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A Night in the D — Chapter 21
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Tina sighed. “I don’t think this is a good idea.”
“This?”
No smile. “Yeah, this. This hooking up on your way through town with the chick who works downstairs. I don’t think it’s working out. Or it has worked out, I should say. A lot of heat, some action, time to move on, yeah?” Tina asked matter-of-factly, turning to face Bette, who was perhaps a foot away from her. Close enough to reveal every worry line in her face. Tina flinched.
“Bettewhat’s going on with you?”
“You are so beautiful,” Bette whispered.
“Aww,” Tina said, smiling sweetly. “You’re delirious now? Is that it?”
Bette smiled a bit. “I’m just…” She faltered, looking for words. “This has all been really intense.”
Tina nodded. “Yes, it has.”
“And intense is usually on my terms, you know?” She looked hopefully at Tina, who smiled at her again. “I sort of wanna run and freeze at the same time, Tina. I’m questioning what I’m doing here.”
Somehow the honesty was so real as to comfort, even if the words didn’t. Tina felt calmed. “It’s ok,” she said softly. “You haven’t done anything wrong. I was here too remember?”
Bette nodded silently. “I shouldn’t let you go.”
“No, you shouldn’t,” Tina said, grinning. “You suck for that. Talk about it in your high-priced therapy.”
Bette stepped back, startled. “Hey, what makes you think I have a high-priced therapist!” She acted insulted.
“You have high-priced everything else.”
“Are you making fun of me?” Bette’s voice edged towards amusement, seeking the relief.
“Should I not?”
“No, you shouldn’t. You barely know me.”
“Well that’s the part I barely know,” Tina smirked. “You’re living the good life, Ms. Porter. That’s pretty obvious.” Tina turned her back again, pulling the skirt from the hanger. Bette watched her, again.
She slipped the skirt on over her hips before looking back over one shoulder. “Could you zip me up?” she asked, offering a self-satisfied smile. I’m going out with confidence, ok? Tina thought. ***** this scurrying off routine.
Bette shook her head, watching Tina’s smile. “I don’t think I can do that.”
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there you are…I am off to read…I’m very excited ya know.
GOD…I love this story! You just can’t post enough for me. thank you and happy holidays!!!
WOAH…we are getting into somethimg alot more serious here…but im really glad Bette wont let Tina leave, these 2 will never have any problems cause they will have gone through so much emotional stuff before even getting to bed and i dont mean to sleep either…i want them to get it together but you know i love that its not just a quickie for one night….BUT BUT BUT you do know its christmas and it would be like a pressie for us if they were to …..lol
so intense…i’m glad bette don’t want tina to leave…since it’s a holiday, i’m still hoping for a happy ending
Gosh, Ms. Tina is BAD today. She is ruthless and merciless in her words. So glad they will now have a drink and do I dare ask for MORE… Thanks for the post.
Damn this TINA IS FIESTY!!!!!!!!! LOVE THAT!!!! IT’S HOTT!!!!!! HURRY UP AND POST…MAKE MY XMAS PERFECT BY POSTING A DOZEN OR SO CHAPPYS!!!!!!!
I love your story. Looking forward to more.
Your story is the first one I’m looking for everytime I visit this site. I just love it and I especially like your Tina character. Please post soon!
LOVELY!! I absolutely love this story and cannot wait to see where you are going with it. Please continue—waiting (im)patiently :-)
This is great! Thank you
three pages!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OMG!!!!!!!!!! i love that they are both complex people
I hate to be repetitive but, this is excrutiatingly intense. You can literally feel the tension through your use of language. The pressure feels tangible. How do you do this?…. Describe the details of merely hours with such emotion and detail. This is unusual, layered and complex. The pace not only of the story but even the posting is keeping the vice on this story as they simmer…as we all simmer. Sometimes I have to go back a few chapters to get back in the moment, but it is worth it. Awesome. Please continue.
An equal relationship is a healthy relationship. But it feels like Tee’s digging fish from BetteCat’s mouth. =)
Well, at least they are getting out of that damn room. They only know each other in that hotel which in a way puts Tina at an advantage since that is her world. Perhaps going out for drinks in a not-so-cheap place will bring Bette back up to Tina’s level.
This story is amazing only b/c of your writing abilities. Fresh and hot…so different.
Well, I don’t really comment on stories, but I have to tell you this: your story is one of the very few worth reading these days. thank you, I’m looking forward to more!
I just catch up with this story and love it and can’t wait to see it more. post soon please, thanks!
Hey girl Happy New Year! I almost got stuck in Cleveland on a stop over and thought it would be soo bad :P Post soon!
You really convey so much in B&T’s brief but extremely intense interactions. I really love this story! Thanks for sharing it.
i love this tina. such depth, such dignity. if anyone could make the almighty bette porter fall in love, it is this tina.
You don’t mind if I tell you again how incredibly special and marvelous I find your writing, do you? Every time you post, it’s a gift. Thank you!! And Happy Holidays to you!
i luv this tina….