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Laid Up: Another Season 3 – Chapter 28B
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One week later (Around Noon)
Dana was stretched out on the sofa reading another checklist from Bride’s magazine. She had showered at her new club after a two hour practice there, got dressed in black, second-skin running shorts and a peach colored baby T-shirt, and returned to the house she shared with Alice on Broad Beach. In three weeks she’d be married and it wasn’t that she was nervous about the future, but about the wedding day itself. She wanted everything to go perfectly. Her mother had turned into an amazing mother-of-the-bride. Sharon had been on the phone with the caterers, with the two florists they were using in British Columbia, had dealt with all of the small details at the hotel. Alice and Sharon worked well together and both accepted the others’ suggestions readily.
Alice and Dana were leaving for Whistler in two weeks and still there were some small things that Dana had to check off her list before they left. She definitely needed to talk with Tina but she couldn’t get a moment alone with her without Alice trailing behind.
Dana yawned not from exhaustion from the fast-paced run and strenuous workout this morning, but she hadn’t been getting any sleep. Alice was determined to break her and get information about the surprise Dana planned for their wedding. At this point, it wasn’t even such a big deal to Dana. It was a simple, but romantic gesture, but Alice was doggedly trying to pry it out of her. The only thing that sort of shut up her partner and soon-to-be wife was sex. Except for the day they both had horrendous menstrual cramps, they’d been fucking their way through Helena’s house. They had done it in every room–on the floor in front of each fireplace, in front of the television, on the kitchen island, in each of the guest bedrooms, on the deck next to the pool, in the pool, in the hot tub, they had used just their fingers, sometimes just their tongues, other times they used toys or watched free porn on the Internet since they stopped subscribing to the monthly porn DVD service, sugardvd.com. Nu-nu had purchased along with other requested groceries, zucchini, bananas, and crookneck yellow squash for the women, but there was no evidence they ever cooked them. They did however cook with them.
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Loved that I had something substantial, in terms of length and talent; thank you
Why, why, why you are not writing the television series I will never fucking know. Really and truly, you have taken their original vision, enhanced and expanded it. All the stories live through you. I wish we could start all over from Season One and have you write and Angela Robinson direct. I am entirely serious. God, I cannot believe what could have been. Your writing is so excellent and true, my praise seems meager. Thank you.
You get Helena. You “Get” Dylan. I can see each one of your scenes dramatized. That last exchange between Bette and Kit – you get the essence of their whole push-pull, attraction/aversion, and the ultimate bond they have forged past the damage that their father’s ways did to both of them. Your writing fulfills all my longing for more DEPTH in the discussions between the two sisters. S1 ventured there, then left off with “Pooty Chasin’ Dog” and the “Weezy Jefferson” wigs and clothes on Kit in S2. Kit has never been a real relevant character sense. Your Bette is a noble character whose passionate nature and devotion to Tina shines through her impulse to anger. I love her complexity, because it is never tinged with the mendacity that we see in the Bette of IC’s vision. Your Bette would have NEVER, NEVER turned her back on Jodi, exploiting Jodi’s deafness to covertly express her love for Tina. Oh my god! You understand her characters and are more true to them than IC ever thought to be. Every one of your characters, TLW or original, has dialogue and actions consistent with their inner feelings, even Stephanie, whom you have redeemed. Your writing is my off-season joy. I wish the actors could have had you in their corner. You would have served them well. …Maybe, like “The X-Files”, you could write the spin-off movie? Heavy lifting. You have done the heavy lifting for us all. You are what this site is all about. …Talk amongst yourself, fellow readers…I’ve just finished 74 pages in one sitting and I am feeling a litte verklempt. Portia, she’s like buttah!
I love this story. Love, love, love it! It’s a true work of genius, reworking the entire show after Season 2, and making it insanely compelling. Christ–you even got Jenny back into it too! I hope they hire you to write for the spin-off, because it would be tremendous. Thanks for another brilliant installment–what would we do without you?
Portia…You can just flatout write. Every page is simply amazing. Post when you can.
74 more pages of Al and Dana, Shane, Carmen, the Kennards, B&T, that fool Marcus, Hels, and Dylan… even Jenny!… and I couldn’t bear to stop reading til I finished it all. Love the story, love every word. As always, this was great Portia, thanks for writing.
Shane had every right to be pissed, if she did it Carmen would never speak to her again.Portia, you are so amazing. thank you for Shane&Carmen, you make them so sexy, passionate, it’s always a pleasure to read.
Simply amazing, I do not have the words to put to paper to express how amazed I am. Your writing is captivating to say the least. Kudo’s to you and your editor!!!
an other amazed reader here. I don’t have much to add as the previous commenters had said it all. It’s an amazing pleasure to read this and get lost in this FF world you create. Absolutely marvellous Portia! Thanks for writing and let us read it! I’ll be patiently waiting for the next update.
Your talent is simply amazing. I can count in one hand the number of writers who can see through their characters’ inner psyche and bring out every fiber of their entity. End result is this amazing piece of work. Thank you for this.
I’m through using your well-earned comments space to bag on the series. From now on, my comments will focus on the merits of your writing. You deserve no less. Thank you, Portia.
I was prepared to wait impatiently for your next installment and then I discovered this chapter posted only a week later :). You continue to amaze me. I had never even considered Bette’s reasons for not wanting to use Mo as a donor. After you so eloquently described Bette’s feelings, it made perfect sense. And even though I am disappointed for B&T regarding Marcus, your talents have swayed me to his line of thinking–if he’s unable to be on the sidelines, better he not participate at all. You capture every character’s voice so perfectly. I’m even worried about Stephanie rekindling her friendship with Henry in her fragile state. What’s up with Alice not inviting her family to the wedding? Why can’t Bette carry their next child? I’m sure these and many more will be answered in your next update. I seriously can’t wait. Okay, I can, but I wont’ be happy about it :). Thanks Portia–as always a treat to read.
great work i love this story so much!!!
I absolutely love this story, have been reading all the chapters. Thank you for the time you devote to it, it makes people all over the world smile when they see an update :) Your Shane and Carmen just rock my world!