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Can She Ever Love Me? Chapter 1
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CHAPTER 1
Its a sunny, Monday morning. Tina, Shane, and Alice are having their morning coffee at The Planet.
ALICE: So Shaney, who was the chick you were with last night. She seemed a little different from your usual fan club.
SHANE: (flicks her middle finger up at Alice)
TINA: Shane, Can I ask you a somewhat personal question?
SHANE: Shoot Tina, What is it?
TINA: When was the last time you was truly happy?
ALICE: (laughing) When she was being conceived by her mother and father.
SHANE: (laughing hysterically) Fuck you, Al…Hmmm Tina, I really dont know.
TINA: I know when Shane….when you were with Carmen, you was soooo happy.
SHANE: (looking away sadly) yeah.. (signing)…you’re right, she did make me happy.
TINA: Have you ever tried again to reach her.
SHANE: I did about a year ago, but her cousin Rosita told me she moved to the East Coast. She said Carmen had a DJing gig, and was doing really well for herself.
TINA: Ohhh, I didnt know, sorry for prying.
SHANE: Noooo it’s okay Tina, you didnt know….hey its over between Carmen and I anyway.
ALICE: Shane, let me ask you a question now.
SHANE: (shaking her head) No Alice
ALICE: Why not, Tina got to ask you a question…why cant I?
SHANE: Well Alice… only 1 question per day, and Tina used up the question for today..(laughing)
ALICE: That’s bullshit Shane….ok but dont call me asking me to go with you to Wax.
SHANE: (laughing) Awwww cmon Al…I was kidding (doing her scarface impression)..Alice…Aliceeeee
ALICE: (Ignoring Shane and typing on her laptop)
SHANE: Okkkkkkk…Alice….ask me the question.
ALICE: (Smiling knowing she got to Shane) What would you do if Carmen walked right through that door?
SHANE: (Being silly and sarcastic) Ill go right over there and give her a big hug and kiss, Al…Are you happy now.
TINA: Holy shitttt!!!!!
ALICE: What T (looking in the same direction as Tina) Oh My God!!!!!
SHANE: (Looking) What are you 2 looking at over there (Shane sees Carmen, and starts to turn white as a ghost
TINA: Oh my God, Shane are you okay…here drink this water.
SHANE: (Shaking) I..I… I fffeel light headed.
ALICE: Im going over there and say hello to her.
TINA: (Looking concern for Shane) Wait Alice…Shane doesnt look so well.
ALICE: (throwing her hand) She’s okay…Ill be back.
Alice leaves te table and walks over to the counter to talk to Carmen. Carmen is there ordering and doesnt see Alice walking over to her.
CARMEN: Ill have 4 coffees and a dozen of mixed bagels. Please can you also put some cream cheese and honey in the bag.
ALICE: (Tapping Carmen on the shoulder) Carmennnnnnn…Oh my God…How are you doing!!!! Long time no see.
CARMEN: (Hugging Alice) Hey Aliceee…Im great…What about you?
ALICE: You know im still cute and adorable as always…Where you been hiding?
CARMEN: Well, I got a job DJing on the East Coast..I love it, but i do miss LA.
ALICE: Sooo…. are you in town visiting or are you on vacation.
CARMEN: Unfortunately, Alice..Im here visiting my mom, shes in the hospital.
ALICE: Oh my, is she going to be okay.
CARMEN: The Doctor said shes doing better, but she needs to rest….I came home to make sure she listens and get some rest.
ALICE: Sooo, how long are you going to stay in town?
CARMEN: Well, Ill probably be here for a week. My boss told me to take as long as I needed.
ALICE: Maybe while your here, we could go out to dinner and catch up on old and new times.
CARMEN: Wellll, ok…Here’s my card and call me so we can pick a day (looking @ her watch) Hey, I have to get to the hospital.
ALICE: Ohhh ok…Ill give you a call and hey nice seeing you again.
CARMEN: (Hugging Alice) Yes, nice seeing you too…bye
ALICE: BYE
TBC
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I got this same advice when I first started writing so h’m assuming it’s okay if i pass it on. It gets easier every time you hit the submit button. Not even a month ago i hit that button for the first time and now i have about 17 chapters or whatever. Don’t get discouraged, and keep up the good work. You are still a fanfic virgin until number 2 gets posted ;p PPS! Gob job!
Nice start, waiting to see where you are going to take this.
Good start. :) Post soon, okay? :) Don’t worry, you’re doing great. *pats back* XD
Hey, I like this fic so keep on writing and keep on posting. Looking forward to the next chapter! :)
Hey awesome start, already can’t wait for more :)
Just keep on this was a great start. Noice that Shane didn’t hop up and hug and kiss her. One week, lets see if she runs into shane. post soon thanks
Hey Steph…thought i’d better leave a comment, seeing as u basically threatened me if i didn’t. But not sure y i was threatened…since i’ve already commented on each chapeter written when you’ve read it to me. But don’t wanna have to hear u keep telling me how u don’t like me today cause i didn’t comment, hehe. Wonderful, fantastic chapter as u already know…cause i told u on the phone just a few minutes ago. So get off your lazy butt and post the next chappy cause we both know u have SEVERAL already written. Hehe…you shouldn’t have threatened me cause now you’ll have all the readers after u to post the already written chapters. So HA HA HA?!!!
Hey Steph, Good beginning. Now you just need to continue this tale and see where it takes you. Many thanks from a Fan.
Good start can’t to see what will happen. PPS
Welcome!!! I am always happy to see a newbie to fan fiction. It’s nerveracking to hit that post button no matter how many chapters you have posted…but, oh…it is so rewarding as well! This was a good, solid start, with realistic dialogue…which in my opinion is the hardest thing to do. So, again, welcome…look forward to your next chapter! Thanks!
like it x cant wait for next chaps x