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All you need is love – Chapter 46
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“You are starting to get a complex about that aren’t you?”
“No “
“If it was about the two of us would it be Tuna and Botte?”
“You are not freaking well funny “Bette said warningly but Tina could see her lover’s mouth arching up in a half smile
“So why are you almost laughing? “
“Its early “Bette said pulling a face
“And its really affecting your ego award winning writer “
“You have more than me “Bette replied smiling at Tina and retyping the offending sentence so the spell checker didn’t mess it up. Though Bette knew that she had probably typed public and not pubic – well it wasn’t a word she typed on a regular basis.
Tina lay and read what Bette had written as she lay beside her.
“There are a lack of swear words in it “Tina commented
“What? “
“Well they are hot as a summer day in hell for each other – they have come through a terrible ordeal and not one of them has really made it dirty – its first time sex “
“It’s not about dirt “Bette typed a few more words – she wasn’t used to an audience as she wrote and she really wasn’t sure she was comfortable with Tina assessing her words.
“Just an observation – can I make another one ? “
“Do I have a choice ? “ Bette said slightly strained
“Mons – not a sexy word. That word is not going to get your readers slipping their hand down their trousers and touching themselves “
“Ugh – really – does stuff like this really turn people on ?”
“Bette – you are very naïve – sex for women has got to be 90% between their ears not their legs. You need to set a mood that makes the readers hot”
Bette hit the save icon and started closing her laptop down
“Why did you do that?” Tina asked
“I’ve written enough – you are awake – I want to cuddle you “
“Okay “ Tina didn’t believe her for a second – but it wasn’t worth the hassle.
Bette moved her laptop and pulled Tina into her arms “How are you feeling? Last night was pretty intense “
Tina pulled Bette’s arms around her tightly “I don’t know – I lost it “
“We both were knocked out by the idea “
“I am going to have to talk to my mother – she is just going to drive a wedge between us “
“She isn’t – because we know how to talk to one another. It would have harmed us if I had gone away thinking that you wanted a baby and resenting the fact that you hadn’t told me. THAT would have harmed us – as it was I spoke to you and you answered me with honestly and I really appreciate that Tina “
“Did you tell me last night that my mother said all this to Ollie ? “
“I was coming over to your place because I had seen his car. I walked in the back door and your mother was giving it to him with both barrels. She really laid into him and started saying that she wasn’t going to let him harm us because she was looking forward to paying for our wedding – then she started on the thing about the baby “
“So you might never have heard all this if you hadn’t walked in when you did ?”
“Basically “
“I assume that she was not in the least embarrassed by being caught out ?”
Bette chuckled “ You seem to know your mother rather well “
Tina laughed “ Yes I do. That whole thing about stepping in where angels fear to tread could have been invented for my mother “
“She was winding him up “ Bette defended
“She is not going to shut until we get married are we ?”
“When are they going back to England ?”
“Not soon enough” replied Tina with feeling
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Ally, I follow your opinion. NC17 scenes are not also so important for me. I have read some stories of it. I found this tiring with the time and simply have overlooked it. For me is feel and experience it more importantly, our preferential couple feel what. One feels its love for each other. In views in gestures. A story can have action. It may be just as a little drama. Funny scenes, to laugh with them. Hurt, pain and sadness, to cry a bit. A happy heart, if they look at themselves lovingly. Worry and hope if they are perhaps ill or have an accident. Of course it can go a bit hotly. The hint of eroticism makes one more on as NC17 scenes. Therefore I love all your stories. You tell the life. One worries with them. One hopes with them. One laughs with them. One cries with them. One feels … This is emportend for me.
Should they get to that point (and I know they will… unless you have Other Plans for them, ally?), Bette carrying the baby is the perfect solution. As for Sarah… she *really* needs to ease up and stop with the … well, with the mothering. Goodness, talk about cart before horses. Ally, great update, thank you.
so wonderful to hear them talk with each other. so bette doesnt like being critiqued, eh? funny but not. ;) thanks.
“sex for women has got to be 90% between their ears not their legs” LMAO! Ally, you are a great writer and your story lines are amazing….with or without NC-17’s.
Ally, please don’t ever doubt your ability to write nc-17 scenes. You’re a wonderful writer no matter what story or part of the story you bring to us. I say write what you are comfortable with and you’ll please us each time. Love them all!!! PPS
Ally, you don’t have a problem at all with NC-17s! The ones in earlier chapters of this story have been absolutely breathtaking! Don’t doubt your abilities. Just let it flow. I love anything you write!
Ally, I have always enjoyed the scenes you write – all of them. I understand it is difficult but please don’t stop writing sex scenes you wonderful at it and I appreciate your style.
Ally all of your writing is done so well. I think you are being your own worse critic multiplied by 10 here. Your sex scenes are very well written as is everything else. I really like in this chapter how you are criticizing your writing of sex scenes in your author’s notes, and then in the story you write Tina criticizing Bette’s writing of the same thing…I’m sure you can see it from both sides – Tina trying to be helpful and Bette getting irritated a little bit with Tina, but mostly at herself for not being able to get it perfect the first time. Most intelligent readers overlook spelling and other minor errors because they know what is intended. I think it’s important to show B&T’s love and their need for each other in every sense of the word. And I agree with Bette…your first time together isn’t about dirty. I love how you’ve got B&T communicating so well. T’s mom really does need to stop pushing them; but it was great how she told Ollie off! Can’t help but love that! Thanks for another great chapter Ally! Happy Friday to you too!
lol@public hairs, but LMFAO@TUNA!!!!!!! I’ve seen that typo before and it’s especially wrong during a sex scene. Wow, Tina really doesn’t want to carry another baby. I can’t blame her though since the last time was really bad for her.
Ally, please don’t give up on writting NC-17’s. You do an excellent job and I so look forward to reading them. I think it’s a great idea for Bette to carry the next baby. She seems to want to & Tina really shouldn’t. PPS!!
I hadn’t noticed any problem with NC-17s. Just another ploy on your part to gather sympathy. Interesting that Tina freaked so much over her post-partum depression that she didn’t even hear Bette say that she didn’t want her to get pregnant again. I think I’ve raised this point in other stories, but while I understand Bette’s desire to carry a child, I think at her age it comes with distinct risks.
i think that you do a great job with words and i like so much to read anything you write i can remember that your story it one of the first story that i started to read when i find this wonderful site and you don’t stop to amazing me with your writen so, i will read anything you write don’t worry about NC17.
hey there I’m really into the characters and the dialogue and s/l and the odd romantic moment at this time. Sometimes subtle sex is nice. So I don’t care if your story has explicit sex or not. Just keep writing these wonderful characters and let the sex flow when it does as it will. Tina and Bette are somehow just made for it…even when as a writer I don’t want them to or plan for them to, they end up making out eventually; so be it. Love your writing as always.
Good chapter. Good that they talk and shared about they feeling and everything. Ok please post soon, thanks!
Ally, as always woderful and amazing. Thanks PPS
Ally, I’ve come to realize in my brief stint as a fanfic author that not everyone can do it all brilliantly. I already know that drama isn’t in my blood so if I ever start writing again people shouldn’t expect drama from me. You don’t need to have anyone doing crazy stunts that could break bones or rip muscles for it to be a hot NC-17. Sometimes if it’s too intricate it makes my head hurt and I have to speed read through it to get to the end. To those who can do it all, I hate you. Not really. =P
Ya know mate, I actually think NC17’s get harder the more you write them, I find that anyway. And I’m complete pants at drama! ;o) Thank you your kind words hun x
Hey Ally, I wish that I could type something that would banish all of your thoughts and fears pver writing NC-17 scenes. Your talent has shone through on every occassion. I loved the intensity oif Bette and Tina’s conservation about another child. It amazed that Bette was starting to come around to the idea until Tina put the brakes firmly on. No more kids. This might be something that they can discuss at a later date but for now it is not gonna happen. Then Bette’s frustration at writing a sex scene was hysterical. Just loved the “public” instead of “pubic” line. Now be honest how many times has that happened to you??? I am just loving this awesome adventure. Please writie more soon. The dialogue is dynamic, the scenes are super and the emotions intense. Thank you so mcuh for letting your creative juices flow and whip up this miracle. Your Loyal Fan.