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Breathe– Chapter 29
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“What about roof access?” Bette asked, wanting to make sure that every possible avenue to Tina had been blocked.
The hotel manager nodded, realizing he had forgotten another detail. “We have cancelled all routine maintenance requiring roof access.” He shook his head as if overwhelmed by the level of precautions they were needing to put in place.
“We’ve padlocked the stairwell doors below and above the suite floor. You do realize,” he paused hoping the detective would take his next comment in the spirit it was intended, “locking those doors violates every fire code in the book. If there is a fire, you’ll be trapped.”
Understanding and appreciating his concern she responded “It’s an acceptable risk. We’ll need to have keys to those locks on the floor at all times. No one makes copies. No employee has a set. Is that understood?” Bette asked her meaning clear in her tone.
“Of course,” he said sharply. “But I hope you know we take great pride in the quality of our employees. I can assure you that none would willingly be party to an assault on one of our guests,” he finished strongly but began to wither under Bette’s intent gaze.
“We’ll get you the only set of keys,” he added quickly, wanting the dark-eyed detective to fix her eyes on anything but him.
Bette looked at the stack of keys in her hands and at Tina. “Do the keys work now?” she asked wanting to move Tina to a more secure location as soon as possible.
He nodded. Understanding that Bette wanted access to the Olympic Suite now, he nodded toward the bags and added. “I will have a bellman bring those up for you.”
“No,” Bette said more sharply than she intended. “No employees on the floor. We’ll take the bags.”
Seymore nodded embarrassed that he had overlooked the established protocol so quickly. “I’m sorry Detective, this isn’t our area of expertise.”
Bette looked at Captain Benson and then said “I’m going to get Tina settled and then I’ll be back down.”
He nodded and looked into Tina’s exhausted, fragile face. “We’re going to get this man Tina. I promise you.” She offered him a half smile, trying to draw strength from his confidence.
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Sox, gotta tell you I just love this story. Always did like a could mystery filled with suspence along with some love thrown in. Can’t wait till Bette gets this guy.
Excellent as always!. Im loving this suspense.
LOVE IT, thks for the post…
very very good chapter as always!!! i have 1 question tho when this guy gets caught r u gonna continue with the story or r u gonna end it?
O.K. SOX FABULOUS JOB ON THIS CHAPTER…I MAY HAVE TO GO BACK AND RE-READ SO I CAN SEE IF I CAN FIND THAT PLANTED SEED….HEHEHHEHHEH….THANKS YOU………
Thanks for the post Sox1. You’ve made my day. Four pages! Excellent as always.
Just 3 words FAB – U – LOUS!!! This is a really good chapter! You put it together very nicely. I cannot help but move to the end of my seat as I read each f your chapters. LOL! That’s definitely a good thing! Keep it up! I am loving every word of it!
Sox, another fabulous addition to your story.
Let me say that I so enjoy the balance of B&T’s relationship with the suspense of the mystery. You have successfully maintained the balance in a way I have seen very few accomplish.
Thanks for letting me know that our Bette may not be leaving the force upon conclusion of this matter. I can begin to prepare my mind for that.
I should have brought this up sometime around Chapter 7 or 8, but I felt too embarrassed. Sometimes the details that I fixate on are so small, it seems like a bother to ask you about them. But with much delay, Is Tina also wearing Bette’s shoes? When she found Marcey at the apt, she was coming in from work, as such wearing her shoes. She then travels to Bette’s, but Bette did not grab any of her things from the apt. She’s wearing Bette’s clothes to date, although they don’t really fit. But is she wearing her own shoes, which I would imagine still have blood stains on them. I know it’s trivial, but as I envision the story and chain of events that detail keeps popping in my mind. You can e-mail me and tell me to get over it if you want my address is moho747@aol.com
Alright, back to our current chapter. I am starting to piece together the information that you have provided about our killer to date and juxtapose it against what we know about the others. Let the fun continue!
Thank You.
SOx..it gets better and better. I am with marsupial and need to go back and read. Maybe in the early day not at night. HMMmm..you keep us hanging on.
INSERT VERY LOUD SCREAM HERE! I Love this story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I may also have to go back and re-read; especially if you’re dropping clues and we missed them!
well damn. im not in the minority. im going to reread also. i cant believe i missed your little seeds. this is SO good. i love how you weave b/t relaionship iwth the case. so we get to have both experiences. excellent. you are a master. and im asking also. when you end this story are you gonna start another or what. you cant just stop!!! what b&tf said. remember to look us up. thanks sox.
intense!!! every single word..every single plot and of coz with all the love that makes B&T close. SUPERB!!
I really look forward to reading this story – excellent, as always…great suspense!
Wonderful as always, lots of drama please post soon!!!
I remember in one chapter that he was standing in front of the newpaper waiting for the ink to dry, Is he a reporter This was a great chapter. thanks
Firste of all Sox let me say thank you for posting this amazing story here. I have finally finished the story..it only took me 2 days…but it was so amazing, brilliant, excellent, fantastic, dramatic just full of everything. By Jesus reading each and everyone of your chapters is like watching a movie….this is quality sox…you really know your stuff. I´m so tired right now but I wantet to finish your wonderful crimestory here and tell you how much I do admirer your writing skills….keep going you´re doing fantastic. Post soon
I’m absolutely enthralled with your story. Excellent writing; I lovit!
Freaking amazing as usual! You have completely boggled my mind. I have no idea who this guy could be. I’m worried that Bette’s zipcode epiphany is misleading because didn’t the guy wait for the newspaper to be delivered to him? I read each chapter with bated breath and absolutley amazed at how intricate your story is. I can’t wait for more!
wonderful as always. I still can’t figure out how he is following them but I don’t think he’s a cop. I will follow you wherever whenever you post. You rock.
This story continues to boggle the mind in its intensity, suspense, attention to detail and expanding depth.
The way that you so innocently interject the subtle details that we will need to recall later is amazing.
Of course we read about how the killer knew which papers were delivered first and which papers might carry a headline if one of the others didn’t…we (and I actually mean myself) were just so taken by your masterful storytelling that it became circumstantial. Brilliant, just brilliant!! I am now looking for my magnifying glass so that I can go back and comb through the previous chapters to see what else you have left for us to discover.
Love isn’t ruled by a timeline. In Bette and Tina’s case it is moving with blistering speed, catapulted by a common trauma – but cheered on by their soul’s destiny. In the end it will be their triumph over this tradedy and the joy in the mundane daily routines that will keep them grounded, knowing that they were the lucky ones.
If the killer was able to reach Tina that easily, I’m surprised that Bette hasn’t thought that he could be watching her.
How many officers were at Tina’s door when the newspaper was delivered? Will there be more than one at the suite in case one of them has to go downstairs to retrieve a delivery? What sort of system of checks and balances are in place to make sure that badges are not counterfeited as well? Wouldn’t it be a good idea to have someone in the vacant suite that’s on the same floor to avoid the possibility of someone getting to Tina from there? What does the killers wife do for a living, could she be an unwitting pawn in this game of his?
Oh the questions…and oh, the delight in seeing all of this unfold!!
A truly engaging story each and every time, Sox. If it were a book, it would be on the top of my best seller list! A ‘must read’, if you will.
I’m finally caught up, but now I may need to go back and start trying to figure out all the clues you left behind. I’m thinking this has to be an inside job, because the killer knows too much to be an outsider. Great job on keeping this suspenceful? Kiitos!
I’m on the edge of my desk chair, truly. You are doing a great job telling this story and getting me all anxious. I kept thinking when they were describing the inaccessibility of the new room – “it’s a Tina trap!” Kind of like the “panic room”. Guess I’ll just have to wait and see.
Oh, and I love the B&T romance.
Chinatown! Chinatown! Chinatown!
I am in such a state of anxiety, feeling that Tina is in peril and Bette may be powerless to save her. I was right there with Bette. Could history repeat itself?
Anguish, I tell you!!! LOL! (at myself)
Forget it Techie, it’s Chinatown…
last night i was aimlessly surfing the fan fiction section, looking to see if the regular authors that I followed post their stories. I found no posting that I wanted to read and idly I clicked on your last posting, chapter 29. And my aimless late night surfing was not the least dissapointing.
Your writing style and the way the story is delivered have captured my attention. so when I was finished with your last chapter, I enthusiastically read your story from the beginning and spend the next 3-5 hours into the wee mornings following your dramatic, detailed ambience and meticulous description of the story. Now, I haven’t been in Seattle but I live just about 3 hours up north of the border and found that yes, I could picture the soothing beauty of the lakes and feel the ambience to be quite similar. Hee hee and I happened to be a big fan of sherlock holmes and CSI. If I were to permanently reside in north america, I’d probably taken up a criminology job just cause. And I’ve always loved wordless communication, where 2 people just get each other and able to put words to the things that was unspoken, even finishing each other’s sentences. Now that, I’d call soulmates or simply, someone who is utterly selfless that s/he is able to gaze to the other person’s being. I apologized for not leaving comments on each chapter, I thought it was unnecessary as I was getting myself up to speed with your stories.
By the way, I found the balance between the drama and the rather gruesome forensic details to be well jugled, not to mention adding a gist of romance and playfulness here and there made it all rounded and just right. Excellent job and I’ve enjoyed each of your postings.
great post!!!!!!!! he won’t give up so easy bette!!!!!
Nice long chapter – which I loved – thanks!.
So much in here. It’s got so much texture and complexity. I can understand that Tina doesn’t want Bette to continue in the Police but after this. I’m not sure that Bette will be able to continue – at least in the serious crime unit. She seems to have joined the force for one reason but that intrinsic reason will have disappeared when this case is over. Will she be able to maintain the distance needed to function in that environment after this case and the changes she has undergone. She is obviously struggling now.
I know Bette seems to have the hotel covered but why am I thinking that “he” will get to Tina? Am I paranoid?
Again really wonderful.
Bette is good and can’t wait to see Bette catch that baster!