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    The Burning Wheel. 9

    Story written on September 6, 2007 by New Dawn Fades.
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    Story Shortlink: https://lesfan.com/?p=66803
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    You must never forget, the essence of your spark, all of that which defines you, is the essence of your blood…

    The Burning Wheel. 9

     

     

     

     

     

     

    Part Seven: Rebel, Rebel.

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

    Shackled, they lead me out into the day in front of everyone. I mean everyone is out there in the square. Everyone I’ve ever known. Sadness on their faces. Curious gaze on others. Unknowing glances from those I’ll never know. The ambiguous them, you know…they. But before this…well there had to be goodbye’s of course. They wouldn’t just let me go without saying goodbye to all them in the safe haven.

     

     

     

     

    First up were the fake folks:

     

     

     

     

    “Shane honey why are you doing this? I thought you were happy?”

     

     

     

     

    Something broke inside when they said that. They didn’t have to take me in. They didn’t have to lavish affection and love on me. They didn’t know how I came to them, they never asked. Something broke. And it was never fixed…..whatever it was. I didn’t delve deep enough into myself to voice out loud the sharpness of that moment. I didn’t say anything to them and their time was up. They cried holding each other on the way out.

     

     

     

     

    Dana was next.

     

     

     

     

    She wanted to see me alone never having told mom and dad about what we use to do. She looked great in her uniform. She was on her way to practice. And she had the requisite tears in her eyes. The guards knew her so they left the room so we could talk in private. She sat near the bed and looked at my bruised beaten up face. She smiled weakly.

     

     

     

     

    “I….always knew this is how you would wind up.”

     

     

     

     

    ‘Really?”

     

     

     

    “All you did was cry….when we were kids remember?’

     

     

     

     

    “I do.”

     

     

     

     

    “You missed your mom and dad…..I knew it…..you never said it but I knew.”

     

     

     

    “Dana…”

     

     

     

    “No it’s for the best. Its what you always wanted…….you never saw this place as home.”

     

     

     

     

    “Don’t you think I wanted it to be?”

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    1. If you weren’t one for multiple-part stories I would be freaking out right not…to be concluded!!! I’m so curious to find out what life is like beyond the city walls. What is Bette really tying to “protect” everyone from? This story is just so good. There are like a kagillion posibilities and directions that this story can take, I’m glad you’ve got control of the reigns. So let’s find out…is banishment worse than death?

    2. concluded? I can’t wait for the next chapter. Bette with her own personality is so suitable in that world and Al could call names to Carmen. Please don’t let me be restless so long.

    3. I think Bum got it right, those were my feelings as to why Carmen couldn’t look at Shane, she’s probably barely holding it together. My jaw dropped, when I read ‘to be concluded’ say it ain’t so. Hey! They could become outlaws together but then again I’m kinda worried about Shane facing banishment that is potentially dangerous. Can’t wait to see the next chap.

    4. To be concluded? Oh no! Are you wrapping it up next chapter.? You’re going to leave it all depressing again aren’t you? LOL. Well, as long as you start another story I guess it’s ok. I really hope to see more of this one though. Looking forward to whatever you have up your sleeve.

    5. aww. this story was just starting to grow on me. By the way i was talkign about Destroying Angel, this story and that one are alike i was just wondering if you where going to put them together or something.

    7. Man, it’s already ending?:(Did Carmen enter after Bette told them to send Carmen in? I was a bit put off by Carmen’s cold behaviour towards Shane. Little kiss and that’s it. Shane is kicked out and she didn’t even look at her.I wonder how it will all end. You’re still the best, thank you!

    9. The hell did the rest of my comment go !? So, was “Assimilate” a Skinny Puppy reference ? Hopefully the next chapter will wrap that part of the story, which will continue under a different title. Is Carmen scheming something or is she trying really really hard to abandon all hope ? She shouldn’t be so afraid… * * * * *

    10. I think the thing with Carmen was about staying composed. Just like Shane couldn’t say “I love you” back to Carmen, Carmen couldn’t look at Shane. Some stuff just hurts too much to actually deal with, especially in front of so many curious eyes. Eh, I could be wrong. :P I agree with Nessa_ in hopes that you add another story to this series (I cross my fingers at ‘series’), because you’re always coming up with some crazy twists and developments. When I think I’ve read all there is to read, you manage to take it to another level with another story. You take the audience deeper. It’s awesome. I could read about a dozen more stories in this post-apocalyptic world you’ve presented, but even if the entire story ends with the next part (which I reeeeally hope it doesn’t, crossing my fingers again), it’s been a damn good run. * * * * *

    11. To be concluded? What, but i love it don’t kill it. Damn but i know your gonna write an amazing ending! Well i’ll be waiting for the next post.FIVE STARS! *****

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