the business and the personal bonds that hold it together (like this story has shown). So now we see that Jenny’s loyalty is to Dana because she’s been helping Jenny support her drug habit (which is probably pretty bad, since she was a junkie before). But her loyalty is probably not as a cop, because we saw that Dana pulled a gun on Jenny, and they also have this dealer/user thing going. What I’m wondering is what Dana is up to, where Jenny got the money (was it really “dirt nap” guy who was stealing from Shane? Hmmm.), and, like TMAJO wrote, does she know about Carmen and Helena being cops. But that’s what story development is for right? So you don’t have to answer my questions just yet, just let me know if I’m out of line with anything I write. :D Can’t wait to read more. (now *that* was a long-ass rant. Told you I’m a windbag! LOL! Sorry, I can’t help myself.)
The story is fantastic! GOO SHANE! :D Please post more!