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All you need is love – Chapter 46
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“Hey “
Bette looked down at her lover
“Hey honey – did the rain wake you up?”
“Yeah – how long has it been bucketing down like that?”
“About five hours “
“What time is it? “
“Six – I was still awake when it started and when I woke up about 80 minutes ago it was still going strong “
“The boys okay?”
“I had to make Dan a cup of tea an hour ago but he’s asleep now “
“What are you doing?”
“Working on that sex scene “
“It’s really bugging you isn’t it?”
“What makes you think that?”
“Because you once told me you hated writing before breakfast – you said you would rather work half the night than wake up and work “
“Yeah – its bugging me “
Tina’s eyes slowly focused as she stretched out her body. For a few minutes she just lay watching as Bette’s long graceful fingers flew over the keyboard
“You are typing quieter than you did yesterday afternoon “she muttered “You were in such a crabby mood “
“Me? – I am always sweetness and light when I am with you my darling “
“Yeah right – that’s was why you were hitting the keys like you were touching down a football “
Bette chuckled and wrote a few more sentences.
“Have you run that through the spell checker “Tina asked.
“My program does it automatically – mainly because I have a habit of forgetting and despite years of expensive education I am still an appalling bad speller “
“You might want to turn it off “
“Why – what the hell have I done wrong? “
“It’s a common mistake babe “
“WHAT! “
“Babe – don’t wake the kids up “
“I know your main character has a bit of a history “
“YESSSSS “
“But they are still her pubic hairs not public hairs “
“Oh holy hell “
Bette rolled the cursor to the offending word and hit the delete button with a fierce blow. Tina sniggered
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Ally, I follow your opinion. NC17 scenes are not also so important for me. I have read some stories of it. I found this tiring with the time and simply have overlooked it. For me is feel and experience it more importantly, our preferential couple feel what. One feels its love for each other. In views in gestures. A story can have action. It may be just as a little drama. Funny scenes, to laugh with them. Hurt, pain and sadness, to cry a bit. A happy heart, if they look at themselves lovingly. Worry and hope if they are perhaps ill or have an accident. Of course it can go a bit hotly. The hint of eroticism makes one more on as NC17 scenes. Therefore I love all your stories. You tell the life. One worries with them. One hopes with them. One laughs with them. One cries with them. One feels … This is emportend for me.
Should they get to that point (and I know they will… unless you have Other Plans for them, ally?), Bette carrying the baby is the perfect solution. As for Sarah… she *really* needs to ease up and stop with the … well, with the mothering. Goodness, talk about cart before horses. Ally, great update, thank you.
so wonderful to hear them talk with each other. so bette doesnt like being critiqued, eh? funny but not. ;) thanks.
“sex for women has got to be 90% between their ears not their legs” LMAO! Ally, you are a great writer and your story lines are amazing….with or without NC-17’s.
Ally, please don’t ever doubt your ability to write nc-17 scenes. You’re a wonderful writer no matter what story or part of the story you bring to us. I say write what you are comfortable with and you’ll please us each time. Love them all!!! PPS
Ally, you don’t have a problem at all with NC-17s! The ones in earlier chapters of this story have been absolutely breathtaking! Don’t doubt your abilities. Just let it flow. I love anything you write!
Ally, I have always enjoyed the scenes you write – all of them. I understand it is difficult but please don’t stop writing sex scenes you wonderful at it and I appreciate your style.
Ally all of your writing is done so well. I think you are being your own worse critic multiplied by 10 here. Your sex scenes are very well written as is everything else. I really like in this chapter how you are criticizing your writing of sex scenes in your author’s notes, and then in the story you write Tina criticizing Bette’s writing of the same thing…I’m sure you can see it from both sides – Tina trying to be helpful and Bette getting irritated a little bit with Tina, but mostly at herself for not being able to get it perfect the first time. Most intelligent readers overlook spelling and other minor errors because they know what is intended. I think it’s important to show B&T’s love and their need for each other in every sense of the word. And I agree with Bette…your first time together isn’t about dirty. I love how you’ve got B&T communicating so well. T’s mom really does need to stop pushing them; but it was great how she told Ollie off! Can’t help but love that! Thanks for another great chapter Ally! Happy Friday to you too!
lol@public hairs, but LMFAO@TUNA!!!!!!! I’ve seen that typo before and it’s especially wrong during a sex scene. Wow, Tina really doesn’t want to carry another baby. I can’t blame her though since the last time was really bad for her.
Ally, please don’t give up on writting NC-17’s. You do an excellent job and I so look forward to reading them. I think it’s a great idea for Bette to carry the next baby. She seems to want to & Tina really shouldn’t. PPS!!
I hadn’t noticed any problem with NC-17s. Just another ploy on your part to gather sympathy. Interesting that Tina freaked so much over her post-partum depression that she didn’t even hear Bette say that she didn’t want her to get pregnant again. I think I’ve raised this point in other stories, but while I understand Bette’s desire to carry a child, I think at her age it comes with distinct risks.
i think that you do a great job with words and i like so much to read anything you write i can remember that your story it one of the first story that i started to read when i find this wonderful site and you don’t stop to amazing me with your writen so, i will read anything you write don’t worry about NC17.
hey there I’m really into the characters and the dialogue and s/l and the odd romantic moment at this time. Sometimes subtle sex is nice. So I don’t care if your story has explicit sex or not. Just keep writing these wonderful characters and let the sex flow when it does as it will. Tina and Bette are somehow just made for it…even when as a writer I don’t want them to or plan for them to, they end up making out eventually; so be it. Love your writing as always.
Good chapter. Good that they talk and shared about they feeling and everything. Ok please post soon, thanks!
Ally, as always woderful and amazing. Thanks PPS
Ally, I’ve come to realize in my brief stint as a fanfic author that not everyone can do it all brilliantly. I already know that drama isn’t in my blood so if I ever start writing again people shouldn’t expect drama from me. You don’t need to have anyone doing crazy stunts that could break bones or rip muscles for it to be a hot NC-17. Sometimes if it’s too intricate it makes my head hurt and I have to speed read through it to get to the end. To those who can do it all, I hate you. Not really. =P
Ya know mate, I actually think NC17’s get harder the more you write them, I find that anyway. And I’m complete pants at drama! ;o) Thank you your kind words hun x
Hey Ally, I wish that I could type something that would banish all of your thoughts and fears pver writing NC-17 scenes. Your talent has shone through on every occassion. I loved the intensity oif Bette and Tina’s conservation about another child. It amazed that Bette was starting to come around to the idea until Tina put the brakes firmly on. No more kids. This might be something that they can discuss at a later date but for now it is not gonna happen. Then Bette’s frustration at writing a sex scene was hysterical. Just loved the “public” instead of “pubic” line. Now be honest how many times has that happened to you??? I am just loving this awesome adventure. Please writie more soon. The dialogue is dynamic, the scenes are super and the emotions intense. Thank you so mcuh for letting your creative juices flow and whip up this miracle. Your Loyal Fan.