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Apogée 21
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“Eight fifteen.”
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Shane held Carmen in her arms tightly a trickle of blood running from her nose to the curve of the assassin’s lips. As Shane’s grip on the bartender’s arms tightened, the Latin looked up confused, the assassin’s blunt fingernails now sending sharp pains through her arms. Shane’s face looked trance like and her body jumped as another trail of blood began to run from the assassin’s other nostril.
Carmen tried to escape Shane’s grasp but the assassin was strong, Shane’s arms flexing to hold onto the bartender.
“Shane you’re hurting me,” Carmen said struggling and realizing the assassin couldn’t hear her. Shane’s eyes were glazed and her breath was ragged, the assassin grimaced and the bartender started trying to pull away in earnest.
“Shane! Stop it, please wake up.” The Latina was used to emergency situations but she was becoming frantic, unprepared for anything like this.
“Nikki wait…please wait,” the assassin wailed as Carmen calmed down and thought to press her thumbs into Shane’s underarms; the assassin yelping in pain and releasing the Latina. Carmen rolled off of the couch and ran to the kitchen mixing another glass of cayenne pepper and water and rushing back to Shane’s side forcing the liquid down the assassin’s throat. Almost instantly Shane seemed to return to normal, the assassin’s dilated pupils turning into small dots and her breathing slowing. Carmen thinking the worst was over until Shane gasped suddenly, her body convulsing and causing Carmen to tense again,
“The green bag Carmen…get the pen,” the assassin choked. Carmen was up and running before she knew was she was looking for, her heart was pounding wildly in her chest and she wasn’t sure how she was even moving, the fear seemingly paralyzing. The bartender tore through Shane’s room grabbing the green bag and bolting back to the couch opening the bag and seeing four injection pens.
Carmen looked hysterically between the pens each one a different color, the bartender looked to the assassin holding the pens in front of Shane’s face
“Which one Shane? Which pen is it?” The bartender cried waiting for Shane to respond, the assassin’s eyes shut tight as her hands clenched tight; a desperate yell tearing through Shane’s throat.
“Please Shane,” Carmen whispered,
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Dana reached the hospital twenty minutes early, she hadn’t meant to, but in her excitement to see Alice she’d overshot the time by a lot. The agent took the stairs on the opposite side of the wing, deciding she needed a little exercise.
Dana walked to down the hall slowly flipping her cell phone open and closed. This always drove Alice crazy and the agent couldn’t see why, the small click of her phone locking into place was soothing but she refrained from doing it around the writer because of Alice’s extreme and mildly hilarious reaction. The agent hummed as she made her way down the long hallway, singing the song that had been stuck in her head since that morning.
Her name is Rio and she dances on the sand
Just like that river twisting through a dusty land
“Dammit Alice…like I need Duran Duran in my head all day.” The agent whispered to herself.
Dana flipped her phone one last time, the sound finally getting on her nerves. She shoved it back into her pocket and frowned, the agent’s ears picking up an unusual sound…it sounded like…
Dana sprinted down the hall to Jenny’s room almost colliding with a lone nurse tending to her patient. The agent slid into Jenny’s room to find the injured agent lying asleep in her bed the covers tucked neatly against her chest.
Dana breathed a sigh of relief, the breeze from the open window chilling the thin sheen of sweat on the agent’s skin. The agent brow furrowed thinking it was foolish to give Jenny a blanket then leave the window open on such a chilly day. Dana closed the window and moved to take a seat, by the side of the bed. The agent stared at a small red dot on Jenny’s blanket and watched, eyes wide as the dot grew bigger, the blood quickly soaking through.
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i have a confession: i always read the sections with alice and dana first and only when i’m done will i go back to read the other characters storylines… maybe there are AA type meetings for Danish obsessors (is that a word??) like me… great update! love the twists and turns your story is taking
I don’t think you’ll be needing that McCutcheon Fuckin Gunk to get the sexy ladies in bed (one in particular ofcourse). So just send it to me…and while you’re at it (the mailing that is), could you also send me some of that baklava! :D Will Dunne actually back off (for a while) after Dana’s remark (she did hurt his ego :D)? Lol @ the conversation that Alice and Dana had. As for the humming…I hate it when people do that to me, especially when the song is totally annoying or inappropriate. It probably isn’t a wise thing of Tina to be drinking when she will be interrogated later on. Will she slip up? Oh, I loved Jenny in your story…most of the time she was in coma and now she’s dead. I hope you’ll be able to update one of your stories before you leave for your trip. :D
uh oh – poor JennyI loved the telephone scene. Alice is too funny. And Duran Duran! Yay – yet another happy place. I need to go put in “Rio” now. Also a great comeback by Dana. That guy is such a jerk.
I almost wish bette did it, just b/c i like that in a woman, all initiative, I’m kid i kid, I like’d this update, let’s hope Carmen doesn’t kill hsane eh? and I’d definitly like to see tina shit faced and talking to the police. does anyone else think that josh got what he deserved? great update keep’em coming of course much love CD :D
Hi sugar… glad you had time to write, lol. I know what it’s like to have your time divided and it makes it hard pursue your passions. You had me wondering who killed Josh… still do but at least now I know it wasn’t Bette. I know if I played my cards right with you… you’d tell me, lol. Can I charm it out of you, sugar? Damn… your sarcasm has some bite. Remind me to never get on your bad side, lol. I loved that Dunne got his and in such a bad way.. lmao. The phone games between Alice and Dana was funny too. I know Helena has to have a big part in this but I’ll be damned if I know what it is. Guess I’ll just have to wait with the rest of your adoring fans… but remember I’m your biggest fan. The childhood song… was it one of your’s? That whole Shane scene was a little freaky…. with the way things are going you have me wondering if she the next to die. Is she going to die? Poor Carmen is so confused and has to make a decision… the right decision. So is it too much to hope for… Jenny dead, lol. Is she going to the big carnival in the sky… and be the sideshow that no one wants to see? lol. Now I know how much I mean to you… you give me what I want and good deeds get rewarded in my book. Your stories continue to keep me entertained and I can’t wait for you to reveal more to me. I hope you’re not too busy to post before you leave on that trip. I love you sugar… looking forward to inspiring you on future chapters.
NO … NO vacation … that’s just wrong. Work can wait … more fanfic please!!!
Looks like someone else got to Jenny first. Bette seems to be running up against a brick wall when it comes to covering her tracks. I still think Tina is the one that killed Josh. Maybe she should get a hold of Bette to help cover for her.
Who the hell is killing him and Jenny, I think Candace is still alive and she is hidding and now she going to make Bette pay. Ok post soon please, thanks!
wow I missed so much when I was away – 2 deaths!!! very exciting and i still love the Dana/Alice banter – they’re such a great couple. Am so intrigued to find out where this story is heading, I’m well and truly hooked – to the point that I’m literally sat on the edge of my seat. Can’t wait till the next update – love it!
I have the warm fuzzies for Alice – she’s ultra yummy. Jenny’s gone bye-bye – poor Jenny. Could it be there’s more to this Dunne character – hmm? Always a fun read – thanks.
Great update! I loved it. I really liked the part with Dana and Dunne. Dana got all authoritative. That was awesome. Amazing job. I love Danish. brunettegirl mentioned an AA type of program for those obssessed with Danish…I’ve looked for one but was unsuccessful. I guess that I’ll just have to continue being obssessed with Danish. Oh well. I just took the first step didn’t I? I admitted that I have a problem. I guess that it’s pretty counter productive if I’m okay with having the problem. What can you do though? Oh I know…read more Danish stuff. Yours just happens to be some of my absolute favorite. Way to feed my obssession! I can’t wait for more. I love your work!
I…I ..! UPDATE SOOOON lol awesome!
Is Tina the murderer? What is everyone hiding? Did Dana get a good look at the ‘nurse’/killer? I can’t wait until you bring it all together and reveal all the mysteries. You never disappoint CD. Thanks for posting. Enjoy your trip, but think of exciting plot twists in your down time lol. Thanks CD
ooooh… Jenny’s dead!! muahaha… There goes the lead. I hope Shane is alright. And your Alice sure is smart… I am loving her.
Damn I didn’t want Jenny to die. She always seems to get the shaft in FF. :( I really think B&T need to have some super hot sex before someone gets arrested. lol@Alice singing Duran Duran.
ok u talk about 9 pages and all i get is 2!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! come on!!!!!! 14 that is more like it jenny has to die in sombody reailty whoooooooooooo i knew bette was no killer longer cause that was way to short
why does tina need an alibi????? hmmm makes you think she did something suspicious
Hey! I`m so sorry I didn`t leave a comment on your previous (I think there were two) chapters, but I was kinda busy and made a short trip to Hamburg (if you know that city in Germany)! Anyway, first of all… Congratulations to the award, I`m so happy for you and I`d like to say “thank you” for your great story and for sharing it with us! I don`t think I have to tell you once again, that this is my favorite story at the moment, but I do *lol* So yeah, well, this was an awesome part, I really loved it! But awww, poor Shaney, I hope Carmen will be able to help her. And I think Tina did it, didn`t she?? And Dana and Al were so cute, I like them together! Wow, I`m dying to know where all of this is going so please continue (if you can, before your vacation *smile*, but if not… enjoy it (if that is possible))! OMG, sorry for my bad English… usually I don`t write so much, but that story of yours is just so good, I have to write more ;-)
oh boy! okay now i am pretty convinced that it is tina whos killing everyone…i think…or maybe helena??? *sigh* you truely are amazing! and im thinking that dunne should DEFINATLY be the next to go!! i mean come on…well great job no matter who you kill! (but uh, i have to say…when you killed jenny…THANK GOD!!) *cough* excuse me for that. uh…time to go!
Oh man, so many fine details in this update. Duran Duran great memories and Dana putting Dunne in his place…I was laughing so hard! And Jenny’s dead mmm I nice thing to think about when you’re away. Hope you can update one more time before you have to go. If not then have a nice trip. Great update as ever.
Oh babe…this kicked so much ass! Man this is good shit. Damnit…I knew that Jenny wasn’t gonna make it…but I hoped anyway. Crackin me up with the Duran Duran song too! LOL Too funny. I also loved the part where Dana puts that asshole dunne in his place. When is he gonna get knocked off??? LOL. This was amazing as always. And I was LMFAO when I read your shout out to B double three! HAHAHA. You’re awesome CD :D Thanks for the update. Post again berfore you leave!!! On both stories! Oh. Glad your back is better too :-)
WOW!!! I wasn’t expecting Jenny to die! I was kind of expecting to be Shane, but she’s one of the main characters, so that’s out of the question! LoL..Bette’s about to snap if she doesn’t get her act together..As for Alice and Dana, I hope they work out. And who’s doing all the killing?? That’s a question that’s going to linger in my mind until we get to the end!! Thanks again ClosetDana…
CD! You know, I know that I already praised you on this chapter, but I just realized that I never left an offical comment! Oops! This chapter was awesome, like ALWAYS! Gosh, your writing ability makes me so fucking jealous! My jaw literally dropped at the ending! Ha ha. Can’t wait to read next chapter, so please post it soon! I know that you are crazy busy, but please? For me? (I’m literally pouting at my computer) Ok, now I’m going to go. I keep saying literally, and it’s starting to bother me. It reminds me of Erin CONSTANTLY saying “For the record…” during the season two commentary! Not that she bugged me through it, I just kept laughing, but- Ok, I’m gonna stop rambling now! Love you CD! :-)
Finally caught up on the chapters I’ve missed. Holy Crap! the shit has definitely hit the fan. Congrats on your fan fic win. Have to comment on a previous chap, about Jenny waking up & talking about carnivals… fucking hilarious. At first I thought it was Tina who shot Josh now I’m leaning towards Helena. I hope Shane doesn’t need to be hospitalized. Luv this fic, will keep track of the body count.
Great Chapter ClosetDana. =)Can’t wait to read the next.
Another great story…you rock and you always leave me wanting more :). You are staying true to the characters, which is great. Being a huge Danish fan, I am enjoying the balance in thier relationship and it also doesn’t hurt to picture Dana as an Agent, with Alice in tow…Keep It Coming!