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The Burning Wheel. 9
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“No I don’t. I don’t think you ever wanted to be here. There is nothing wrong with that……except that this place is all that’s left for the normal civilized people. Not that you aren’t civil….you just have a wild spirit……”
She leaned down and kissed me. I didn’t know what to say. I never do.
“Out near San Francisco there is this park by the water. Follow the water and keep going……there is a place that you can go. Its wild and dangerous….but you will fit in really well. Don’t take any shit….not that you will…….I really do love you Shane.”
“I know you do……Is that where they are taking me?”
“No but its close…I think they are going to leave you in what use to be Oakland….I could be wrong….but I don’t think I am…..live the life you always wanted Shane…..be free.”
“Dana…wait…..it doesn’t bother you that you have no control?”
“I don’t think about it. I am not wild. I like my rules and my boundaries. I don’t like feeling that I could die just by walking out the gates…..but at the same time….no I don’t like it…but it is what it is……take care….”
It is what it is….isn’t it?
I saw Alice’s short blonde hair peeking in through the window. Dana walked out and they hugged and Alice seemed to be reassuring Dana on something. She stormed into the room and proceeded to tell me what she thought.
“You are a fucking idiot! You know that! You pissed away something great with Dana, you pissed away the future that we all dream about, you live in past that does not exist……god Shane……….I’m….gonna miss you….”
Flood gate of tears and sobs. I was going to miss her too.
“So you and Dana huh?”
“Yeah…wait how….did you know?”
“I know Dana. I know when she is happy. I know how she is. You make her happy.”
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If you weren’t one for multiple-part stories I would be freaking out right not…to be concluded!!! I’m so curious to find out what life is like beyond the city walls. What is Bette really tying to “protect” everyone from? This story is just so good. There are like a kagillion posibilities and directions that this story can take, I’m glad you’ve got control of the reigns. So let’s find out…is banishment worse than death?
concluded? I can’t wait for the next chapter. Bette with her own personality is so suitable in that world and Al could call names to Carmen. Please don’t let me be restless so long.
I think Bum got it right, those were my feelings as to why Carmen couldn’t look at Shane, she’s probably barely holding it together. My jaw dropped, when I read ‘to be concluded’ say it ain’t so. Hey! They could become outlaws together but then again I’m kinda worried about Shane facing banishment that is potentially dangerous. Can’t wait to see the next chap.
To be concluded? Oh no! Are you wrapping it up next chapter.? You’re going to leave it all depressing again aren’t you? LOL. Well, as long as you start another story I guess it’s ok. I really hope to see more of this one though. Looking forward to whatever you have up your sleeve.
aww. this story was just starting to grow on me. By the way i was talkign about Destroying Angel, this story and that one are alike i was just wondering if you where going to put them together or something.
Concluded??????? You are killing me!!! :-)
Man, it’s already ending?:(Did Carmen enter after Bette told them to send Carmen in? I was a bit put off by Carmen’s cold behaviour towards Shane. Little kiss and that’s it. Shane is kicked out and she didn’t even look at her.I wonder how it will all end. You’re still the best, thank you!
“Part Eight: Assimilate”
The hell did the rest of my comment go !? So, was “Assimilate” a Skinny Puppy reference ? Hopefully the next chapter will wrap that part of the story, which will continue under a different title. Is Carmen scheming something or is she trying really really hard to abandon all hope ? She shouldn’t be so afraid… * * * * *
I think the thing with Carmen was about staying composed. Just like Shane couldn’t say “I love you” back to Carmen, Carmen couldn’t look at Shane. Some stuff just hurts too much to actually deal with, especially in front of so many curious eyes. Eh, I could be wrong. :P I agree with Nessa_ in hopes that you add another story to this series (I cross my fingers at ‘series’), because you’re always coming up with some crazy twists and developments. When I think I’ve read all there is to read, you manage to take it to another level with another story. You take the audience deeper. It’s awesome. I could read about a dozen more stories in this post-apocalyptic world you’ve presented, but even if the entire story ends with the next part (which I reeeeally hope it doesn’t, crossing my fingers again), it’s been a damn good run. * * * * *
To be concluded? What, but i love it don’t kill it. Damn but i know your gonna write an amazing ending! Well i’ll be waiting for the next post.FIVE STARS! *****