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“Shane. Please come in…could you put that out?”
“Not till I am done.”
“Ok…l will leave the door open…”
Man this lady is serious. I flick my smoke into the street and I walk into her house. There are all these fancy paintings on the walls and I wonder if she paints in her off time. She smells like fancy perfume and expensive skin lotion. I like it. Then again Carmen liked it too. I look at the lady as she sits on her expensive sofa and wonder what the F.B.I. pays her. I look at her some more and notice that she is pretty hot. in a fancy way.
“So ….?” I say.
“I just wanted to say that I am sorry…really sorry that Carmen is dead. She was…very….special…and I know that you don’t know me…but I knew her very well…she was my student…”
“And you fucked her….”
“Yes we were lovers at one time…”
“What was she like?”
“I don’t know what you mean?”
“As a agent…was she good at her job?”
“Carmen was one of the best behavioral profilers I have ever met.”
“Yeah……….. great then why didn’t ….she know he was gonna kill her…?”
I couldn’t help it…I didn’t have anyone to talk about this with no one knew what I felt for her…no one knew what it was like to kiss her, feel her, what it was like to make her laugh…what it was like…to be in love with her…but this lady knew. I could see it in her. This crying thing was making me feel like a complete fucking loser. I just was not the type of person who cried in front of people[le let alone people I have just met.
“Hey…I know that she loved you a lot…”
“Why am I here…?”
“Shane…why did you come back here? Why not stay and take care of the little boy…don’t you think you own that to her?”
“What are you her mom…you don’t know anything about me…”
“Your right. But you still haven’t answered my question…why come back?…You got away…you are no longer a part of this world why come back?”
“Because it’s the life…”
“Look Shane…I shouldn’t even be talking to you…but things are not the way they where when you left…your little crew…the small games you played nothing is like that now…there are very serious consequences for someone like you being back…you know that every one knows about Havoc and Carmen, go back home to Florida raise that kid forget this life..”
“You don’t get it…this is my life…that whole thing with her…the happy ever after. all that shit….. its bullshit…this…” I point to my scar on my chin. I lift up my t-shirt. I point to the scars. “ This is what I know. This is my life. And all that love and all I can ask myself since I watched her die…the one question I have about myself…about where I fit in this fucked cracked marble…the question…more of a statement…more of idea…a mantra that won’t get out of my skull. I felt so much love for her…so why do I want to do so much damage now?”
The fancy lady with the expensive perfume her silky legs…her smooth demeanor…her wavy hair she didn’t have an answer…
TBC
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And you were not even sure whether you should post this or not??? Are you insane? This is FANTASTIC!!!! I love your writing style, I love the story and very happy your continuing with it! Please update soon, I can’t wait for more!
dont ever hesitate to post anything you write! great job!
OOhh so amazing!! I really thought I had read the last of this story, but you have no idea how happy I am that I haven’t!!! In my opinion, this is THE best fic I’ve ever read about these two. I love it!! And you totally made my day.
Gotta agree w/ Bigprisc let Carmen live, witness protection or somethin’. Glad you’re continuing this. I know whatever you have in store will be worth the read.
Yeah, you can bring Carmen back from the dead [switches to uber-geek-mode] like that X-Files episode where that guy was a walking, talking tumor and he could just grow another body that could be killed to escape the feds. You know the episode, right? [switches back to average-geek-mode] I’m kidding, that would just not fit into this story at all (but witness protection, as 2BMe mentioned, sounds plausible). Anywho, the story is great. I’ll be honest, it has a different feel to it, knowing that Carmen is dead, but it’s still awesome. I, too, would like to thank alkaline for encouraging New Dawn Fades to post, because NDF can rock a mean story, and it would have been a shame if it had stayed hidden in some laptop. Thanks to you both.
Oh my god! This is fantastic… I hope you don’t make Shane fuck Bette though… It is just wrong. I hope miraculously, Carmen appears from the dead or something… Please… you know like something from one of those weird ass movies… Thanks for this.
Love that you are continuing this storyline. I can’t wait to see what you have planned!
Well fuck me sideways…This is all because of me? That made me so unbelievebly happy to hear…I’m also really excited that you decided to continue this story, because I love it. You are my favorite writer, so please don’t ever hesitate to post anything, ever, because it’s pretty much guarunteed that I will love it. I also figure that I should ask for some more NC-17 stories because maybe this request will make you write another amazing fic like this one. And to everyone who reads this story, there’s no need to thank me…
YAY YOU’RE BACK! I express my happiness in a little jig *does happy jig* i’m looking forward to the rest of this saga you’ve conjured up (did i spell that right?) good job right off the bat keep it coming…