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Carnal Pursuits
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She smiles and reaches into the saddlebag for the whiskey and takes a sip. ”Be what? Instantly into you? That doesn’t happen often and you’ll just have to trust me on that. Not since my twenties, and please don’t ask for their names, because I’ve forgotten them in a blur of that one year of college, when I was certain I was having a nervous breakdown.”
”A real nervous breakdown? Or a final exams nervous breakdown?”
She stares at me and shrugs her shoulders.
My next question is tinged with suspicion. ”Okay,…well,….years later then, I’d like to hope, believe really, that I’m an exception and you don’t fuck everybody you pass or don’t pass messages to within the first two hours of meeting them.”
”Bette, I’m virginal when I’m in Washington, a city of the worst gossips on earth! It’d be career suicide if I weren’t.”
Time to believe her temptress nature is mostly under wraps, or not. ”I’ll never forget the dress you were wearing, but Baby, you had me at Burning Man. I’ve always wanted to do something like that.”
At this idea she lets loose a playful laugh. ”Doctor Porter, I’m definitely your guide to Burning Man, but back to your earlier fantasy of me, am I a Russian spy or one of us?”
”American,” I whisper down her neck, ”which gave me some comfort, but I’m certain we’re cruel, too.”
Coy and biting her bottom lip, she pulls my shirt tails out and runs her nails up my back. ”Even with suspicions of how dangerous I might be, Doctor Porter, you still invited me here.”
”Do that harder and something will happen.”
With a quick intake of her breath she opens her mouth to my kiss.
Minutes pass under an ocean wave of losing ourselves in each other, when she breaks our kiss and says, ”Bette, the fire needs more wood.”
Squatting down and pitching logs onto the flames I see her pulling her riding boots back on after pulling her blue jeans off. I toss the last log on, as she turns to warm her bare bottom next to me.
The firelight plays on her loins as she brushes her fingers over her small triangle patch of red hair and in the next moment, I’m tasting her. Warm and slightly salty.
”You’ve been too far away from my body…all week long,” she mummers to me.
I slip my coat off my shoulders and lay it on the floor in front of the fire. ”You are so beautiful,” I whisper to her, before taking her again with the licks of my tongue.
She reaches for my hand and guides me under her blouse to feel her twisting her nipple. I pinch it a few times, hard then soft, and leave a wet trail from my tongue licking up her belly to her breasts. She pops open the bra clasp between them,”I love you here, too,” she says with a purr at the back of her throat. ”In carnal pursuit…Bette, that’s the perfect description of you.”
I whisper to her, ”And you are my seductress.”
She pulls me up from her breast by the chin – to almost kissing her lips. ”You mean like this? You touch my lips and you have to take it all.”
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Stay tuned for Chapter 5.
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Hi, Command:
Very nice chapter, you are nurturing my curiosity on what Bette would do after the inauguration, I’m curious, also, about what is Maria pursuing in this context; why did she meet Bette? It should have to be with the fact that Bette is a neurosurgeon and has a theory about the elections, but what is what Maria wants about that? Does she have the other piece of the puzzle to complete Bette’s theory? What is the message she has for her?
Anyway, I think I have to wait until next chapter to find out. Thanks for posting I will wait anxiously for the next post.
P
Proteonomics, To me this chapter became one where I developed a sense of the emptiness and unusualness of a Saturday afternoon by using contrasts of the normally busy barn to create a sense of standstill. A sense that everyone and everything is holding its breath.
Bette fills the few paragraphs with metaphorical descriptions of this, taking our camera eye of her POV on a view of her surroundings, before her mind begins to focus on a new angle she believes leads to how we got here. So, the chapter became next about giving personal background to Maria and Bette.
There was a second where I could have had Maria blurt out what the message summoning Bette to the Tabard Inn had been about, but instead they had, what I hope is an amusing exchange of Bette’s suspicions. Her outburst is followed by Maria’s face frozen in a mask of quizzical shock, I think is how I put it. They remedy their tension with a nice love scene and we leave them for the moment…
Which is also to say, yes, it’s time in the next chapter to lay out some spy story plot structure and get them into a planning mindset.
My thanks always for your reading and comments.
I’ve been waiting for this update and as usual you did not disappoint! Julianne Moore is gorgeous! PPS
Tee,
However one writes a growling sound in text is how I hope readers feel about her, and when their magic happens, about her and Bette. If you had a moment, I’m interested in your thoughts about their ‘getting to know one another’ conversation. As they begin their outward adventure we’ll get to know them better with more biographical details.
As you know writing this story in the first person POV allows me to have Bette tell us anything she wishes, but details surrounding Maria come through her telling us in dialogue, or from someone she knows, also in dialogue. It is possible, and I considered this last night after arriving at my Spring Vacation spot and settling into a house in the woods, I could do a whole chapter with Maria narrating. It’s called a ‘head-pop’ in fiction writing and absolutely can’t be done with two characters revealing their inner thoughts in the same chapter, unless there’s a definite break in action/location, but it’s best if one person tells the story, thus the (somewhat) dilemma of fleshing out Maria’s character.
To that end, I don’t see Bette as the type to snoop around and look for details about Maria, it would disappoint me if she did! Unless, Maria got into trouble then, I could see it as an act of desperation, but only then.
Thanks for reading and commenting. My apologies for the few errors that remain unfixed in the story, but the site keeps 504 timing me out whenever I attempt to edit and correct the commas I didn’t see when proofreading the first eight times, and a word or two I saw as typos.
Blackbird
So im assuming Bette is very discrete about her sexual encounters? Im mean she’s a gorgeous single surgeon and Maria couldn’t find anything about her? Bette appeared to be a very private person on the show. I’m liking the idea of fleshing out Maria’s character. She’s gorgeous and fun and good for her although I love Tina. We know Bette is a very focused woman but in this story and on the show we know she’s at her best when she has someone to balance her out and Maria is doing just that. She’s bringing out the naughty and charming side of Bette.
Each chapter gets better! No pressure! lol
Hello Command / Blackbird,
Great chapter! I like the first person POV, especially when Bette tells us everything she wishes.
Maria does bring out the naughty and charming side of Bette , i agree with Tee about that. But i already pointed out that i prefer Tina, but i must admit that Maria is a interesting woman and i like how they get to know each other, it is somewhat playful.
Is there any chance that you wil finish the story you wrote as Blackbird?
I am looking forward to the next update!
By the story I wrote under Blackbird, do you mean my imagining The L Word’s Season 7, if it had continued? “Touch Tones” was the title of my vision for them. God! Thinking back that was so much fun to write without having to stick to the scripted show and its constraints and attendant neuroses. It was relief to have Bette and Tina at peace and not unraveled by annoying characters like Jenny and Jodie ad nauseam.
Remember Bette’s cowboy boots? She wouldn’t take them off, until Tina insisted she absolutely could not wear them in bed. I think she tried to anyway.
Sure, I’ll get back to Touch Tones one day. Right now, I’m in the thriller mode with Doctor Porter about to get into something out of her control.
Yes, that is the story! You had much fun to write it, but i had much more fun to read it!
Ooh and Bette’s cowboy boots, those i wil never ever forget, priceless ????
I am happy that you will get back to it after this thriller.
Can i assume that you have a Spring vacation! If so, enjoy your vacation.